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Flutter-Spark


Wishes die and dreams may fall, but writing stands to heal us all; I am a Dreamer who will rise, for writing's pleasure is my prize.

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Twilight Sparkle, a little Unicorn filly more curious than a cat, wanders to the top of a mountain to get away from everything and explore. She finds a hole in the mountain, and falls down into it. She expected to die, or to be trapped forever. She set out into the darkness, looking for and calling out for a way home...
...and adventure came.


A crossover of MLP: FiM and Undertale. The latter belongs to Toby Fox, the former belongs to Hasbro and Lauren Faust.
Inspired by The Moon in the Dark, by Tatsurou; please go show him some support.
Rated T for safety's sake; will eventually involve bad puns, minor-to-mild language, possibly moments of violence and occasional crude humor. Oh, and puns. Lots and lots of puns.

Chapters (9)
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Comments ( 35 )

Interesting start so far.

Very nice! You really delved deep into this scene. Looking forward to what you do with the rest of it.

Okay, this is extremely well done and adorable. You've captured the essence of how I wrote "Moon in the Dark" without completely copying it, but have also managed to avoid the pitfalls I fell into writing the early chapters (the lisp...why did I do that?).

And now some guesses from how things have been presented as far as roles...Sunset Shimmer as Chara?

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I'm not going to give spoilers, but that's possible, Tats.
*chuckles* It was to capture the adorableness of Woona. But I can definitely see how it would get annoying to write constantly.

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Actually, the entire reason she was lisping was for the 'Woona/Luna' joke.

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...*snickers* Right. The one joke that lasted through the whole story, then truly paid off at the end. Ya cut that one pretty close, dude. Like–
"Don't say it!!!"
...down to the bone. *badumtss* ...Pinkie?
Yes?
Did you do that?
nah, that was me, dude.
...I didn't know you and Pinkie were friends.
I've got a ton of friends, silly!
a skele-ton. *badumtss*
...Right. Anyways, Tats, relax. I have the same troubles with Applejack's speech in all my fics cause of tryin' to capture the essence of her accent. It's so difficult to write out that kind of talk based on the phonetics.
(And no, I couldn't resist the puns or the 4th wall break. :twilightsmile:

Okay, this better be at least CLOSE to as good as “The Moon in the Dark.” I’ll give you the benefit of the doubt, but I’m still right skeptical before I read this.

I'm enjoying this so far. Keep up the good work.

This story is great so far, but you misspelled "curiosity" towards the end.

Damn...what a punch in the feels at the end there.

Overall, a very good way of covering each of these parts, and I like the bit with Flowey.

Ouch that ending...
I'm curious about one thing, though:
Will you do a take on all three endings, just the neutral - pacifist ending, or just work it so that she gets the pacifist ending without needing to "reload" near the end?

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Oh, rest assured, I'm going to find a way to include a good amount of the different events. I'm not sure how, but I'm going too. There'll be a rare few moments of RESET being used, though. Most likely I'll find a way to include the fights with the Asgore equivalent, the Omega Flowey bit and the Neutral Ending, but the "Final Ending" will be Pacifist-based.
The reason, if you're wondering, is because I don't like the Genocide Ending. I've only skimmed playthroughs, but I hate the Genocide Ending with Chara, and it wouldn't really fit my plan for the character who'll fill that role. I might make some sort of "Omake" section after the fic's done where I can write out Genocide elements and alternate scenes I didn't include in the story itself, but no promises.

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I understand perfectly.

While waiting for your reply, I did think of at least a semi-plausible excuse as to why Twi would at least attempt the Genocide route, since I don't think even she'd be curious enough to try it on her own.
Mind if I PM'd it to you, just in case you do the Omake?

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Sure! PM it my way and I'll gladly discuss it!

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Yes it is. It's a very powerful chapter.

Okay, that whole bit was fun, especially the bit about the champagne and the window.

Shaping up to be as good as Moon in the Dark so far. Let's see how this goes.

So far so good. Looking forward to more.

This was wonderful. Well done.

So I'm gonna guess that Pinkie is Papyrus in this story

Applejack as Sans? That's a new one. Looking forward to seeing what comes next.

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If we go with that, Rainbow could be Undyne, Fluttershy Alphys, Rarity Muffet and Luna is obviously Asgore. Maybe Angel could sort of be Mettaton?

While I'm still enjoying the story, THIS

if'n ah break it... it ain't ya'll I'm gonna be answerin' to first."

is one of my biggest pet peeves in writing. Y'all is a contraction of "you all" and is NEVER used to address a single person.

Huh. Applejack as sans... that's new.


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Fitting with how AJ speaks in the show, though.

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To be fair, my accent is Gulf Coast, while AJ's sounds more southwestern which I've never been to, but it still bugs me.

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? This is, indeed, an Undertale crossover.

Well, Celestia now knows just how much magic is inside Twilight - or at least has an idea - and just how creative Twilight can be. Nice.

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