(5-1) A Little While After
“What was I thinking?” a white alicorn asked herself, after taking the time to let herself cool from her rage.
She wasn’t one to let her judgment become so clouded. In fact, many ponies regarded her as the voice of reason during confusing and troubling times. And she often was. Her ability to keep calm under pressure was a skill she admired about herself.
And yet, somehow, that creature, no, Sombra, had made her unhinged to the point of violence. Violence against her own friends. It was unlike her, and she felt ashamed of what she had done, embarrassed by how she lost control of herself. She had fought to keep herself under control, tried to keep herself from becoming Daybreaker, but she couldn’t help herself. Because of him.
Even worse was that they seemed to not care. Her own sister seemed to not care. Sure, she spoke of what she was feeling, telling her she understood, but only when telling her that she was being unreasonable, or to get over it. As if such things were easy to get over. Just his sight was a painful reminder of what she lost at his hooves. Yes, she knew she should have asked to discuss it, but then again, she shouldn’t have to ask. They could clearly see that that creature was bothering her.
She wondered if that was how Luna felt when she became Nightmare Moon. So undue by the sight of her that she couldn’t help but snap, just like she did. Trying and failing to keep control of herself. Both of them snapping because they felt like the other didn’t care. Well, that, and Celestia had to listen to that creature tell her that he didn’t care, and that she should just get over what he did to her. She couldn't bear to hear it.
She wondered how long she would be gone. Likely for a thousand years at least, or maybe just the rest of her life. She felt like she deserved it. Regardless of what that creature had done to her, as Princess Cadance told her, attacking other ponies was unacceptable. It didn’t matter how much it hurt to see the one who murdered her friend, the one who both looked like and taken the one she loved. What she did was unacceptable. She knew though that she’d eventually be allowed to return to Equestria. She just hoped that, when she did, her friends would find it in their heart to forgive her. She would try to forgive herself for how she snapped.
But not him. She wouldn’t apologize to him, not now or ever. There was no way his being here was an accident. She knew that, understanding that, at the very least, if he did not bring himself here, somepony else had, and she wouldn’t be forgiving them for it. Somepony, perhaps Sombra himself, had set her up to watch her fall, and it burned her up inside to know that somepony wanted her to suffer. She would find them and make them pay. And if she ever saw Sombra himself again, she would make sure to turn him into dust for the pain and shame he caused her.
My body was aching as I started to wake up. My head was pounding, and it felt like I fell down a flight of stairs as I lay in bed. A bed. I was hoping it was my own, and kept my eyes closed, just in case I didn’t like what I saw.
“Please,” I thought, “let that all have been a dream because I hit my head before going to sleep.”
I waited in darkness for just a second longer, building up the courage to see where I was, then cracked an eye open to see the Princess of Love staring down at me.
“Of course, I’m still here,” I muttered, and closed my eyes again, wanting to go back to sleep.
“Stay awake,” she instructed sternly. “I have questions for you.”
“Of course you do,” I sighed, opening my eyes again. “I don’t see why it matters though. You’re not going to believe me, and I know you hate me just as much as Celestia does. I wouldn't be surprised if you hurt me, too.”
“Then consider this your chance to be believed,” she told me. "If you happen to convince me, I'll be the first to apologize for doubting you."
“No thank you. Fluttershy and Luna are already on my side, and those two can get Twilight or someone else to help me. I don’t really care if you believe me or not.”
“Princess Luna was the one who told me to question you, so maybe you’re not as believed as you think. Especially after Chrysalis told us that you were going to help her take over Equestria.”
Hearing that was a mild surprise, but I couldn’t muster up anything more than that. It was just another thing on top of everything else. “Then just kill me,” I sighed, shutting my eyes again and painfully turning over. “I don’t really care at this point. The whole universe is out to get me anyway.”
Radiant Hope surveyed the scene, listening to seven ponies try to piece together what had just happened in Canterlot.
“For now,” Princess Luna told the group, “I will remain in charge of Equestria until my sister returns or Twilight takes up the throne.”
“Um, how long is she going to be gone?” Twilight Sparkle asked worriedly, still concerned for her former mentor, still firm in her position of not wanting to be the ruler anymore.
“I do not know. At the very least, she will wait until this situation is resolved. Although, knowing my sister, she has likely already gotten control of herself and seen what she has done wrong.”
Radiant Hope didn’t like hearing that. Apparently, Celestia had gotten to Sombra and hurt him. Even more worryingly, he evidently caused Celestia to change into Daybreaker. Although, she did take consolation that her friend was still living, seeing as Luna wanted to wait until after “this situation” to bring Celestia back to Equestria. It was also good that she showed some concern for her friend, not wanting Celestia to hurt him again.
“For now, though, I would like you all to focus on the task at hand. Especially you, Twilight Sparkle. I have faith in your ability to find a way to send that creature back to where he came from.”
That creature? That was an interesting way to describe him. She would have assumed that the princess was just being spiteful, but she didn’t have any malice in her voice. It was quite strange, and Radiant Hope thought over what it might mean.
Actually, there wasn't really anything to think over, there being only one possibility for what she meant. Sombra was able to convince them that he wasn’t himself and should be spared. How he did so, she had no idea, but it was quite remarkable. Even more remarkable was the fact that they trusted him enough to bring him to the Crystal Empire, even if it was under their watch. She assumed so anyway. If Celestia was gone, she doubted that they would have left him in Canterlot by himself.
This was actually better than she expected. Now, at least, she wouldn’t have to search Canterlot for him since he was likely in the Crystal Empire. As well, it seemed that he gained some trust with the ruler of Equestria. Although, it was likely going to be quite difficult to be alone with him long enough to come up with a new plan on how to proceed. As well, she would have much rather have Chrysalis working with them than for them to have to do things on their own. But still, Radiant Hope believed that she could work with the scenario that was presented to her.
“For now, however, I will be heading back to Canterlot to begin rebuilding the castle, as well as to explain what has happened to Celestia. I will be returning tomorrow, and I would like you six to see how much you can find out before then.”
The crystal pony sighed to herself. Of course, Luna was leaving. She just had to go and make it more difficult for her when she and Sombra were ready to take the princess by surprise.
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I do not believe this is going to go like she think it will.
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Prolly not
Hey, your fic your Celestia, you should be allowed to portray her however you want, I don't mind it myself
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I 2nd this. Fics are meant to each have their own spin to them.
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3rd-ed. I don't want to read the same fic over and over again; I wanna see something new, not the same cut-and-paste characters.
Nice.
Never feel bad about what you feel is right in your story. I'm reading one where celly let and watched Luna RAPE a stallion infront of everyone until he broke mentally. Because he loved a changeling of his own will. So trust me. There are people out there making our sun butt into a bigger bitch than you. So keep writing and keep this coming. I want to see if sombra really is gone
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I'm hoping all the way to 'Hoof to the kisser and calling the guards to throw your posterior in the nearest prison' bad.
Not only is it your story but I'm sure there are plenty of people, including myself, that enjoy the catharsis of an aloof authority figure being portrayed as in the wrong.
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* The Entire Imperium of Man Armada aiming at Cadence.*
Revived EMPEROR OF MAN: WTF did you JUST say to our very poor Human comrade, trapped in that horrified body here!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 😠😠😠😠😠😠
Cadence: 😱😱😱😱😱😱😱
*Me with popcorn*: Bitch is GONNA DIE!!!!!!!!!!!
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You've read mated for life too huh?
Nice to know people of culture are reading this.
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Your portrayal of Celestia is an interesting one as it shows a more honest side of her.
Well, we can't say you didn't warn us.
I mean to be fair, the IN character version of Celestia is a picture perfect marry sue that could do no wrong, helped no one when it actually matters, and had 0 character development (In my personal opinion) until literally the last 2 seasons cause purple smart took her position. Anything from that is a step up in my books.
Your Celestia actually contemplates her grief over her lost friend and lover. Even tough she CLEARLY tried to get past it, she can't, and that's okay. It's okay to not be okay. Where we have a problem, and a great character conflict is where she chooses to bottle it up, just like old Luna, deal with her personal bullshit herself, just like old Luna, and tell no one how she's feeling and get some fucking help, JUST LIKE OLD LUNA! it's GRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREAT
Oh, I'm not offended by an ooc portrayal of Celestia. I certainly hate her, but that's a sign you're doing things right. The one thing about her that makes her unlikable is going straight into insanity to justify her hate no matter what. At this point I'd say she can't be redeemed without dropping the whole "You are who I decide you are because I hate you" thing, because at this point is someone who isn't Sombra is Sombra because she hates them and says they are, then really who ISN'T Sombra? Hate and death for everyone!
I was wondering when this would happen. Congradulations, you made an innocent man lose faith in Harmony and give up hope of living, preferring to just die quickly so as to prevent more pain. I wonder what she'll do, if she doesn't kill him she'll just convince him she's trying to force him to admit he's Sombra so she can feel good about killing an innocent.
Hmm...Celestia is clever girl, also very composed. She would't be able to finish off Sombra but... Daybreaker would not hestitate. So she let her go and later she would be blaming Daybreaker. Clever girl indeed. ;)
This is definitely what I needed before going to bed.
Your the one making yourself act like a ninny.
Radiant gets a hint, but unfortunately not enough to alter her assumptions. This will be... interesting.
Celestia is self-exiled? Huh. That's... rather drastic. Why not self-imprison? Voluntary petrification? Now she'll be unavailable for the actual upcoming conflict...
Keep going! ;)
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Only the best culture!
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According to the story so far, I believe the best way to get anypony kill (legally) is to make him/her looks like Sombra and dump him in front of the palace.
Even after purification(?) she still blames him. Applause for the next level spite.
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Well, she hasn't been purified, just banished like Luna was.
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Huh. Kind of have to wonder why she didn’t get purification.
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Ah. Somehow I just assumed there was time deletion and that the elements had been used. Mostly because it’s heavily implied that they were needed for banishment.
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The logic I used was that Luna was banished but was still Nightmare Moon until the Elements were used
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So in this verse the elements were unnecessary for the original banishment?
Your good
The hell? Were is the fight? Were is Twilight trying to cope wile Luna&Cadance vs Daybreaker is in full swing? Were is a description of the fight?!!! Its casulties in property and castle staff personal. Were is the out cry of panic in the 3 Alicorn size battle??? What do the Castle Royal Guard ponys do to keep the population save? Were is there loyalty struggel wile see former Sun goddess turn mad? Do they curse there own powerless nature against Armageddon level treats? Can they stick to there training? To there faith in harmony keeps em in balance? Is there determination strong enough in time of crisis?
What was lost? A fellow Guardspony ? A maid you never had a chance to hit on? A friend?
What was gained ? Confidence they can perform under extreamly difficult conditions!?
Yeah... Im doing to wait for the 'Lost Chapter'
(-_-)
What did our national hero?
-RD? Kick she 'the bad guys' ass? Try to play hero?!
-Fluttershy did she stare infront the one that try hurt ( possible mame ) her friends and there familie member?
-Rarity dont try to hold there spirits up or anything? Maybe help Twilight to get her head out of her ass because Twilight sulking wile everything around em exploding is unacceptebel?!
-AJ stopping RD from beibg herself and become fried chickenwings extra crispy???
- Pinkie Pie. . . Maybe throws down coverfire with cakes and cupcakes? Distract Daybreaker for the 2 Alicorn to have a opportunity to form a complex and mana intensive spell/hex undisturbed !?!?
i feel like there a chapter missing you really needed to show them stopping daybreaker, all that build up then suddenly alex is in his cell celestia not daybreaker anymore with no explanation on how she was stopped?
“Princess Luna was the one who told me to question you, so maybe you’re not as believed as you think. Especially after Chrysalis told us that you were going to help her take over Equestria.”
"Wow, So you'll believe Chrysalis, but not me." (thought this would have been appropriate)
Hearing that was a mild surprise, but I couldn’t muster up anything more than that. It was just another thing on top of everything else. “Then just kill me,” I sighed, shutting my eyes again and painfully turning over. “I don’t really care at this point. The whole universe is out to get me anyway.”
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These two are a bit of a contradiction.
How can one be a picture perfect Mary Sue if you never take the centre stage when it actually matters?
But yeah, the last two (or three, if you count Celestial Advice, which I do) seasons of the show were a godsend to Celestia fans like myself. Finally we got to see more than just the surface face ruler of Equestria.
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*Bro-Hoof* 》》》 /)'(\ 《《《
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Indeed. If it would be as simpel as talking it out no Daybreaker/Nightmaremoon would come out to play.
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Funny how the 'good ponys' are actualy the 'bad guys'.
Rainbowdash dont pummel them... Is it Hypocriticy i smell from loyal welding element user? After all its literally not needed to be honest, kind, generous or magic to be her. She still laughs... Guess she had not learn her lesson yet...
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Yeah... Seriously a funny point to point out. Would fit Discord to slap em with the truth with a off hand/claw comment like this.
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This is what you get for reaction skipping a major fight in your chapter length about 10-15 chapters worth and expected us to 'figure it out'?
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Yeah, the unexpected and not-really-demarcated skip of "Oh by the way, she was exiled or something" was a little off-putting.
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Huge build up only to skip it all. Its like we would look DBZ and always get the fight result skipped. Never expected this to even be a idea someone can get...
Its like playing Mass Effect 1&2 with all side quests and DLC learn to love the universe and whats in it and than go to Mass Effect Andromeda ( biggest fail of a fan beloved universe after Starwars ) and learn "o yeah there was a Galaxy wide war... and... ... ...
How was your breakfast? I loved the sandwich" (^.~)/)
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I wonder how it would've played out if 'Alex' had destroyed Celestia verbally. It would depend on what you view as canon, but if he was to say that killing him wouldn't bring Good Sombra back, nor heal the rift inbetween her and Sunset, that would probably be just as effective. Though, I'm pretty sure Daybreaker wouldn't appear from this smackdown. I'd imagine Celestia would step back, realizing that her involvement is making things worse.
I like how it played out so far, but I thought it would be interesting to point out another possible way that it could've played out.
Keep going with the story man.
I think I would agree with that sentiment if I were in his place.
I dont have any problems thus far with how you've portrayed Celestia. Reasons are gounded and believable. I've seen first hand how an emotional overload has caused people to behave.
I kinda want to see Alex invite Celestia to kill him, then state that, despite what Celestia has gone through, it won't bring back who she's lost.
Alternatively, I'd like to see Alex applogise to Celestia not for anything he's said or done, but to offer his sincerest condolences for her loss.
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We are going to be exploring the mane six's reaction to Celestia, but the rest of the fight can effectively be summed up as: Luna and cadence cast a spell.
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it still should have been shown for the narratives flow, beside seeing how Candace reacts to maddened celestia and how that changes her opinion and character development, making her more open to considering Alex is not sombra if for only to not end up like daybreaker or the opposite make her opinion he is stronger, was the battle difficult, who got hurt during it, Candace conversation with Luna after, was celestia banished for a week a thousand years? even if we know the outcome we still need to see it happen
imagine the second changeling story in MLP, starlight and gang reached the hive, it cuts to black the good guys won equestria is saved
skips to them back in ponyville celebrating there victory
that not be a good story then would it,
it not just the destination but the journey the character go to get there that just as important
One thing is still unclear to me, does Celestia still think Alex is Sombra?
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I honestly like the way I wrote it out... I didn't think it was that much different than the interchange between 1-3 and 1-4
Reactions wise, all of that's going to be dealt with, I assure you. Fight wise, it will be gone over, albeit briefly.
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well if your happy with the way the stories written that fine, personally i find this story a bit too rough so im going to be dropping it
i hope you finish the story to your satisfaction
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I understand, and I'm sorry to have disappointed you : (
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I personally like how celestia is portrayed in this story. The death of a loved one is hard to get over :( I don’t really think the skip over the fight is that jarring.
FIM Fiction, god of FIMFiction, approves of this tale so far.
It is quite enjoyable.
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She knows that Alex is not Sombra, she just doesn't care. It would get in the way of her vengeance