Hello my honey...

Yes! Thanks for writing this story!

Hope we will get a nice grey protagonist.

I think you should have the characters interact more BEFORE you throw the big plot twist at us

7768753 All of the characters so far are minor ones, meant to help establish the main char. and provide a small amount of conflict at the beginning.

My one and only question is why did they take him to the dungeon?

7775302 It was the only quiet and safe place they could find quickly, they would have left him in the sewer but the guards were already looking down there.

He was so quiet that it was odd to hear him more than twice a day.

His introvert game is weak. My sociology professor doesn't know what my voice sounds like, nor does anyone else in the class.
Get brood, scrub.

So... I take it we're going with a modified ruleset for this Equestria. Y'know, since canon cutiemarks can't be earned without an epiphany on the subject... even if you don't quite realize that it was that realization in particular. Moreover, they've kinda pounded it home that a pony's cutiemark is invariably something they realized they enjoyed prior to the mark's emergence.

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that a pony's cutiemark is invariably something they realized they enjoyed prior to the mark's emergence

two words Troubleshoes Clyde.

7764191 Hello my ragtime, summertime gal