This story is about a pony name LightBlolt. One day he went out and wonderd around in the EverFree Forest to see what it is about. Thinking its like every other forest in Equestria, he walks in the EverFree forest. Not thinking anything bad is going to happen that he will just be in and out with no problem. His mind changes when he walks though. After that day his whole live has changed. He finds out something has been following him out of sight for quite some time but when it chooses to to show...
Warning: This story mite be scary for some people. If it gets to scary then stop it. Enjoy!
P.s: If this story gets pretty popular and if some ask for another, i'll make another. But that's if it does.
Chapters (8)
Hmmm...
You're writing in present tense, but it kind of feels odd, and "said" should be "says".
Also, a lot of things seem repetitive and pointless, for example:
'Where did this fog come from...' LightBolt ask himself as he keeps walking. 'Other then the strange fog, and the trees tend to have a strange feeling to them as well.'
'This place isn't that bad. It has a strange feel but its not bad.'
And it needs editing.
Damn it Nappa...
Slendy is best stalker.
Depressing as crap ending................................I LIKE IT!!!
899819 I hope you and many others enjoy as much or more then I did writing it.