Anyone interested in some chaos? Really, I have too much.
It began as a war, a simple desire to capture the whole Equestria, but when Chrysalis reached Canterlot, her plans slightly changed. Now she didn't want the Equestiria or the Canterlot, all she wanted is the mare behind the defences.
Written for the Crackship contest.
At first it may seem like not a crackship fic, but it is one.
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Why would we think this isn't a crackship at first?
Am I the only one who didn't understand what exactly happened at the end?
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Sorry. It's my fault. I rushed this fic so I could fit into the contest time and came out like this.
well, for once i might have suggested more exposition to orient the reader to the situation in this world! i tried to map these happenings onto Chrysalis right before the invasion in the Season 2 finale, but that doesn't quite fit, does it? it feels more like an AU, or Equestria at War, which i've never played
aww, this was a cute detail
and it's interesting to portray Celestia as a mirror image of Chrysalis here! both very mean and arrogant toward their "subordinates", both distracted from their very real duties. i am with the general wondering what happened to the kind princess at the end!
ah, so that's why! well, that is certainly a fun twist, and really brings to mind the less-than-all-there Chrysalis we've seen in the canon:
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and indeed, this would even count as a selfcest ship!
again, the ideas are good, but it feels like this fic takes its core ideas and then connects them clumsily. Chrysalis at war with Canterlot and in communication with Celestia, Celestia acting strangely Chrysalis-like while commanding Canterlot, then the reveal of mirror Chrysalis are the three pieces. if each were developed more (with show, not tell!), and everything else were cut down to a minimum except for what would enhance the irony of the reveal, then this would be improved.
but as always, it's good to see you writing. keep it up!