[This is the initial collab version with Zine. It's currently being rewritten! Stay tuned for updates.]
It wasn’t long before Alex Benton’s life was going to change. He just didn't expect that to be in the form of a four legged, dethroned queen. However, maybe this world was just what he needed. Something far away from the pain of his old life. Something that allowed him to be different. To be helpful.
Crystal Boundaries of a Skull
They hide, they keep, they hold the walls
And once our troubles can't be stalled
The walls will fall
The walls will fall….
(Cover is an edited shot from the finale of Season 6 of FiM: Edited by meee)
Chapters (5)
This has real potential. Real potential.
Well, I guess I’m on board this train now. Let’s see where it goes!
I don't see tremendous potential as 1st commentator, but I'm intrigued how it all can evolve further.
Don't know what to say about second chapter. May be ok further down the road, but now it paints incomplete and somewhat strange picture.
This feels like an 8-year-old’s show and tell day. 4/10.
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Alex is pretty undefined so far as a character. The main goal of Chapter 2 was to try to give him some backstory and show how impulsive he can be, and how he takes issues kinda personally.
As we move on the character development should be a looot smoother and less "in your face". Or at least, that's the goal!
(We're also trying to figure out how to balance co-writing each chapter. At first, AmIDeadInside and I alternated between chapters, but now merging our styles is a bit more difficult than we anticipated.)
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Ah. Still, unnecessary drama.
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Hmm... I really want to see the redemption arc that could come out of this, granted I have no clue what’s going to happen, that’d still be nice, regardless of what actual plot the author(s) have in store.
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Cliff hanger much?
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I see hesitation... Well, regardless, all aboard the reformation train!
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Uhhhhhh......... that’s quite a bit.
In the meanwhile, read anything good recently? I just finished Firebird Dahlia, and I need something else to take my mind off how useless I am. Fuck, did it again.
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‘Twas the first thing I read off fimfic.
And I assume you are using Google Docs?
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OOH NEW ANTIDEPRESSANT FODDER
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Ooh shinysssssss...
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There. Happy?
grumbles
Huh, interesting start. I just hope Chryssie wasn't completely overwritten out of something.
Seems like a friendly guy.
Huh, well, that teacher's a dick.
D: I really hope Chryssie wasn't just overwritten.
Ooh, it's going to be really interesting!
Well, I find this quite enjoyable. I am especially intrigued as to how the sections that take place in Earth tie into this. While it may be on haitus, I can't wait for more.