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Pretty Pony Pirate
Has an unhealthy fixation on booty.
Pretty Pony Pirate
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Well done!
Hey, DrySpell here! Here's your contest entry review.
I liked the amount of detail and attention put on Twilight's frame, how she differs from other ponies, and how she wants to be with someone she can't hurt while fucking and vice versa. It did kind of suffer from a quite a few patches of jumbled or unclear speech and one or two grammatical errors, but other than that, it was quite the enjoyable read. Definitely good for your first attempt at a story (at least on this account).
Good luck in the contest!
Shit. I really thought I'd hate this. Something about a muscle fetish involving a non-anthro/human Twilight and a random OC just sounded so much like not my thing. I have absolutely zero problems admitting that I was dead fucking wrong.
I really like that this story is directly from Twilight's perspective. You don't often get to see things from the muscled mass' perspective, even rarer when the big beefy one is an intellectual like Twilight. I don't know if I can explain exactly why I liked it so much, but your Twilight just felt so good to read. I bet she could tell me about every pony she's fucked without boring me.
I will say, I wish you would've cooled it on the italics. I found it a bit distracting at times. Additionally, I think if we would've experienced Twilight's experience with Firehoof in real-time, it would've boosted this story to the next level. Although, perhaps it would've just made for a different story? The world may never know, but what I do know is that I liked this quite a bit. Damn fine job.
Thank you for your participation in Muscle Mania 2020! We here on the judge's council wish you the best of luck!
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Thank you very much for the nice reviews!
Mmph~♡ this was so bucking hot! I recently got into both muscular and busty ferals. This did it for me~
I was looking for a piece with both a story and a hot pic (your cover image choice was a great one :3 ) and I've found it! Thanks so much for a wonderfully erotic read~♡
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You're welcome! Most people don't like muscular ferals, it seems, so it's nice to run into someone who does!