Matthew is lonely. His parents don't pay much attention to him, he doesn't have any friends, but he is very independent. One day, a spell from an old book sends him to Equestria. As he continues to interact with the residents of Ponyville, he finds a friendship that will last a lifetime. But nothing this good can be real...can it?
Seems promising....... Meh I'll track it
895609 thanks A lot! I wanted to take a slighty different approch on HiE. you know how most of the time the human does the adventure in ponyville, right? I decided I wanted the adventure to be about a journey that leads him home instead. Its gonna be sorta like the odyssey in that sense. Anyway I hope you enjoy the first part of the story. (The first 4 chapters are kinda a really long prologue.)
Okay, there's not too many problems with this story apart from pacing and realism. Because seriously.
“I would like to say the same to you, but you asked first, so I’ll answer.” “ I’m something called a human being, or in scientific terms a Homo sapiens. I come from a place called planet Earth.”
Who the hell talks like that?
I don't really know, but I kinda wanted him to sound formal in his introduction because its like there aliens to him right? He doesn't want to die on first contact. I will also work on my pacing.905207
Looks pretty nice.
Yup, it's good.
905207 That is how I talk to everyone normally.
1816950 wow... how did you find my story? Can you give me some feed back on it?
I was searching for a human story, and I just saw this, so I went out on a whim and decided to read it. It was interesting to read.
DEAD AF, put a tombstone on this bitch