The Mirage
Joined 3rd Jul, 2012 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- The Mirage · 11k words · 31 7 · 1.2k views
- The Mirage · 22k words · 27 14 · 700 views
- The Mirage · 8.8k words · 12 1 · 221 views
- Mr Jelly · 5.9k words · 5 6 · 648 views
- GaiaLives · 1.7k words · 9 1 · 676 views
Stats
Page generated in 0.152 seconds
Total duration
761 users online
1,430,454 hits today, 2,454,720 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
I love this! It's so well done.
934835
Thank you! it really keeps me going when people actually like the stories I do
936104
935127 Well I really like your writing style. Actually it's what inspired me to put my ideas down on paper. In fact, if you tried, I think you could pull off a book. It would take a lot of work (I tried to write a book. I got about.... two thirds of the way through and quit.) but I'm sure you would come up with something good.
ah i see you used the edited version of the prologue, thanks
makes me feel special lol
yusss
aww... you countered my black out... o well, i dont think you can injure me in an intense way.
bad comment removed
938665
CELESTIA... YOU BITCH!!!!!
ER MEH GERD!!! THAT CHAPTER WAS AMAZING YOU FRIENDO HAVE JUST GAINED A FOLLOWER
I liked it :3.
*darkness shrouds the town because of spirit element pony*
(nerdy voice with lisp) "It appears you have, activated my trap card"
*sonic rainboom turns the sky back to normal*
945285
You know, you just made my day... Thank you
that was a great chapter
945692
Don't mention it Mirage :D
It's just a joke that got its way into my boyscout troop over summer camp by this kid named Austin. I'm happy it made you laugh
Hmm... This story has my intrests keep me posted.. I may have a probosition for you at a later date
damn that cut deep
see what i did there?
984552
984626
Sadly, yes... he did
Great fic jabronie don't ever stop writing
984838
Never will
HOLY SHIT BRAIN IDEA!!!!
984932
Oh snap! what is it?
Can't be explained in public friendo
I'm so sorry, but I have to post this.
My butt must also be broken. Because it too has a crack in it
985147
Wait, What?
but what a good father
i died out laughing when fluttershy cussed and took over.
985277
985277
Tell me when u finish
985288
It's not funny unless you get it the first time
985385
yeah lol
Okay, I just finished the book.... That was good. I can't believe that mirage died... The fight would have been more epic if aero, mirage, night flash, and Luna teamed up on clestia, dominating her in seconds, leaving her helpless, slowly killing her, torturing her. Cut her horn off, slowly break every bone in her wing. Then cut them off, then when it came to killing her, pinkie turns into the pinkimina Diane pie from cupcakes and tortures her beyond belief. All in all good book.
991888
Mirage was everypony's friend
992346
honestly when he was having that nightmare with Vinyl in the bubble, i thought "Aw, hell naw" but then at the end i was saying "God damn it! Fuck no! NO! NOO!!!"
992546
Glad you enjoyed it
but im still sad
992667 why's that
Oh my gosh I absolutely loved this! It was so tragic but so fun to read! You have the best ideas!
991888 i second
Two things
AWSOME
And FIRST
I do not even know what I read. I know it was reallt good and did not disturb me bacause i did not have to keep stoping. I did not cry at all so it was not horribly depressing but I am still confused as to what exactly it was. I do know It does deserve a favorite though.
This is a pretty interesting sequel. I shall continue.
Beautiful chapter! But, I think that I hate you with a white-hot passion. How could you do that to Spitfire!? Do you have some sick grudge against her or Rainbow? Honestly, I think I would have been more okay with it if you had drawn it out, made her suffer, and then gave a more graphically detailed execution. I love Spitfire and I feel that a quick death did not give my emotions enough time to catch up and let me cry my eyes out.
I want to know what Dash did to Soarin' for what he did to Spitfire. I feel that only the most gruesome, heinous, and sadistic of punishments or tortures are good enough for what he did. Great chapter, by the way. I am still seething for what you did to Spitfire...
The plot twists are everywhere. I am getting dizzy!
This was a really good story. As with all stories, there are some parts that I believe should be changed up a bit or at least added to. When you were making Vinyl a Warewolf, I was expecting you to have her kill Mirage. I liked the fight scene at the end, though in my opinion, it could have been the tiniest bit more detailed and drawn out. I thought that you having Dash say to Soarin', "Say hello to Spitfire for me" before she killed him was a bit off. It should have been more like "see you in hell" or something because you were implying that Soarin' and Spitfire were going to see each other in the afterlife.(please, no one rant on me about the afterlife and all the beliefs and stuff) All-in-all, you have earned another favorite from me. I look forward to reading the "Reboot" of this soon. Keep up the great writing!
The story seems to escalate REALLY quickly. One moment, they're fighting for one side,then they're fighting for the next, then Vinyl's a werewolf, then Mirage is dead, and it's over. Wut?
EDIT: Not only does this story go t fast, it contradicts itself. He says, two chapters earlier, "'Only three things can kill me, Silver, Sharp Wood and Garlic.'" So, he obviously isn't dead. They're gonna end up sealing him in the ground for nothing, because lack of air, isn't mentioned there. Also, Celestia doesn't stab him with wood or silver to make sure, and she doesn't kill him with garlic, so he isn't dead.
5401234
Ah, yes. I do agree this story was a bit on the contradicting side, I guess I had forgotten about the weaknesses as I wrote the story. Like you said, it was also very fast, and I regret not drawing it out for longer. Thank you for the criticism.