Pinkie always does everything she can to make friends, to make someone happy, no matter who they are. No matter what are the costs...
Written for A Thousand Words contest. I guess it qualifies as experimental
Anyone interested in some chaos? Really, I have too much.
Pinkie always does everything she can to make friends, to make someone happy, no matter who they are. No matter what are the costs...
Written for A Thousand Words contest. I guess it qualifies as experimental
Well, you weren't lying when you said this was a bit experimental. Definitely a bit of an odd story, but not to its detriment, I don't think. You had an interesting premise, and the execution was pretty good. I think it might have been a bit better if you'd kept the situation a bit more vague, especially with regards to Pinkie's new friend, in order to let the reader's imagination run wild a bit more. As it is, it wasn't bad, and made good use of the word limit.
Perfectly Pinkie. Who else could or would do this sort of thing with a psychopomp? The text isn't especially experimental, but this is still a lovely demonstration of her at her best. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
Ooh I would love to see another part to this.
great first line! the contrast in the two events already makes it intriguing
and ooh, there is something really cool about this! that disassociative feeling but put into prose
ah, fascinating explanation! fits both all the weird stuff that a mind gets up to when shutting down, as well as an ad hoc system of an afterlife
aww, i wouldn't either!
aww, that is so Pinkie Pie! even when she is dying she has to help the skeleton creature stuck between realms. augh, i love her
i really like this sentence! the repetition of the words gives it a really fun and poetic feel
so true
augh, Pinkie is the best! and for some reason it's only now that i realized this pony is a skeleton pony, even though you did describe them as such earlier. that is such a cute mental image!
aww, her friends are bringing her back!
never expected a story about Pinkie almost dying from choking on her favorite dessert to be so heartwarming
augh, that is really neat! i love that Pinkie being resuscitated would be like her "dying" from the perspective of this in-between world. and that mental image of Pinkie doing her best to "die" a bit more just to give the skeleton pony a proper goodbye is just too great!
DC, this was really good! the idea was both strong and clever, juxtaposing the qualities of Pinkie Pie and the grimness of almost choking to death, and the execution really saw it through, keeping its focus on the characters and being a particularly great depiction of the goodness of Pinkie Pie. i thoroughly enjoyed this one. please write more like it!