What does the being who represents loyalty do when those they are loyal to abandon them?
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What a wonderful ending to this kind of a story. *hopes for a sequel*
Vary good story, any chance you can write a sequel that involves tirack.
Also something tells me that the bakery could be the cake twins moving here.
a wonderful ending to a grand story can't wait to see what you write next.
This was a great story, it’s not often you get to follow a story to it’s completion. Bravo, I hope you keep writing for many stories to come.
good story! and while i would love a sequel it looks like it would be hard to do.
Great story, though there are some unanswered questions. For example, why write in the whole bit about Flash Magnus when you weren't even going to do anything with it? Little point for a red herring so late in the story.
This story has been an amazing read, it had all sorts of twists and turns, challenges and obstacles. You really made an outstanding story that i'm gonna reread a LOT. The way you made Rainbow Dash face those challenges and become someone even better than what she dreamed of. (Wonderbolts) Her loyalty was brought to the test, but in the end, she faced through it, just like her character.
It's sad that this story is finished, but you know the saying, when one story ends, another begins. Outstanding job, outstanding. And I am positive that I am not the only one who will remember this story when the next Generation rolls around.
Thank you for the awesome story.
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Same and the bit about Flurry Heart as well. Left that out.
Also is Celestia co ruling or has she stepped down and become advisor to Luna?
Last think the final confrontation was too rush, out of all of them it was Fluttershy who hurt her the most.
She loved Shy like a sister, protected her helped her and in return Shy betrayed her and acted like she was better then ever.
Should been better.
now im sad
Shame it had to end.
Now we hope and pray for a sequel.
Good shit.... Can u do bioshock. U know good guy with op plasmids and all
Please
What a beautiful ending. So Scootaloo is getting married?, nice.
Congrats on finally finishing Your first story!
Good story
Are you going to continue Hellfire Dash or start a new story? Because that one piqued my interest.
was good story hope to see more like it
have a fav
What I would like to see is a follow-up story about how Celestia and the rest of the Mane 6 (now 5) adapt to the situation now presented to them.
The now Mane 5 seem to still not understand exactly why they are in the wrong. To me, it feels like they are going to continue to try and restore their friendship with Rainbow. They probably aren't going to accept that they were the ones who fucked up their relationship with her until someone else beats it (figuratively or literally) into their heads.
Celestia is a bag of mixed nuts for me. She already seems to have accepted the fact that her relationship with Rainbow is irreparably damaged. But I could easily see her shutting down, possibly trying to take her own life just because of how conflicted she is about everything. I actually could see Rainbow kinda taking pity on her situation; maybe even possibly giving her shelter (figuratively or literally) as she heals from the emotional torment she will go through.
I'm sad that this has ended now; so many loose ends that have yet to be tied up.
Time to favorite this story... all done!
One of the greatest stories I have ever read. It was an amazing journey.
There will be a sequel?
Butiful, i've been with this story from beginning to end, and it has been amazing. You sir, are a magnificent writer and an amazing pony.
Sequel? Mabey?
If theirs ever a sequel, my bits on it centering on Depressi Tonituro, it make sense, especially since he hasn't got a lot of character development and Equestra is now an option, you know, maybe he's old enough to explore that far on his own and the stories his mom told him made him curious about the country and since the war is over, it would be a good chance to visit Equestra and maybe the crystal empire and meet up with flurry since the only time we saw her, she was busy being a Disney princess but pissed, anyone else?
I am hoping there is a sequel where Dash and her family go to Scoot's wedding, and we see how Ponyville has recovered from Queen Chrysalis' invasion. Hopefully, Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle will be bridesmaids (despite Dash being on the outside with AJ and Rarity).
But if there is such an event, I hope that the Mane 5 give Dashie plenty of space. If there's to be reconciliation, Dash has to take that step (and frankly, I'm not holding my breath).
You too man.
a sad day when one of the best fanfictions ends but a good one because I finally get to read the ending
please let there be a sequel
As Paladin Danse would say, "Ad Victorium!"
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just awesome!![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
Interested for a hypothetical continuation ... put on stand by
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I need a sequel!
hmm, a very good fic, one made by an author that had the balls to include pregnancy induced rape, and one that kept me (and many others in the army this site/fandom has raised) hooked till the very (albeit slightly underwhelming)end.
Though, you kept my attention, and for over a hundred chapters, thats rare as i tend to keep chapter limits under seventy, due to that factor, you have earned a badge of honor, so in words that are not my own, but an Earth Pony with the Alicorn Amulet, trying to do an Australian accent "Boy was that fun!"
images03.military.com/sites/default/files/styles/full/public/media/news/service/2016/12/navy-medal-of-honor-1500.jpg?itok=dLfQoHpF (as promised, a Medal of Honor)
(p.s i know it's military, but i couldn't find a badge for fanfic writing, apologies)
Quite fun to read. Here and there I remember things seeming to repeat themselves, but it was all easily overlooked.
I think there’s a lesson to be learned from all this. Can’t think of it though... oh yeah, nevermind I got it now. Seriously though, if someone is going to take something away from this, it’s quite obvious what the lesson would be.
I am a fan of slightly longer chapters. I feel that when you have them around 4k words or more you can get much more stuff packed into the words because in every new chapter you often spend the first three paragraphs setting the scene. It’s all more efficiently done this way.
I don’t feel particularly bad for any of the characters. What Rainbow went through sucks, of course, but in the end, she wouldn’t trade her new life away were she able to go back in time. Other characters, like Shining Armor, were acting very dumb at times. Shining just walking out of a war meeting? No. That’s not acceptable. I doubt Chrysalis made him go, since what good would come from having him leave the meeting, so it was all him and I don’t think any leader of a military branch - no matter how trash it is - would act that way.
There are a couple of things I’m left wondering about. What happened to the company she worked for? That one person at the counter of the company was her friend, right? Did she ever reach out after she was freed from the brigands? And what of those “Notable Run” chapters? I remember there was one where me and the other commenters thought the lady was making gunpowder, and nothing came from knowing about that scorched land, so what purpose did they have? I understand if they were fillers, and I’m totally fine with that, but we all thought that the runs would have played an important role in future chapters. Personally, I thought the Pryhans were going to invent guns or something.
Yeah, I don’t know. I do approve of the story, I really enjoyed it, but at the same time there are a bunch of dead ends that could have potentially enhanced it somehow. You seem to enjoy having hidden notes in your work, which only the pickiest of readers can notice, to foreshadow something. Because of that, I speculated how the world building (like adding the scorched lands) would have impacted the story, and to see a whole lot of nothing come from that is disappointing.
Thanks for writing!
-DM
HOLD IT!!!
Whatever happened to Cadence and Flurry Heart?
Your song choices were superb. A truly glorious line up.
Epilogue could use work. Would be nice to see how things are going from many characters than just rainbow and hubby getting mail?
It's over? Dam... I love this book!
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He seems to be doing the God Emporer most holy work
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Thank you. We know you do this in later chapters but at the time i made that comment i didn't know.
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Correct. I plan on going back through and editing it soon.
I love this story. If you push Rainbow Dash to far mentally, figuratively, and literally, she is a force to be truly reckoned with. I heard a sequel is coming soon, can't wait to see it as well as Rainbow Dash being more awesome and badass.
Sequel is needed.
Very good story, it needs a sequel or some slice of life as we see what happen in both sides... The best of the story is that Rainbow don't forgive them, seriously, too many sappy stories when they get wronged and just forgive them like nothing, this is a good story and she did the correct thing, maybe with time things could change but her ex-friends should not insist, heck, I wonder if maybe Scootaloo could not get angry with them. Also, RD forgot to give thanks to Spitfire for the glasses.
I wonder how will things continue, I guess the only villain left is Cozy but she will have problems to be a big villain without the friendship school and I don't see Twilight doing it, Tirek is still in Tartarus, Sombra is defeated, Discord in stone, Stygian in the void and Chrysalis defeated, I don't think there is anyone else... Except maybe Sunset Shimmer but she is not important even if I wonder what happened to her and the Storm Emperor, I wonder if they could give some problem to Rainbow Dash legion
veni, vidi, vici.
In the rewrites, for the chapter where the Mane 5 meet Rainbow Dash again after many years, should we see their reactions by her appearance?
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Oooooo storm king sounds like a viable villian due to the movie stating his conquest of other nations outside equestria so ya with rainbow now in the empire as a 'stop' on stormkings path instead and get tempest to defect and join her regimen normally i would pinkie gasp here buuut seeing as rainbow hates her i will refrain
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Sequel?! Where?!
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In a bit. In a bit. Be patient.
I know I've already gave a review to the epilogue, but (having heard you are working on a sequel) I have to re-establish my hopes that it will entail Dash and her family going back to Ponyville for Scoot's wedding. I would love to see how Ponyville recovers from Chryssie's invasion, and how Twi recovered from her own injuries.
Also, I can't help but wonder what would happen with the rest of the Mane 6. How they would react to Dash returning. As I said in an earlier review, now doesn't mean squat! THEN is when they should have believed Dash when it appeared that Dash had turned traitor. Chryssie was manipulating Twi and Cadence, but the rest of the Mane 6 have no such excuse. Still, I can't help but wonder if they would try to mend fences with Dash. She would still have to take the first step though.
Anyway, look forward to any more developments
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Honestly, I forgot to really put things in scale.
The distance from the Pryhan Archipelago to Equestria is about 2000 miles. Although, Pryha uses the metric system, so actually it's 3218 Kilometers.
NOOOO!!! IT'S OVER!! WAAAAAA!!
NEXT STORY!! ![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
This was a fun read and I can honestly say I enjoyed it also it’s one of my first stories I read where the MC is a female. I do not know why or how but I could never get behind a story with a female MC however you sir/madam did it pretty good and got me interested enough to read it so thanks for such an awesome read and let’s see if the sequel entices me as much as this did. Thank you again for such a wonderful read!
I DIED
What the...
I just realized...
The epilogue's song is just Frank Sinatra's 'My Way'
You have good taste