I'll go ahead and say I gave it a shot to read this, but didn't complete it about almost half way. i think I had like, 5 chapters left.

This story is full of filler content, so much that I could've used the text-to-speech to know when the story moved on while I watch TV.

It got boring, dude.

My recommendation is to try your best at not taking this route. Just only in some cases where you really can't think of what else to say in the scene. And if you do end up taking this route, be concise!

If they are having breakfast or dinner, you can just say what they made and move on with the story. Unless you have a way with words and can effectively make the story move along, I don't need to know how they made Foie gras or Eggs Benedict.

Lastly, I noticed your writing style. It looks like your writing is informative. You only describe actions as if you were a live commentator. Put some meaning behind your words. Doesn't have to be all the time, but it matters. When I read it, it's like listening to a robot. Make it sound more human, like if you were telling co workers a dramatic story about your Aunt's jerk boyfriend in the smoking area.

That's all. Take this however you feel.

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Thank you, I'll take the words under consideration.