I'm a Mare!!!
On her own private cloud, a rainbow maned pegasus made herself comfortable as she hovered over Ponyville. Rainbow Dash laid back and enjoyed the clear open sky. This was something she had always done as a filly. Aside from Gilda and Fluttershy, she didn't have many friends. She spent most of her free time training and napping.
As she felt relaxed, her eyes became heavy and did not fight it. However, before the napping could truly begin, she heard a cry for help from below. Without hesitation, she jumped to her hooves with a sudden burst of energy. She checked over the edge of the cloud on all sides, but she was not able to spot anypony in danger.
"Somepony! Help us!" She then realized that the cry for help came directly from below. She then rammed her head through the floor of the cloud to reveal an area of the Everfree Forest. On top of one of the trees, she spotted an orange dot and it seemed to be moving. Squinting her eyes, she could see that the orange dot was a colt hanging upside down from a branch. "Help!" the colt cried.
Rainbow forced herself through the cloud and dove towards the orange dot below, trailing her signature chromatic streak. As she dove, the orange dot grew larger. "Hold on kid! I'm coming!" Rainbow Dash shouted. It got the attention of the colt, but was too frightened to look for the source. He hugged the branch even tighter in hope that help arrived soon.
***
Below the trees, another earth colt shouted, "Boxwood! The branch!" The orange colt, Boxwood, heard the horrifying cracking noises from the branch that was holding him up. He closed his eyes as the tree's arm continued to bend. Then suddenly, his body felt light and felt pressure on his back. "Did... Did I fall?" he asked himself.
"You can let go now. You're not as light as you look," Rainbow Dash said jokingly. Boxwood then opened his eyes and saw that he was being held by the cyan pegasus. He smiled at his rescuer and breathed a sigh of relief. As soon as he let go, Rainbow Dash brought him back to the ground floor. He then ran to his friend and bumped hooves.
She then hovered over the two colts with her forelegs on her hips. "Okay. What the hay were you doing up in the tree? In the Everfree Forest of all places." she asked.
"Well, my friend and I thought it would be cool to check out the Everfree Forest," said Boxwood.
"Yeah! We aren't afraid of the Everfree Forest!" Boxwood's friend shouted proudly, but regained his composure after seeing that Rainbow Dash was unimpressed.
"Then I bet him that I was able to climb the tree, but I slipped on the branch and got stuck," said an embarrassed Boxwood.
"Well you should be more careful next time. You shouldn't even be here to begin with. If the branch didn't get you, then maybe the timber wolves might have gotten you or something. Look, just stay in town and play there or something," lectured Rainbow.
"Yes sir," replied the other colt.
"Sir?" Rainbow thought.
"We'll head home right now. Thanks again mister!" said Boxwood as he ran off with his friend.
"Mister? I'm a mare you know!?!" Rainbow shouted, but the colts were already gone and didn't hear. "Mister?" Rainbow thought to herself, but did not dwell on it for too long. She just shrugged it off and flew off into town.
As she once again flew to the sky, she looked to the right to see that the two colts made it out of the forest safely. Luckily, they weren't that far from the outskirts of the forest. "I'm glad I was able to help those squirts, but now I'm wide awake. It ruined my daily nap routine," she thought and sighed. "Oh well, maybe relaxing by the lake will help me nap." Again, she left a rainbow trail behind as she flew to her next destination.
Rainbow Dash had to fly over the city of Ponyville to get to the lake. She flew lower than usual and waved hello to the many familiar faces. Although she was born and raised in Cloudsdale, she considered Ponyville to be her home away from home.
It didn't take long to reach the lake as it was close to Sweet Apple Acres. As she drew closer, she saw that the lake wasn't going to be as quiet as she had hoped. It was slightly warm that day, so she felt she should have known there would be a few ponies there to cool off.
She released a sigh of annoyance, but was determined to get her nap. She decided to make the best of it and nap on the branch of a nearby tree. Not as cozy as her private cloud, but she "trained" herself to be able to nap just about anywhere. She laid along a large branch, looked beyond the leaves to stare at the blue sky. Again, she began to feel relaxed and her eyes got heavy. Her eyes closed and it seemed that she was finally about to get her nap. This was sadly not the case as she was once again disturbed.
Nearby, she heard a couple of ponies laughing. She didn't notice before, but the tree was close to the trail that led to and from the lake. "Oh come on!" she thought loudly to herself. She rolled her eyes and pouted as she waited for the ponies to pass by.
"I can't wait to get in that lake!" an excited mare shouted. Rainbow Dash looked at the pair and it consisted of two mares; one earth and one unicorn.
"Oh would you hurry up? I need to salvage what I can of my nap time," Rainbow thought to herself.
"Hey, did you see that rainbow trail earlier?" the unicorn asked.
"Yep. He was at it again," answered the earth mare, "He is always showing off, but he is pretty cool isn't he?"
"'He?' You mean she," her friend corrected.
"'She' who?"
"You're talking about Rainbow Dash aren't you? He is a she."
"Really?" asked the confused mare, "I always thought she was a stallion. She doesn't really act or look like a mare. Plus, that raspy voice of hers made it all the harder to tell."
"I didn't know you were into mares. Should I be jealous?" the unicorn teased.
"Oh shut up," the earth mare lightly slapped her friend on the shoulder and both shared a laugh.
There it was again, another pony had mistaken her for a stallion. "Are you kidding me? Celestia damn it. I'm a mare!" As a young filly, Rainbow Dash was always teased for acting like a colt. At the time, it didn't bother her as much since she heard these insults from her fillyhood bullies. However, to hear it today from random ponies, it really bothered her and she did not know why.
She jumped to her hooves and took to the skies. Whenever things like this happened, flying always kept her distracted and helped clear her mind. "Those ponies are crazy. I am not a stallion. They don't know what they're talking about." With a big smile, she landed by a river and took a deep breath of relief. However, she looked down at the flowing river and noticed her reflection. He smile slowly disappeared and found herself once again deep in though. She leaned closer toward the water and stared into the mirror. She observed herself closely by turning her head left and right, stroked her hair, and rubbed her hoof on her cheek. "I am a mare... Right?"
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title and description made me remember an OLD fic where AJ and dash have.. bad days and try to Girly/Fancy up. AJ.. triend and failed to make a sale or something to snob client... and dash..
Dash got mistaken for a guy and got an offer into a.. collage or something.
It's funny because one or two of the synopsis incorrectly referred to Rainbow Dash with male pronouns. I also heard someone complain about Rainbow Dash in 28 Pranks Later saying "he has become the Bart Simpson of MLP". Also Commander Hurricane is a stallion (despite Fluttershy's use of female pronouns because she's probably thinking about Rainbow Dash first), though so is Clover the Clever.
Despite her major tomboyishness I still have an easier time seeing her as female than seeing Frieza as male.
*Without reading a chapter* Of course I do Rainbow, now go on and kiss Fluttershy.
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I know right! How the hell is that thing male
When I first started watching the show I thought she was male
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Well it's easy to tell when he's in his second form. But his first form and even his fourth to a degree are easy to mistake for female.
Though with Rainbow Dash, I admit when I saw my first episode I wasn't 100% sure. I did lean more towards female, and confirmed it soon after when I used a female pronoun for her and my friend who introduced me to MLP didn't correct me. But now it's pretty easy to tell, and I have a hard time mistaking her for male.
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To be quite fair, it took me years to find out Friza was male. Granted, my only interaction with Dragonball was Video Games on the Gameboy, but still...
Strangely never had that problem with RB, but that could be because of the fact that I knew she was female beforehand... on second thought, yeah probably that.
Wut? You mean the hottest, fuckable-in-the-ass-est stallion in ponyville is a mare?
So wait. That means the Mane Six aren't Rainbow's herd of mares either? My headcanon is shattered.
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It's quite easy to tell in the Kai remake or the Ressuraction F movie, but in the original dub...well, there was a lot of confusion going on. Seriously, that Frieza voice sounded like an old lady.
It took me almost whole first season to realize that she is in fact "she" and not "he". AJ was tomboyish, but RD could as well have been a typical boy. At least if you ignore the implications of 5-to-1 herd in the context of generally scarce male population…
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Yeah, a man did his voice in Kai and Resurrection F, though he seemed to base it off the Pauline Newstone voice
this is gonna be good
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actually it close to equine population proportion. 3-5 mares per stallion.
Of course, i doubt that show was going so far as to base characters on biological profile of species, but equines are among those species where *female* is stronger and competitive. Essentially they could have inverted social roles if compare them to humans.
Oh what the heck, I'll follow it. this should be a good laugh.
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Same
To author: I agree , behaviour is uncharacteristic to Dash. I suppose would take problem cooly and consider it being a challenge. Her insecurity and annoyance here is plausible though as result of missed sleep.
"I'll show them that I'm the awesome-st mare!" That's what I expect. Next stop is in spa...
And there we meet her in show as she is trying to get her pampered muscle massage.
I thought she was male for a long time too when I was first introduced to the show. Her voice made me think of the typical male protagonist in a lot of cartoons like Ash Ketchum from Pokémon, Timmy Turner from Fairly Odd Parents, and Omi from Xiaolin Showdown. All of whom have somewhat scratchy voices. Ironically, those last two were voiced by Tara Strong.
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Before I watched the show I always thought she was a male. Probably cuz I payed close to zero attention to it. But when I figured out she was a she, I couldn't stop laughing at myself.
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I think why people think she's a male is because is because of how Female actresses playing male characters use a similar scratchy voice and the writers use Masculine characteristics like with Bart. But in this case, those characteristics used for a female threw people off
I'll be honest. When I was a kid, if I had short hair, I would totally be confused for a boy. I grew out of "girly" stuff almost entirely when I was twelve, though I hadn't yet hit puberty. I liked to do a lot of the "boy" stuff: running around, playing games, video games, getting dirty, maybe a sport or three. I remember asking my dad what it meant to be a girl who liked all those things. He then simply told me, "Well, you like both still, right? And you know you are a girl, too, right? Then you are a Tomboy: a girl who likes boy stuff." I tell you what, it made me happy to no end. This story seems to stick Rainbow in a world where there isn't much inbetween. You are either a mare or a stallion and you can like either, or, or both. Trust me, I get the whole "but that's not how a lady is supposed to act." My favorite retort to that is, "Who the hell said I was a lady?"
Plot twist: Rainbow doesn't know which sex has ding-dongs or hoo-hahs. Guess which one she has.
It's like Patrick Stewart's disagreement with his wife on whether or not he was circumcised.
YEAH, you are! And a fine one at that. Let me treat you to dinner, if you’re up for it.
Ran into a similar problem once, had someone in a class that if they talked I legitimately could not tell if it was a man or a woman. It was the most androgynous voice I have ever heard. Fortunately I was able to avoid any embarrassment or awkwardness with my go to solution of avoiding physical interaction like a plague.
Smolder can relate.
Definitely a fun SoL concept. However, your grammer is a little bit off and the flow a bit clunky:
Like here you didn't need to put an adverb phrase at the start, I have no idea what the semicolon is doing there - and you don't put a capital after a semicolon as it is. :P Also the timing seems weird for me as you are still describing how she's left the cloud and in the same sentence (technically) her trail has already started. It needs to progress.
If I was trying to convey the same concept I'd write it something like:
It's still a bit clunky and I wouldn't use it in a piece, but you get the idea xD
You could do with pruning and rearranging a couple of bits, and the plot seems a bit "happenstancy", but that's a different matter entirely.
I'd recommend an editor. There are a few wandering around fimfiction these days, so they can't be that hard to find :P
This...
Wat...
OK, still very confused, but my brain was very close to
completely restoring to factory settingsgetting too confused for my own good...9007957
I had the same issues when I first started watching. My first exposure was "Return to Harmony", but I didn't really think that much about Rainbow then. But when I started going from Episode 1, I didn't figure her out until something like middle of Season 2, and that was only because of "May The Best Pet Win" where the other characters referred to RD as female.
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So you went to school with Pat?
TBH, I first thought that Rainbow Dash was a Stallion at first when I first saw her image; this was before I actually started watching the show and reading MLP stories.
I thought it would have been good to have at least one Male character in the Mane 6 group to offset the amount of female lead roles and have another guy that Spike could hang with.
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Thank you!
Unfortunately, the way I write is kind of fast-paced. XP I am always afraid that if I wrote stories in too strong detail, I lose the reader's interest. It is a writing habit that I constantly try to work on. Kind of like with another story I am currently writing, "A Changeling's Heart."
As for the semicolon and such, I am still "teaching" myself. As I write these stories I hope to expand my vocabulary.
There is a particular reason why I don't work with editors. Although I had an editor in the past, I still had people criticize the grammar and it caused a stir between the reader and editor. So I thought it was best for me to learn from others and gain the experience.
It is comments like yours that help me become a better writer as I hope to be and I thank you for taking the time to tell me.
I am hoping that in the future you enjoy future chapters!
Did you just assume RAINBOW Dash's gender, and on the Pride week too!?
This reminds me a bit about a Big Mac / RD fic where they were hanging out in a bar an somepony called RD a cute dude, which triggered RD. Everyone thought it was the gender, butt she didn't mind being called a dude, but calling her CUTE instead of, say, awesome? REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!
9008752 Well at least thanks to that we got the Spike/BM/Discord rpg group!
I want to see where this will go!
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That's kinda funny.
A lot of the time I call Rainbow Dash cute and then say she'd probably take offense to that. She'd probably be like Takato and say "Cool, not cute". But she is. Second only to Fluttershy, even though she's cool at the same time. Who says she can't be both? And you know it means something if she's not consciously trying to be cute, but it seemed like she was when she was dancing around in Testing Testing 1 2 3, that's the second most adorable face I've seen a pony make next to Fluttershy in the song at the beginning of Filli Vanilli. Also her fangirl moments in Daring Don't.
I admit to needing a few extra moments watching the show to realize Dash was a mare.
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Close to, but they actually looked more like the love interest from the Pat movie.
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RD is one of the characters that probably shows her emotions outwardly the most along with Pinkie, but RD also has insecurities and is very vulnerable under her bravado, which is why I really like her character. That and I personally value loyalty above other traits in people, so RD being the Element of that fits perfectly.
I'd call RD "sweet" because that can mean BOTH cool and cute, though I'd do it from the cuteness perspective too.
Heh, truth be told, for the first two seasons, I thought that both Dash and Scootaloot were males
I can totally understand the confusion
If it makes you feel better Dash, I always knew you were a mare from the get go.
RD: "Rarity...Make me into a mare."
R: "Ooh, darling I've been waiting years for you to ask!" *pulls out various test sketches and a few dresses*
RD: "...you've put way too much thought into this..."
R: "You should see the line I set up for Applejack..."
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That is the perfect adjective for her, isn't it?
This was pretty funny. Liked and followed!
You know, the first time I ever saw the show, when I didn't know the names of any of the characters or anything, I actually thought Rainbow was male for a little while, just because her voice sounds more masculine.
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me too
I'm offended by your apology at giving offense.
In the words of one of the great gaffe makers...
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This could be interesting. Tracking just in case. A few grammatical errors, but nothing egregious.