Rarity is at her Manehatten branch to help Coco make the place more popular. She's schmoozing and out partying late into the night as she tries to meet the right ponies to whom she can sell her brand.
She eventually meets Weak Stitch, who is one of the more popular ponies on the fashion scene. He's interested in her, but his tastes are odd, and Rarity starts getting the feeling she's being followed when she can smell his cologne around her.
As she tries to forget the events, things start getting more and more strange. What can Rarity do about it?
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I give her a month before she gets caught, because Rarity isn't just a fashion designer but a national hero, friend to the ruling princesses and a piece of the nations major defenses.
OK, I gotta check this out soon. How do you come up with long, creepy darkfic ideas so fast?
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I write literally every day, and I have a backlog of stories I'm uploading as well. This one is an older one. Newer story should finish within a week, I think.
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Oh sure, she's probably going to get caught, but she didn't know everything there was to know about Rarity. She just wanted to be beautiful.
Well I'm intrigued.
Well then, that was certainly a bit creepy.
This was actually fucking excellent. How do you have so few followers?
I have one recommendation, though. That coverart is way too blatant and on the nose. You do a really good job gradually amping up the tension from creepy to horror, but the coverart betrays that buildup completely. I would replace it with something far more subtle.
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Hahaha! You're right, it is. I'll see what I can find.
As for the followers; it's horror. Horror is very niche to begin with, and pony horror even more so, and that's all I write.
This actually spooked me. Favorite.
Heyo. I blogged a thing about your story, if ya wanna check it out. I hesitate to call it a review, but there it is.
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I have read your review, thank you. I would certainly enjoy a list of your choices for editing purposes. I'm my own editor, so I inevitably miss a lot more than someone else would. As for your comment on the coverart, I understand what you mean, but you yourself said you were drawn in by it. I feel it gets the point across and is interesting enough to draw attention, while only seeming obvious once you have finished the story itself.
But thank you for your interest. I appreciate it.
So... Rarity's dead now, isn't she?
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Oh, super dead.
i thought ghoul or vampire, not skin suit. Also DAMN she's fucked. She was gonna let Rarity suck off a corpse penis? I'm suprised the mouth was more concerning. She's clearly new to this, since if they degrade 3 years in shes doing it wrong. Treat your damned leather!!
Considering the multiple sources of mind manipulation in Equestria (some that Rarity has experienced herself), it seems really weird that no one has been suspicious about that going on.
Eh, this is kind of awful with the amount of contrivances needed to work. Honestly, while the premise itself is not bad (though definitely been done plenty of times) pretty much every decision after just ruins it. For one, this absolutely should have been some random, unimportant OC since otherwise it would never work, but then again that would also ruin things since Needle wanted to go after a big name. Second, this would have worked infinitely better as a regular scary story instead of fanfiction, because once again the setting pretty much makes the scenario impossible without a bunch of contrivances (such as the countless ones in this story). Finally, the thumbnail for the story is completely misleading and all but clickbait. Though it does also show how this would never work considering the whole skinsuit thing being pretty damn obvious.
This feels and reads like cheap and quickly written gore and horror for the sake of it while using the setting and misleading thumbnail to get more attention than it otherwise would have. Which is probably why this comment is kind of harsh since that's a big pet peeve of mine.