Rarity gets carried away, It was only a dress, Stupid dress, Stupid dragon, Stupid Sweetie Belle. Stupid ponies.
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Darling! I didn't mean it...
Are you sure?
I mean, you did call us stupid, Rarity.
It was in a moment of anguish!
Words cannot be unsaid.
Trixie thinks Spike needs a mare who appreciates him.
Spike agrees.
Sorry bro, had to do it.
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splendid darling simply splendid. . . You may burn him now....
Oh company. . .Chocolate Cake?
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I feel like we've probably had this conversation before. You're story is broken into a mess. It's cute and its amusing and the grammar is decent (albeit errors exist) and that's all good. Here's whats not.
You have whole new lines(as in hitting enter to got a new line not a new sentence.) They're both the same sentence and the same paragraph. It should look like this (I fixed the errors while I was at it. Also Applejack, one word.)
Sweetie's mind pondered the camera in front of her. Rarity wanted some shots of her newest creation, A wedding gown commissioned for Sugar Belle to be at the ready for that big question from Big Mac. It was a fine Equestrian country tradition that most fillies kept for marehood. Even Applejack had a hand me down gown from her Ma and Granny Smith.
No massive random gaps. This is everywhere in the story.
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Yea the program would show a fix for this issue (2 line breaks) but when used it show a wall of text.... "My eyes!"
Funny those examples of gapped text don't show up on my screen........
Your lower example is what I see.........Stupid Computers Stupid programs Stupid story
I hit the icon to fix....How does it look now? It looks real lame on this end
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The spacing isn't an issue still, but its still broken in the middle of sentances
It basically read
like this where the sentence is split randomly.
8641321
I'm pretty sure you're hitting enter when you reach the end of the page instead of space.
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So hit space bar? got it..thanks? My screen shows no breaks . . .strange....
stupid computers