The phoenix

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Sunny lives in the Hoofington his whole life. Lonely, bored and mad at the world. Until one day, a sudden vision of a mysterious bird, shakes up his life giving him a new purpose.

A small gift for my best friends, that I wrote over the past week. Huge thanks to Monochromatic for proofreading this. She is a wonderful writer and you should check her stuff out. Cover by Puffy

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Starlight Uplifting

Starlight Uplifting #1 · Apr 28th, 2020 · 2 · ·

I gotta say, haven't read a fic on this site in a hot minute, and this one was a nice welcome back to reading in pony fiction. Primitive is really a pleasant character, and honestly a very relatable protagonist in this story, especially for the struggling artist living the day-to-day grind. Cirrus, while I don't know how to read his name, has the voice of a calming English gentleman in my head. So, basically he felt comforting to read. It's refreshing to read more slice of life stories that still hold an air of the fantastic. All around, a good read.

Nethlarion

Nethlarion #2 · Apr 28th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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Aww, thank you! As for personalities they are my friend's OCs, so I guess the major credit for it goes to them. And I am very happy to hear that you enjoyed this! Also you got Cirrus' ethnicity 100% right, hehe.

MayhemsLement

MayhemsLement #3 · Apr 28th, 2020 · 1 · ·

this was nice I kept waiting for the other shoe to drop it was nice that it did not.

Nethlarion

Nethlarion #4 · Apr 28th, 2020 · · ·

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Hm… not quite sure what do you mean by this. But I'm glad you liked it!

MayhemsLement

MayhemsLement #5 · Apr 28th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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most authors feel like their needs to be a big twist in the story. It nice to have a story with a smooth flow . That did not need pointless drama and just had a feel good end.

Gokart

Gokart #6 · Apr 28th, 2020 · 1 · ·

I don't normally read this type of story, but for some strange reason this one actually caught my attention ;)
Well, what can I say.. when I decided to read it, I did not expect so many feelings flowing from this text. You can really see that this is not just an usuall "slice of life", this story is much deeper. good job.