Nido_King
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I had no idea he did art like that!
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Oh! The picture is so old I faved it on his Furaffinity five years ago! XD
Not a single reason listed for the 13 thumbs downs?
Not a single one?
Really?
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Probably reflexive kinkshamers or perhaps folks who thought it was too short.
OK,
I actually listened to this thing. I'm a kinky, twisted fucker, but diapers aren't my thing. That being said, gay fics aren't my thing either, but I can appreciate some of the better written stuff. Your story came across as less steamy and more silly. I just kept finding myself smiling and giggling through it. No offense. (Of course it may just be the way my Mac says the word "diaper")
In my opinion, not a steamy romance.
Your writing is OK and is as solid as you can get for a story like this. I can't say much about character or plot, because it is rather short. My only recommendation is here.
I would remove the first "in his chest" After all the reader already knows thats where the heart is. his heart hammering away as he clutched the room key to his chest. sounds much better. Remember, sometimes less is more. When two people sit down to tea, you don't have to write making the tea or picking up the cups. The reader already knows that those go with having tea. So once you said they sat down to tea, the reader already visualized them sipping tea cups in hand. You can get straight into the dialog. "heart in his chest" is the same concept.
No thumbs up, or down from me. Diapers just aren't my........cup of tea.
Your stories OK. You can't say that about a lot of other writers here, who can "barley writed an english"
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