A guy with too many stories of his OCs in his head. So instead I decided to write them down. Enjoy.
House Heart is one of the eleven branch families of the Chrysalis Dynasty. Ruling over the province of Dralai, the 5th largest and northernmost region of the continent. A region rich with hills, snow, and silver. Yet they were often considered the least relevant family due to their queen's youth. Having just reached the age of 22 and therefore seeking a pony mate. Yet whom she finds could give her the recognition she deserves.
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Not having read A Song of Ice and Fire, I have to ask: Is 22 really considered that young in-universe?
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A king/queen's minority ends at age 16
Same in this world.
I reviewed this chapter on my blog here. :)
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I'd like to ask your opinion on how I've been switching the point of view.
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I did find the interstitials between POV scenes a little clunky - I didn't realize initially that they were supposed to act as establishing transitions between characters. A nice idea, but the transitions themselves don't really do much for the story in my opinion. That kind of thing works better in a visual format.
Personally I think you would be fine with the classic method of just heading the section with the name of the viewpoint character.