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Haillee
I like to write grim dark. Every now and then there may be some questionable content but you will know if there is.
Haillee
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everypony and somepony must be spaced. Every pony and some pony. unless you want to make it fast then put a hyphen every-pony and some-pony.
this right here needs to be fixed.
All she felt now was smack after smack to her bare flank.
this should be right
All she felt is a smack to her bare flank. Present tense
She
feltedfelt a smack on her bare flank. Past tenseAnother way to put it is
All she felt now was a smack to her bare flank.
hey i thought you stoped writing writing on here
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This is incorrect. Just like it's "everybody" and not "every body", or "someone" and not "some one"
Didn't read the story, but saw your comment and wanted to correct a semi-common misconception.
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It's called a hyphen
the sign -, used to join words to indicate that they have a combined meaning or that they are linked in the grammar of a sentence (as in pick-me-up, rock-forming ), to indicate the division of a word at the end of a line, or to indicate a missing or implied element (as in short- and long-term ).
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I understand the concept of a hyphen. You're just using it incorrectly. As you said, a hyphen is used to join words. The problem is "everypony" is one word. No need for a space or a hyphen.
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I thought it was two words.
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It's not. Easy mistake, Just try to be more cautious in the future. The last thing we need is more perpetuation of misinformation
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Actually, you're both right. In my country, every body is two words. There is no reason to be harsh. I like to use hyphens but, in theory, we shouldn't argue.
UK: centre, theatre
US: center, theater
see how these words are different.
It's the same as hyphens and no hyphens we all use different kinds of grammar.
Now on to the fiction at hoof.
I read this and it made me smile so much... I like it so far and you get an 8/10 from me.
I can't wait for more sex on this fiction :)
However, there is some grammar that needs fixing just a bit but, it can't stop you from writing the second chapter.
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Since we all have different kinds of grammar try not to attack a user without reading the story at first.
Don't attack users from their own grammar experience.
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No one is attacking anyone. I saw something wrong, and I wanted to correct him.
I think you are also wrong, but I don't have the patience to respond to you right now.
Me reading the story has nothing to do with correcting this dude's false presumptions on the word "somepony".
Come off your high horse, bud
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I'm not going to say both of your suggestions are wrong, but the second one is definitely wrong. Although, being open to cultural differences in language, I'm going to say either/or is correct for the "everybody" vs "every body" thing. Same with the hyphen thing, but a hyphen being used is not common. It's like using a semi-colon in front of a compound sentence's coordinating conjunction. It's done often, but it's technically accurate.
Secondly, no offense, but you're not too sound grammatically yourself. I'm not saying this to insult you, but I'm saying this, because I can't understand your suggestion, due to the fact it's not a cohesive sentence. So, instead, let me break this down and perhaps you can help me understand what you're getting at?
You're saying this:
is incorrect? Right?
Well, it's not. It's a very poor sentence, I'll say that much. But there's nothing about it that's "incorrect."
Secondly:
This suggestion is wrong. Felt is the past tense of feel, not felted. Felted isn't a word, or at least not in that sense.
I appreciate that you're trying to help out an author, which is good on you, but I'm of the opinion... if you're don't know what you're talking about, don't pretend like you do. Say the author was incorrect—which they aren't, albeit, it's a poor sentence—they would be taking your advice, which wouldn't be helping them, because either way they're wrong.
I appreciate what you're trying to do, but make sure you know what you're talking about before you offer advice.
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This is in no shape, form, way, or fashion an attack. All Chillbook did was correct what was technically wrong, which is more than I can say for Flora Blossom, although what they did was unintentional.
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Ya me too, but then I did it again.... I don;t know how to stop...
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First off thank you all for your comments and help, though I am a high school and suck at grammar. I mostly use Grammarly for help but I can't pay for it so it isn't the best. If anyone wants to go through and help me with it I am all ears.
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I wouldn't worry about your grammar, 'hon. It's readable and better than other stuff on the site. Of course, you could definitely improve, but you're also in high school so it's no biggie.
If you'd like an editor or someone who could teach you some grammar rules or how to improve your writing, there are several users on the site who are willing, you'd just have to look around. ^^
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I can take a look at things. If you're fine with some waiting time, that is, sometimes I need a while to get around to proofreading (not usually longer than a day though!).
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That would be amazing thank you.
so...they give them cutiemarks? well, as good as they can be, i guess.
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Do you use Google Docs? That's among the easiest ways to proofread things. It's really useful.
Awww, its cute but Lion was a asshat
Loved the story. Deffinetly going to re read it a few times. And interesting turn at the end.
Great work. ^^
When over read I'll see if I can't find any mistakes that could be in this just to help out ^^