The Second Story of Sky Blue

by Capulus

A Few Notes

--Notes--
Alright. I only have three things to say... Or write... So at least I won’t keep you for too long.
Alright. Firstly:
I have said it about twenty times now, But here it is again:
Thank you so much to Zoom_The_Kid for the idea for this story, and allowing me to use his own OC, Zoom as the antagonist. Zoom_The_Kid id a genius. I’m so glad that they gave me that idea, because, without it, Sky Blue would have fallen into obscurity, and probably would have eventually been forgotten by me altogether. But now, I have got the idea for a series, but I’ll talk --Okay, write-- about that later. Thanks again to Zoom_The_Kid for the idea and allowing me the use of their OC.
Alright. Secondly:
This next one is about my idea for the Discord defeat.
I’m sorry if the scene with Discord was a bit... Okay A LOT rushed. I wanted to just get him in and out as quickly as possible, while still showing how powerful he still was, and how he had come back, and why he had given up so easily. I was actually originally going to have Pinkie defeat him, with her crazy mind. But then I remembered that she had been brainwashed easily by Discord in ‘The Story Of Sky Blue’, so I was afraid it wouldn’t make sense. I was re-watching Season One at the time, and one of my favourite songs was on: ‘Winter Wrap-up’. You all know the one. Well, I looked up from my computer, clutching my head in frustration when I saw one of my favourite background ponies walk past the screen, Doctor Whooves. That was when I got the idea that I could include him, and the other background ponies --Octavia, Vinyl Scratch, Bon-Bon, Carrot-Top, Lyra Heartstrings and Derpy-- with a more focused role. I mentioned Derpy vaguely in the first one, but I wanted to mention more, and more directly this time. This revelation also helped me clear up a plot hole that had been annoying me . You see, earlier on in the story, originally, there was just a stage randomly at the wedding party --When Sky kicked the racists out of the party (Something I loved writing. I’m definitely not a racist. I hate everyone equally. LQL JK)-- And it was annoying me that there just happened to be a stage there that Sky could make her announcement from. Having Octavia playing with her band-- Sorry, ‘Small Orchestra’-- was the perfect reason for there to be a stage and microphone. So, I decided to have Doctor Whooves have his mind attacked by Discord. But then I realised, what if I made a mistake? I’ve never seen Doctor Who, so what if he doesn’t actually ever fight enemies off in his mind? There is still a remnant of that though, where Doctor Whooves says;
“I have faced worse than you Draconequu--” I just liked that idea so much, I didn’t want it to be forgotten. But now I had nopony to fight Discord off. I wanted somepony new to work with. We had all seen the mane six’s ‘Sanctums’ and all of the background ponies were now busy. --I wanted to keep it even, three out, three healing--
That is, almost all of them. There was one I had forgotten, but had mentioned a little earlier on:
Derpy Whooves.
I wouldn’t have included her if I hadn’t of looked on my phone to see if I had any notifications. I saw that somepony had commented on ‘The Story Of Sky Blue’. It was actually the first person who had commented on it as well. The user Derpyhooves15. I would like to thank them for their --however indirect-- help in the plot for this. When I saw the comment, and read the username again, I got a flash of inspiration. In fact, I’m not ashamed to say that I found myself exclaiming “IIIDEEEAAA!” much to the chagrin of my family. I immediately went back to my computer and started typing like mad. There were so many spelling and grammar errors you would think I was a primary school kid. Then again, by today’s standards, more like a high school kid. Anyway, I went over the part in Derpy’s mind, and it... It... It felt right. I just loved the idea that Derpy’s mind was so... So... Different, that not even Discord was able to penetrate it. Like I said, I know it seemed rushed, and it kind of was. But it was also to give it that ‘What the buck just happened?’ feeling.
Alright. Thirdly,
I’m not sure if this is common practice, or if it’s even acceptable, but I’m going to get it down, just in case it is. If anypony out there would like to help me with this series --Which is what I hope it will be, with the help of other writers out there-- please PM me. Oh, yeah... I haven’t said what I need help with...
What I would like help with is this:
I suck at coming up with OCs. It’s not my opinion. It’s a fact. Sky Blue was the second actual good OC I have ever come up with. The other I came up with about five or six years ago, in about grade four. But never mind that. Coming up with Sky Blue for me was a miracle. I wanted to make something at least vaguely original for my first FanFic, and Sky Blue was it. As I said, I suck at coming up with OCs. If anypony out there wants to help me with what I hope I can one day confidently call ‘The Series Of Sky Blue’, please PM me with ideas. It doesn’t have to be one you’ve used in the past. If you just come up with one randomly and would like to see her/him in Sky Blue’s universe, let me know, please.
I don’t care if they are a Pony, or a Changeling. Preferably not a zebra. The only problems I would face with that race, would be the rhyming problems I always face.
...
Okay, that wasn’t the best way to show I’m bad at rhyming. Anyway, If you do choose to help a budding author out, send me a message, with a description --So I don’t picture them as a cardboard box or something-- and at least a rudimentary backstory. I like to know a character’s backstory before I write stories with them in it. I like being able to have them tell stories where they reference their backstories in my stories. Like I said, I’m not sure if this is common practice, but I assume it would be acceptable, judging by the fact that I used Zoom_The_Kid’s OC in this one. I would make sure to give all credit where it was due. As you can see, I have given Zoom_The_Kid credit in both the description, and now here. So at least you know that I would give credit. I don’t steal others’ ideas.
Well... Not often.
LQL, just kidding.
Anyway, I think I’ve written all I meant to write.
If my request isn’t allowed, or if it offends enough people (Believe me, I know that feel) I’ll delete it. But like I said, if anypony wants to help me with this, PM me with a name, description --especially their Cutie Mark--, and at least a RUDIMENTARY backstory. --Just so you know, They would end up being the antagonist, unless you had different ideas. If you don’t want them to be a bad girl/guy, let me know and I’ll figure something out with them as a good girl/guy.--
Oh, I wanted to mention one last thing. As everypony knows, I appreciate ALL advice, but, in all honesty, my biggest worry is the storyline itself. A story can have bad grammar and spelling, --As much of a cardinal sin that it is-- but, --in my eyes at least-- the storyline is the most important part. I like to know if a)It makes sense, b)It is actually good, and c)... I can’t think of anything for c). I like to know this so I can make improvements to future stories. Also, I am quite new to writing, --well, good writing-- so my techniques aren’t the best yet. Advice about that would be appreciated as well. ArcaneAngel has offered me some good advice, and I am going to try and implement it in future. I just hope I didn’t misunderstand --I know that feel too--. Anyway, that’s it... For now.
--Then again, it might be it for Sky Blue if no-one sends me anything--

Sincerely --well, more or less sincerely, I don’t know-- Pyro1101.

Comments

[Capulus]

1149249 Thanks. All I could think of for Derpy to resist him.

[AlkapwnZ]

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[Capulus]

1196971 Nice to know you like it.