For most of her life, Ditzy had low self-esteem due to her lazy eye. An unfortunate condition simply because of the attention it brought her, it had little to no impact on her actual sight.
A few stallions came to take advantage of Ditzy's kindness and low self-esteem, praying on her insecurities just to get a night of fun. Those days however are gone since one of these nights of fun led to the birth of Ditzy's most precious treasure, her daughter Dinky.
Despite being extremely clumsy, she knew she was a good pony, a good friend, and did her best to be the best mother she could. And since Dinky was born, Ditzy had come to terms with her eye condition and self-esteem. Or so she thought. As it turns out, traumas can be ignored, but they don't magically disappear.
why the rewrite, if i may ask
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To better guide the story to where I want it to go, maybe improve Ditzy's and Limestone's depiction and make some other minor changes/improvements.
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okay
So it was a fast long time? True... mailponies might graded on speed. Might be typo.
cakes might need capitalisation
Looks a little disjointed here.
Still the same tangled ball of negativity as the first time around...
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Thanks for the feedback, I'll fix those mistakes asap.
As for the negativity part, it wasn't done for negativity's sake. I plan to explore the reasons on why Derpy acted like that, and it will be sad because it's trauma ( duh ), but it'll have a happy ending(s).
Also, Limestone's part is at least a little bit wholesome, wouldn't you agree? Hopefully it is.
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It is also me being extra jaded over the last couple years.
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Believe me, I know the feel (of lacking feelings), it's okay. There will be a rainbow after the storm, I promise XD
nice work, But if I may suggest
It would be worth to work out the emotions here
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You're probably right but I just don't know how :/
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Okay. Still, Hope i could help
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I might have an idea, thanks anyway ^^
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You're welcome!
Nice work and and an interesting twist
You mean but, right?
Umm... excuse me?
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Thanks, typos fixed!
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You're welcome
Only one or the other? Ditzy and Limestone seemed to like each other we'll enough.