What does the being who represents loyalty do when those they are loyal to abandon them?
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Why is this titled sequel when the news is about rewriting some of the chapters?
so your rewriting somethings to set up a sequel, what would the sequel even be about?
Sounds good to me.
I'll be sure to reread those two chapters and the epilogue once you have them all done.
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That was a mistake. I had another planned 'Chapter', announcing the sequel I have planned. However, I decided to rewrite the above-listed chapters, and so just wrote that. I forgot to change the title.
TL'DR: I had a brain-fart.
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Got it.
Is the change very big?
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Very much so.
Thanks for the heads up.
Read it today, liked ita bunch.
Only issues I had were writing music is meh, "advised or suggested" music is nonsense for many reasons, the term "men" has no meaning in Equestria, so Rainbow and others asking about her men breaks immersion, and writing in full in Latin (old Ponish) then translated into Ponish is a total world breaker.
Also, Ponies speak Ponish. Established in A Flurry of Emotions and onward.
Update: also, equine pregnancy is 11 months, not 9.
But, ignoring little things like that, it was a treat to read!
10080645 Good point.
And this is true.
And I think I read in the Epilogue to this that she and her family were going to go back to Equestria for Scoots' wedding.
May need to read it again to be sure
Will there be a notation added to show that you did these rewrites?
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Yep.
Well dang. That was a wild ride. Now I'd suggest going back through and making some proper edits to correct spelling mistakes, misplaced words, and punctuation errors.
Overall I'd say this was an awesome story idea, and I loved reading all the battle scenes. I also loved your attention to detail. Overall I'd give it 7/10.