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Sunset lost friendship

discord is summoned by the friendship map to help sunset,
After the girls hurt sunset over Anon-a-Miss sunset is badly hurt.
She is lost in her mind trying to escape the pain and only discord who understands her pain will be able to save the day

Chapters (4)

1 · 12th Mar 2021 · 1,085 words
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2 · 4th Jun 2021 · 1,043 words
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3 · 16th Jun 2021 · 1,025 words
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4 · 23rd Jun 2021 · 1,005 words
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eiggengrau

eiggengrau #1 · Apr 4th, 2023 · · · 1 ·

Hey, Theresa. In your AN you say "I will take ideas for the story" -- I think you have some good ideas right here. The writing could improve (i'm sorry! don't be discouraged! keep going!) but putting words together is the easy part. Coming up with ideas is the hard part and, I'll say it again, you've got some good ideas here. For example:

Discord being the hero for Sunset -- not a typical pair up, i like it
Twilight in the time out corner (i did that too, LOLOL, even made her wear a pointy hat)
Unicorn Trauma causes dangerous power surges -- interesting mechanic

Anyway, good luck, keep writing!

Theresa

Theresa #2 · Apr 4th, 2023 · · · 1 ·

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Truthfully I got stuck and with the only thing people could comment on was how I wrote it was pretty discouraging. I admit that I'm not great but can't anyone besides you go easy on the author. Find something good to say as well.