Melody. The only name she has ever known. She knows many things, yet they must stay hidden. Found as a filly, she has a rare heritage and she has already many enemies, ever since she was first found. As she grows up, she finds other friends in the most unlikeliest of places... Places her mentors may not necessarily want her to go. Struggling to find her own status in the world, Equestria's fate in the balance, who knows if you can trust anyone or anything in this dangerous game, with many hidden twists and turns, often most heartbreaking. Now, Melody must unite Equestria, before it's too late for anypony. And this secret that she was condemned for knowing since day one... What if she doesn't even know what they're talking about?
Chapters (4)
This is going to be a great story. But i think you need to work on your story transition because the way you portray it is kind of confusing.
I know. I kinda wrote it wacky and a bit rushed. I'm sorry, but I promise once summer break comes around, it'll be a lot better. I'll most likely update it only first half though. Not only that, I'm busy studying for finals, so yeah. I'm really sorry.
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Don't worry the story are good better than previous chapter in my opinion.
Take all the time you need so that everything is balance between your study and your work.
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I'm trying. Thanks for the feedback, just BTW. I'm glad that this chapter is better, but I'd like to know if the 'secret' is stupid, because it'd help write the story better!
7270861 yes definitely by adding it will name the reader fell more intuitive to read the story.
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So, you're saying it's a good thing. Thank Luna! My next update will hopefully be Sunday, if not, then during review week for finals. We get a whole week off to study, although that's the looses way of explaining.
Hey guys, I'm going to be writing less often now, to my greatest of dismays. I've got finals up and coming and 2nd half of my summer break I'm not going to have any access to WiFi. Right now, I'm in the middle of Chapter Three. And I ain't tellin' what's happening, 'cause why ruin the surprise? Because I've crossed my heart and hoped to fly, stuck a cupcake in my eye. You may bring any issues with this up with Pinkie Pie. Good luck, 'cause she's very uptight with these PinkiePromises!
The pony in the picture is Luna, right?
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Yes. I edit it slightly, but I'm still looking all around for somepony to create a cover for me. Why?
7270369 there's never a need to apologize for anything if you intend to get better. I personally agree the transitions are wonky, but more over I'm getting a real Past Sins vibe from this story. If that's your intent, good luck though I am hoping this story tries to emulate Past Sins while not ripping it off entirely. Right now this'll go in the read later bin
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Okay, first off, thanks. Second, what the bleep bleep bleep bleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep-ing hay is Past Sins?
7562385 here is the link:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/41596/past-sins
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OMLL! I just realized that I've read this on QuoteV! (Past Sins). Huh... I wasn't really aiming for that vibe. Yes, some of my formatting came from that, but I'm hoping to make it all my own by the time I'm ready to start writing again. And yes, I'm putting ALL of my unfinished stories on hiatus.
7562517 I feel ya dude, I'm only working on one right now. Life takes too much commitment