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This story is a sequel to PonyFall: The Dawning of Twilight


Six long years have passed since that one fateful day in Australia when Discord shoved Matt, Luna, and Michelle through a portal and into Equestria.

Things have certainly changed. For everypony.

Matt, now Feather Stroke, has had to come to terms with his new lot in life all while dealing with the mental anguish of leaving everyone and everything that he knew before, behind him.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 20 )

Good to see you back at it. :twilightsmile:

I'm very thankful you've made a sequel to The Dawning of Twilight.

A sequel after so long!

Yay!

Excellent, as of course you know. All the characters' feelings are so vivid and tangible. It's a magnificent sequel. I will be watching it intently.

I saw Australia and quickly came here.

Poor dude, I can't even begin to imagine the emotional and mental pain he had to go through.

Great chapter detailing of what happened to Star Shine aka Michelle and Matt now called Feather Stroke.

I enjoyed the backstory of Evening Song and her child Silver Fang.

I do hope this sickness can be dealt with before something really bad happens to the princesses.

Just found this story by happenstance, now I have to reread the whole series so that I can know what's going on. Gosh darn it's been a while

I love This a lot. It well written evokes good old emotion and tells a damn good chilling story.
Side note? Can I fucking hate Celestia? Like what the fucking fucking please can I hate her?

I mean the man Sacrifices his life For you to have a god damnSister. Harmony better wise up or whatever because screw friendship and love alicorns. This man expelifys it. Period. HE deserces to be a aliciron!

This to me is the greatest flaw of the tv show? Like greatness is supposedly only for those that have friendship? Or the sun and tbe moon? Well it sure does not stop one from being kind or cruel in Celestias cause. What of fluttershy how she Not Worthy, you know or some such? That really says a lot that people that farm and populate the good land of equestria just dont measure up! If you save a childs life well you need to go throught this twelve step challenge especially if your a earth pony!

Bottom line for a kids show it has some dark ass undertones. When unchallenges its worse Unexamined even worse.

I hope. I hope. you dont brush this aside. This some great stuff. I hope follow through with this line of questions. Cough alicorn alicron ciough. ESPECIALLY THE treatment she deals him. Like? Really?

And Luna should have done more! Like boy saves your ass is glorifyed secretary and dooms himself to a life that is both alien and strange. Damn misty eyed damn. Actualluh what happened to twilight? Or Candy?

Ps. Word on working through your stuff throught fiction writing totally do the same. Keep on being awesome!

On side note. I am open to criticism and critic. I thrive on discussion so at the very least I will wish you a kind day! Keep on having fun! Further I actually not criticiing you only hoping you go down this awesome path that set yourself barring telling the story you want to tell.

I always find it strange in stories like these that the charactsrs ofren enough do not become alicorns I often have to wonder why? You know? Its like going to a kid and saying you suck ass? Like who does that?

Pony universe, damn.

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Wow, that was one hell of a review/comment.

First of all, thank you.

Secondly, feel free to hate anyone you want. One of the main things that I wanted to explore while writing this story, other than my own issues, is the idea that no character is perfect. Not Celestia, not Luna, not Evening Song, and certainly not Feather Stroke. Maybe Silver Fang, but he's just a child.

Directly answering your question about Twilight and the others: You'll have to wait and see.

Chaos version of Streptococcus zooepidemicus?

I don't think he'll be able to fight it off very well... :(

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yes, it will, I've just been dealing with some mental health issues and haven't been able to muster the motivation to continue.

“That is an incredibly unfortunate acronym, I can see why ponies call it ‘feather flu’,” I chucked with a shake of my head.

I can't. This sounds to me like a strain of strep throat mutated by chaos magic. Calling this a flu would be like calling SARS-CoV-2 a flu virus.

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