Every year, Scootaloo goes to a special place, one to remind her of a day she will honor no matter the circumstances. But what will happen when her friends ask about this special time she has?
Kind of sad, if you don`t like sad things this might not be for you.
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the only problem i have is that you wrote:
'Kind of sad, if you don`t like sad things this might not be for you. '
it is literally just that, Kind of sad. the emotional part isn't spanned out long enough to actually stir any emotion in me.
but the writing is good. as is the grammar, and the storyline is decent. and for that. it gets a thumbs up from me.
So many tears were weeped at the last line of this story.
The ending....nice!
831045
sad. It was 
sad. And there was something off about it in the beginning. Grammar or something.
This. Is so true.
Sure, it was sad. But it wasn't
831108 I think he/she also needs to make it longer. this is too rushed for such an 'emotion stirring' style story,
This was good! Just, like others have said, make it a little longer. Let the sorrow seep in over time. It will make it better! Great job though... Felt a little something snap inside.
it was indeed sad, but not sad enough. you should have aded a bit more emotions to the ending flesh it out a bit. the whole story seemed as one long start
831108 Yeah I happened to notice that as well while I wrote it, though I couldn`t quite figure out just what it was...
831875>>831167>>831138>>831045 Sorry about that! I always have trouble drawing things out over time, it is only my first fic after all. I haven`t had much experience with this kind (or any kind) of writing before, though I appreciate your opinions!
I know, the whole thing still sounds a bit amateur even after countless revisions, and finally i realized the problem; it was too short. I confirmed it reading the comments, and if I do another story I will have it be longer, I swear. Thanks for your opinions and such on the story!
Short but very well written.
4/5
Only thing I found disturbing was the parts with (Something in-betwen theese) but it didn't ruin the story at least.
The other comments saying it wasn't sad enough clearly didn't position themselves into Scootaloos possition as I was heavliy touched by the meaning of having to visit a graveyard in order to meet ones parents.
it was nice but meh...
call me crazy but i couldnt connect whit my emotions during this. i will give you a thumb for trying.
833032
hehe. it is not to short, you just lack a bit of feelings. The main problem is that you start it as a story but you end it as a novel. if you had started more in the story (and as mentioned described a bit more emotions) then it would have been a great novel
you expect a story to biuld up the sadness, but a novel has that twist in the end that changes the enitre story. you had that (except that the damn tags spoiled it)
if it was ment as a novel i would say 4 of 6. (mainly the start who made it a 4)
if it was ment as an ordinary story i would asy about 2 or 3 of 6.
833032 Oh! Then this is great for a first fic! I'll give you a thumbs up!
Hello! Have a review. Had its moments, but afraid this didn't quite work for me, not least the ending: the short description says Scoots goes there on the anniversary of her parents' death, which makes "Happy Anniversary" at the end really odd. Happy?! Appreciate the fic is a decade old, though.