I took my two friends over to the local SPA, treating them to a massage by Aloe and Lotus. Of course I had spiked their treat on the account. Yet, I expect them to enjoy the final result, right there with me. I will make their masks though.
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On this count, I would have to ask if you even read the rest of the story when you asked.
If you could point out examples or suggest any improvements, I owuld be very happy and so would the readers. Any improvements you can help comming abbout will be appreciated.
If it isn't the best opening of the story, feel free to suggest improvements and point out explicit flaws that comes to mind.
The home is an integral part of the one living in it. Aside from that, I don't need to describe the bed room again.
Describing the scene on which the play is going to be. Setting the stage should be done as early as possible and conveninet, unless there is a reason behind it.
Awesome story so far.
Keep up the stimulating work!!
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