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Kye Belmont

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Sornos
Sornos #1 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Sornos Rush: Race 1- the race begins ·
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ps if any one wants to meet me or any of the other player's message me.

Lycanthromancer
Lycanthromancer #2 · Nov 9th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Wolfs Culture: Branch 1 - Yuvee ·
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Given the complete lack of intelligibility of the synopsis, I can tell without even looking at the first chapter that it'll be a waste of time reading it.

If you want readers, please do some proofreading.

Texus
Texus #3 · Nov 9th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Wolfs Culture: Branch 1 - Yuvee ·
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I have a question after looking at the chapters names, are there more than one main char?

Texus
Texus #5 · Nov 9th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Wolfs Culture: Branch 1 - Yuvee ·
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hhhmmmm not necessarily, but ended up not liking every main char everytime I had such a story and even in a real book that worked like that, switching between characters.

Do you have the time to explain how this is going to work in your storie?, depending on your answer I might start with this story sooner than expected.

oh and I would like to know what the sex tag in your story means. I mean this is M rated so I guess there are scenes shown, or is it more language?
I just don't like the idea of 80% sex and 20% story, it'S worse if there is no romance to notice and only meaningless sex. Yes I'm more for the romantic aspects in stories itself.

Kye Belmont
Kye Belmont #6 · Nov 9th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Wolfs Culture: Branch 1 - Yuvee ·
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I'll try to answer as best I could. Do you have a list of questions for me to follow?

Texus
Texus #7 · Nov 9th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Wolfs Culture: Branch 1 - Yuvee ·
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Hhhhmm let's see,...I think I write you an PM so you know what I'm talking about and if I have further questions tomorrow when I'm not tired then I continue then.
However I think with two questions most of it is covered.

Texus
Texus #8 · Nov 15th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Sornos Rush: Race 1- the race begins ·
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a chirping cheeta? (I mean I can think of some kind of weird flying Cheta thing but I'm not sure if that is the creature you tried to describe here.

“I’ll just sleep now.” I say, laying on the floor to try and sleep. I almost fall asleep, if only something rough and wet didn’t lick my manhood!

I find it funny, but I'm curious if they really do that, if similar animals are that direct.

And she was once like me, a human, until turn into a cheetah it was to much for her and became who she is now. I feel sorry for her. Forced into my shoes times ten i'm torn up that i can't help her.

somehow knowing that she was a normal thinking human before makes this a bit weird.
I'm curious how you explain his new gotten knowledge.

‘What does she want with me?’ I wish I could understand her. Hearing her chirp at me then to the changeling, human, thing.

I'm still curious how he knows that.

A laugh escapes her lips. “Oh I see;” She turn to me with a grin. “He’s still have his human sane eh.”

Not sure what to think about that yet. I normally hate ponie stories in which they go wild and are forced to act on their heat time thing. (I always forgot how to call it).

“-we aren’t them anymore sister! They failed to serve Ganondorf, and died! Dead dead and not one of those possum act kind to boot, as in gone!” She huffed and grumbled. “But now we serve that queen, and it’ll be a pain in a neck too.”

that'S interessting again.

This looks like a nice story to try and start writing, but I'm sadly I have hardly the same enthusiasm as a year before for writing myself.

Texus
Texus #9 · Nov 15th, 2017 · · · Chapter 1: Wolfs Culture: Branch 1 - Yuvee ·
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It was a bit strange to see him being forced to sleep, probably more because he woke up with appareantly the same ponies.

I knew what was happening now, “I am no pet!” I screamed as my front paw slammed down on the bowl, the wind from outside muffled all sound that escaped the crevices of the wooden structure. “I am no pet.” I repeated.

honestly I like him acting like that even if it is strange to him for now. (i still have to figure out the animal) The only thing I didn't understood was them making him sleep but probably letting him free in their house.

I remember you had some rules for this chapter, but I still want to ask why he didn't just gave that ponie the feeling that he was a rather proud animal.

This was really not bad, maybe the best chapter yet.
The only confusing moment left was the "I believe I can fly moment and that I'm not finding a clear picture of that animal."
I admit I skip part like when someone is describing how he is kicking something or stuff like that in a fight and I probably skipped his explanation for flying around.

Kye Belmont
Kye Belmont #10 · May 9th, 2018 · · · Chapter 1: Draco: 1- the princess of storms awakens ·
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[optional question to answer] Out of the first chapter's of the four characters, which is your favorite?

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