One day Princess Celestia and Luna found new technology called “Portal Technology” allowing you to create two portals and enter into one and exit out the other. Using the smartest scientist from all over Equestria, they created a company called Celestial Science, after a few years Celestial Science was THE most popular science company ever, and after a few more years they created a computer called GLaDOS, GLaDOS was a creation of Celestial Science, a personality core designed exactly to be fitted as a central computer mainframe. The project began under the oversight of a stallion named Cave Johnson over the company, and was an attempt to create a fully functional, advanced artificial intelligence which was originally intended to be occupied by Johnson as one of his attempts to cheat death. After it became apparent to Johnson that he may die of moon rock poisoning before development on GLaDOS would be completed, Johnson motioned for the personality core to be based on his daughter Caroline instead.
After a decade's worth of hard work, GLaDOS was officially activated as part of one of the many events during the company's "Bring Your Daughter to Work" day. The scientist started enlisting ponies, pegasai, and unicorns of all kinds as test subjects for Portal Technology, Cave Johnson then enlisted a “special” test subject, a human, and yes, you guessed it, that “special” test subject was me. He enrolled me by using a special portal that was able to jump through universes, he just chose somewhere, reached out and grabbed me. But he didn’t just choose me, he also enlisted six other test subjects with me, to work on my cooperation. Six ponies, there names were, Twilight Sparkle, Rarity, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, and Pinkie Pie. There a funny bunch, and they were tons of fun to test with, but one day that fun came to a nightmarish halt. One day GLaDOS found out that she was able to take control of half of the facility's features, and she deemed that the scientists were getting in the way of science.
So one day GLaDOS began killing most of its inhabitants by flooding the Enrichment Center with neurotoxin. However, only few if not only one of the staff such as Doug Rattmann had survived her attacks. I, Twilight, Applejack, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, Celestia, and Luna survived the attack. After the attack Celestia and Luna took it upon themselves to stop GLaDOS, we all wanted to help of course but they said that we needed to stay out of sight incase GLaDOS’s turrets came by, so they both put us in separate rooms that resembled hotel rooms and told us to take a nap there until they returned.
that was really good mate, i really enjoyed it, since this is only the first chapter i'm looking forward to more comedy, action and danger filled chapters, do keep it up
927435 Thanks, Chapter 2 is already underway. I just feel alittle embarrased by this since it's my first time doing this.
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dont be nevous about it being your first fic, be nevous of what comments you'll get, have a look at my fic, look at the shit and bull i got because of my OC, only a few guenuinely didnt like my story, a few people liked it, but the down thumbs you'll see is mainly because of the length, my OC and because its too generic, honestly, you're lucky i was the first to comment, and it was a good one, just keep your spirits up and keep writing, after all, its your story and you dont need to stop for anyone, just saying that in case, but still, keep up the good work.
927583 Thanks, and you're right. And your story REALLY isn't that bad. I've read it and it's super awsome. I can only same to you. Don't let the hate get ya down. It's times like these fanfic writers gotta stick together!
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not one problem and thanks mate, and thats to that little bit, there's only one question, Bro-Hoof? /)
928010 (\ Brohoof.
hey man, nice second chapter, well written and definitly well thought out, keep up the good work mate.
981894 Thanks man, I try.
Just a quick heads up, my computer monitor is on the fritz, so it may be a while before I post another chapter. Pending on when this piece of junk decides to die.
This is really great, a bit, (ridiculously) unoriginal, seeing as literally every single thing was in Portal 2, but it is great!
P.S. just because I think it was missing,
992919 That's the point. I'm re-telling the story of portal but I do add my own stuff to it too.
I HEREBY CLAIM FIRST POST!
Also, great story dude!
1061133 XD thanks dude. I try.
You forgot to say that the cube was a Companion Cube! Unless, of course it wasn't a companion cube in your story.
Great story!
1086788 Ah, I guess I did forget to type that. Sorry, it's fixed now. :D
Sound like some good advice.
P.S. Excelent chapter.
P.P.S. First post! Yay!
1117727 LOL Thanks, and horray for 1st post!
Neat.
But... Chapter 1 was a bit confusing. It escalated quickly.
1568496 Thanks. I do my best, and hopefully I'll get better in the future.
1570662 Okai. Now if you excuse me, I need to troll some bad writers
1572296 Have fun! :D
1572663 I will. And there's NOTHING you can do about it!
Lol.. I got him to delete the story!
1575204 Obvious epic sucess troll is obvious!
1575225 Teehee! He did a crying emoticon...
I'm gonna start writing my fanfic.. check it out
1578055 I totally will. I'm a luna-tic for fanfics.
1579167 Aweshome. (Awesome) It might suck a little, keep in mind it's my first fanfic
1579281 I know that feel, this is after all my first fan-fic and it's a bit shakey, trust me, I think I will enjoy it.
You better
...It's been a day, and it STILL hasn't been accepted. Wow
1580141 Wait.. nonononono. Don't read it. I need to clear it of the shit that was left behind in it. I only had an hour, so it was rushed..
1583132 Don't worry, take your time. The main key for making fanfics is taking your time. Trust me, I can wait.
1583194 Oh thank god.
Okay, I just submitted it. It's called "Blood". Not the rainbows within. Blood is still being processed, so don't expect it until late
All righty, new chapter!
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Wow this was terrible..
MOAR! MOAR I SAY! MOAR CHAPTERS!
1625521 Sure thing.
1626201 Check out the new Rainbows Within
I think....
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1778076 Thanks for reading. :D
>> Ultimauser50 Thanks for writing. :D
1778137 No prob, I'll crank out another one soon.
this has the most original dialogue of any pony/portal fic i've ever read. Amazing work.
1785425 Thank you. I try.
that is the best portal related line i've ever heard.
Plz hurry.
English accent... i though it was western
We need The Itch! (My least favorite chapter, favorites are The Part Where He Kills You, and The Escape)
well the 4th wall just got raped...
1993713 It has indeed, oh and indeed it has. And I must say that I agree with your user name. Twilight is indeed the best pony.
I have played Portal 2 so much I can literally hear GLADoS saying her lines. Great job. I want you to do the whole game.