Here lies the memories of the Unicorn known as Moon-Scalpel, one of the greatest front-line medical officers of the great war of Equestria.
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An interesting start.
Look forward to seeing how it progresses
In case you haven't already heard of it, there's a Fallout: Equestria Side Stories Compilation Document here where you can post your story. Authors of other side stories hang out there too, so be sure to introduce yourself!
could use some spacing kinda looks like a wall of text but good story
Not bad for a start, but the grammar, punctuation and formatting could use some work. I'd suggest indenting and starting a new paragraph when a new idea or dialog is written. So something like this.
= = = = =
"Dammit DBK!" yelled the voice in the back of the daft writers head.
"What?" he questioned back as he continued to type words on the keyboard without any thought or reason.
"Stop being a grammar nazi and let the man/woman write what he or see wants too!" the voice yelled back.
"But-, but-, there are soooOOoo many errors in it. My inner grammar nazi can't stop wanting to correct it," he responded.
The voice in the back of his head just sighed as it buried it's head in it's hands and began to sob.
"Well I am lazy so its probably not going to happen anytime soon," he added as the sobbing stopped.
= = = = =
So something like that.