Set ten years after the events of Fallout: Equestria, a near-adult colt is forced to help save his home when the quickly-changing wasteland comes to the Palomino in force. Be it warlords, crazed motor-junkie raiders, or an unstoppable tide of mummified ghouls, the odds are ultimately against him.
This is my first-ever long term project! I've been a fan of Fallout: Equestria for a while now, but I never had the time to write something lengthy for it. That changes today.
Fallout: Equestria is written by Kkat. Go read it!
Chapters (3)
The biggest mistake most writers that try and write FO:E make is going overboard in the first five minutes.
And having terrible punctuation and grammar.
I aint seeing none of that, although I think getting a Pip-boy right from the off is a tad cliché for someone not from a Stable. Having said that it's a good introduction and explanation to the why's of why things are they way they are. Desert settings don't do a lot for me so it's not a story I'll really be into, even if it might touch upon almost New Vegas or Mad Max style aspects, but I wish you luck.
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It's a work in progress, for sure. Glad to hear it reads well, though! Thanks for the comment!
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To add, you avoided the first largest most glaring mistake right from the off that even made me consider reading:
It's
Fallout: Equestria -
and not
Fallout Equestria:
Seriously. That matters a lot. Maybe it's autism, maybe it's Maybelline, but it really matters.
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I did that, though! For some reason when it was going through the submission process, it got changed :s
I'm not gonna argue with the very kind story approver
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Oh no I was saying you got it right lol, congrats on that, in the title. I thought perhaps it occurring again was a simple mistake.
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fix'd
This certainly looks intriguing. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
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Thank you! I've got a lot of ideas I want to get out, but I'm taking it one chapter at a time hahah
The premise is interesting and I dig the world building a lot.
Only thing I disliked was how you wrote Snowcone's accent. It's hard to read and a bit jarring, but overall fairly minor.
Now for some details that I've noticed:
Should be "stallion"
Also, that should be "affect"
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fix'd, thanks for the comment!
Awww... But I made radroach taquitos and horchata
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Taquitos?!
... Alright, you can be forgiven. Don't forget those taq's, though.
I actually really like the prologue, it properly sets the scene for the story.
Humpback, a good word for camels of questionable intelligence. And I see that Rhapsody is a less charming Windstriker, with no wings or stripes I have to assume.
And he's wrong, that is a very relevant and tense discussion towards the end. Must say that I am very interested in what the NCR is doing in these parts and how they operate.
All in all, plenty of interesting tidbits to keep the reader engaged, even as our young narrator is oblibious to the world around him.
This is a super cute lead in ^^
very cute chapter