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The elements of harmony have been a tool used by the rulers of Equestria; Celestia, Luna and their brother Terren.
The elements have always chosen Equestria's new bearers and now they have chosen six little fillies. But questions abound, can these warriors, these bearers of the elements control their new powers, or will they become overwhelmed with the responsibility when an old darkness comes out of the shadows.
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An interesting AU so far. There are a few spelling errors, but I guess that doesn't matter a lot since the main thing is the comic you're making.
I have to point out how much "Brother/Sister" is said, while it makes sense that royals actually call each other that, it's a bit too much. How often do you say someones name in a conversation?
You tend to use a word many times in a short period of time, and have characters do two things at once.
This is not a big deal, but if you hadn't noticed, you can now look out for it.
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I see that. 😆 will fix before posting when I do.
Thanks for the feedback.
Another good story. Plus an interesting concept that the elements were groomed too. Be heroes. Not some random people picked off the street. Plus the added caveat that they were people before them and they have some kind of cosmic connection now. Cannot wait to see what happens next.
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Thanks... working on the comic version so this will be updated slowly...