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Hope you enjoy! If I don't fall asleep I might finish the super duper clop chapter before you start reading, though I'm starting to see double so probably not!
8444178
I've wanted to do a Chrysalis x Twilight fic for a while, I also love those two together!
You had me at succubus.
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Gosh dang it. I thought I was going to pass this story up just in case, but now I'll have to give it a try.
Wow this sounds good. I just got done rereading Changeling Courtship Rituals, and I was hoping to find something similar soon.
This'll do very nicely.
8444276
Is there some sort of competition going on for that, or is it just the popular idea for now?
Saw the new MLP episode 'A health of Information'.
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No worries, more is coming! Next chapter is essentially done, and already have the basic structure for the rest. Unless the story gets away from me again, that is.
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Fixed, thanks!
This works for me.
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Chrysalis is the queen of clopfics, I'm but a humble vector for her greatness.
8444369
Goddamn that pic just killed me... Thanks mate, that was a silly mistake; fixed.
Ooo. This chapter was really fun actually
8444673
why not both?
You cock teasing bastard.
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Congrats!
8444400
You have some stories that do a good job at salvaging Blueblood as a character, though I've seen too many that just go with the "Blue is just a misunderstood hero and Rarity deserved it". Good Blueblood redemption story exist though, like The Best Night Ever.
8444673
Well, on one hand I like fluffy endings and am a sucker for cutsey romance, on the other I clapped when this happened: derpicdn.net/img/view/2016/10/23/1279682.gif
Make of this what you will!
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Eh, the clop chapter was like 10k words, I had to spit it up, it's not like creating a cliffhanger mid-sex scene is something I would ever do on purpose, that would be just cruel.
Also expect next chapter by Monday.
8444882
Yeah, ponies would have just kneeled to avoid getting slimed... or you know, bent over eagerly, one of the two.
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Oh, cheers! Thanks to the readers for pushing it up there!
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Yep, fixed, danke!
I. Have no idea how you are going to do it. But I'll put my trust in you. For now, the thumb up is in order.
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I'll do my best not to disappoint! And thank you for the help in pointing out mistakes I missed, cheers!
Twisalis? Instant fav
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Happy to serve! Working on next chapter now, should be up soon.
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Hue, glad you're in the mood for some mindless clop Toxi, have a seat on Chrysalis' lap and enjoy your stay!
Is it strange that the parts where she teases Twilight (especially when she transformed) turned me on, but the one with actual sex, or the beginnings anyway, hasn't?
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Depends on what you prefer when it comes to clop really: the sensual psychological teasing, or the balls to the walls dirty smut. Next chapter should have some of both, hopefully it will hit your fancy.
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Chrysalis also beat Celestia (Twilight's mentor) in a magical duel, almost conquered Canterlot, and managed to capture pretty much all the important ponies on her second attempt. Funnily enough she was beaten at the last second by the power of love both times, but I digress. Point is: we don't know how strong Chrysalis really is, we don't know how strong Twilight is in comparison, so really it's up to headcanons at this point.
Can't wait for the moment when Twilight is going to actually like that tongue.
I am talking about deep french-kissing in public, of course. The reactions would be priceless.
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gladly.
I should also mention, I'm a big fan of that tongue deep throat action, is gud. It's probably the closest I'll get to ever liking anything resembling tentacle porn.
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I know, it was just a bit of a surprise... not an unpleasant one though
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Heh, no competition. The folks who write them just seem to enjoy seeing who can out snark the other, which always leads to a lot of hilarious dialogue.
Nice! I love the build up and interaction with Chrysalis and Twilight. It's like that Courtship Ritual story, well the marriage thing anyway.
Is Chrysalis going to try and seduce the rest of the Mane 6? It seems like the thing she would do seeming as she wants to built up her hive again. And I'm pretty sure she is also thinking she wants to get to Celestia, I got the vibe 1st chapter that Celestia broken mood was because she had feelings for Twilight.
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Glad you like it! Though, now I'm kind of scared of seeming like I'm trying to copy Changeling Courtship Rituals (my inspiration was a pic by Phantim), does Chrysalis end up bedding other ponies in Courtship?
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Cheers man! And I'm in the same boat as you really: started a short story just for clop, ended up writing a bunch of darn fluff.
8446179
It's different, don't worry. There, Chrysalis was geniunely in love with Twilight, and Twilight only fell into marriage by surprise and changeling customs. Here she bravely sacrifices herself in attempt to redeem the queen, and Chrysalis perfectly understands it and enjoys teasing ponies on legal rights. At least, as I can see.
There also was no Chrys x Mane 6 or anything else.
BTW, it could be worse: if you started a story about sacrifice, friendship, love and one amused changeling queen, but then devolved into simple clop.
I was hoping more for some abduction and enslaving... on a global scale, y'know? But this is good to, I guess.
Well, at least she's getting a head start.
So far Twilight is being way too submissive for my taste; not just romantically but in everything. If that's what you want and you're sticking to it, then whatever, but I think it would be more interesting if, say, Chrysalis was just as helpless in the face of Twilight's mad science as Twilight was in the face of Chrysalis's teasing. Or something else.
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Eh... funny you should say that... But yeah, I tried to write Twilight with a submissive streak (with the way she acts towards authority in the show I kinda got that vibe from her) but without her being completely subservient, like when she strikes back at Chrysalis in the carriage, protects her friends, gets mad about her diary... I may have made her too eager to please on some points though, I'll admit.
I like dom sub dynamics, it's kinky, but what I really prefer is power struggles: characters pushing against one another for dominance, trying to get the other off balance, that kind of thing. So I'll keep your comment in mind as I finish the next chapter, cheers!
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You already cornered the market for stories about Chrysalis enslaving the world with sexy consequences, I had to go another route! Also, an angry Chrysalis invasion is another story I'm planning, but shhhh, don't tell no one.
8446259
Eh, that's good to hear, thanks. I was scared I would have to change some plans I had for this, but this works.
Also seeing how much people like the story, I can't really complain about it growing out of the constraints I set for it
8447390
It's true that Twilight hasn't completely rolled over, but it always seemed like she was at Chrysalis's mercy in every situation. I had the distinct impression, though maybe it was a wrong one, that pushing back only worked because it amused Chrysalis to back off. As if even when she "wins" a confrontation she's still dancing to Chrysalis's tune, as in the scene with the carriage.
In any case, thanks for listening to feedback.
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Heh. Don't worry about that. As long as you make the story truly your own and aren't taking from someone else, I'm sure it'll be fine. Besides, if you can only think of one other good story with a similar concept, that means there's still all kinds of new ground you can break with your own take on the idea.
In any case, you know how many stories are on this site? If it were possible to read all of them, I think whoever did would agree that it's pretty hard not to be have a few similarities to some story or another.
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Ah, there you are.
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Wew, that was a lot of them, thanks a bunch, all fixed!
Nope, French, and very dyslexic (I think it's pretty obvious from some of those mistakes). I'm grateful for the help, though if you could send these in PM I'd appreciate it: with me the list of mistakes per chapter can take a whole page of comments
Oh my god opening up with a Rainbow slut joke. Love it.
This story has so much teasing...delicious
Like a maraca
Maybe it is ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
Maybe it grows back, and Vinyl and Chrysalis have secretly been friends this whole time.
Bulged
Lounge
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Sorry, I've been reading this last chapter for a while. Don't worry, I'll take those off the other comments.
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No probs, I'm grateful for the help more than anything. No matter how many times I reread, I always miss a bunch of stuff; strangely enough I'm pretty good at spotting mistakes when I read other stories, but never on my own
Thanks, all fixed!
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So, I'm holding off on reading the story until the next chapter is added, but based on this comments, I'm gonna make the fair assumption that Twilight doesn't turn the tables on Chrysalis in the clop chapter, which is a shame :p
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Where there is Chrysalis is where i will be!
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I can't tell you what happens, but, your assumption might be correct. At least for chapter 3. I did emphasis that Chrysalis also has female genitals, and she wants a lot of children. Hint hint.
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This is more of a realistic and perverted version of it. Chrysalis would be acting similar if she were to try and hang with the main 7. Also she doesn't dote on Twilight like in Courtship in which she caves or freaks out at the sight of Twilight about to cry or hurt.
And no not really. She at least offered I think Twilight they could engaged in a threesome if she wanted. I do know that Celestia straight up told Twilight that she was game for a threesome with her and Chrysalis though. Best scenes ever.
And honestly it would make a whole lot of sense for Chrysalis to try and seduce other ponies for their love and having her children. Hell it would make sense for her to try and use the time travel spell to change things to rule the world.
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Well, I'm still fairly certain that Twilight doesn't turn the tables on her, as in, becomes dominating, and decides Chrysalis will be pregnant whether she wants to or not
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She might be shown with a submissive streak, but (and bear with me because I haven't actually sat down and watched all the episodes) she also seems to have a pretty strong hypnofetish since those are some of her go-to spells when she panics. Parasprites devouring crops? Spell that changes what they view as food. Late for a Friendship Report? Want-it-need-it. The memory spell, the reformation spell, making the fruit bats not want to eat apples, and a few others that I probably missed.
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Ah, good to know. I can't really see Chrysalis being the "madly in love starry eyed" type, so that's a big difference right there. Onward then!
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Aaah, gotcha. Yeah that's not the type of Twilight I'm going for in this story, so you probably should give it a pass yeah.
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Yeah, there are a lot of ways you can go with Twilight, she has a lot of different sides to her character. Perfect pairing for a Chrysalis, someone who specializes in manipulation!
I both shudder at and eagerly look forward to the reactions her friends will have when her belly starts swelling up with eggs. Considering how they've already reacted, I dare say one or two might suffer a temporary mindbreak.
Quite amusing, so far. And the fun is just about to start. Great work!
And what's even better... it's only getting started. In Shy's own words; oh, my.