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Ponyess
I just recently started to write stories directly towards the FiM actively, though I have been writing for years, publishing numerous stories at Mibba and the eventual pony story, as far as to the MLP
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Ponyess, you're amazing and I love you, but I see a new story from you every other day, and you never update them.
Can I recommend you stick to a handful?
6575188 Thanks, I appreciate it.
Even if I do put out quite a few stories, they are not quite that numerous and I do try to update the stories on a weekly basis, if I have a new chapter ready by that time. I could use some help, if you could remind me to update the stories you enjoy(including this one).
I try to focus on a few stories, but then I need to find the next story my muse feels like working on, or I would simply be wasting the time.
On that note, if you are interested, you could read the inofficial chapters and help me getting them right in time for publication too.
Ps: I have completed chapter (10+) now.
Rubber encasement is a rare thing on this site,but this chapter got confusing very quickly and after a while i´ve had no idea on what is exactly happening.
6597400 I had written this about a week ago.
It is about massage at the spa, oh, and the application of the rubber encasement with accessories.
This part is supposed to explain how things words, for when they are used later.
Ps: if you would care to elaborate on were and what confused you, maybe I could explain or improve upon the story?
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In most cases you use the word "treat" instead of "treatment".
The application of various gels over her whole body,while she is lying on her stomach (how does that work?)
What kind of tube tube and what purpose?
When did she put her hand into her?
Some kind of tube in the mask that goes into the mouth,but it will hold hood in place?What?
Not sure what´s on her head?
Isn´t there already a tube in her rear?
6600963 To the first point, the treatment is the treat here. Emerald enjoys the treatment paid by Ruby.
The simple answer would be magic, but my guess is that you need just a bit more details here.
From the description, it is only the belly that is actually on this cushion. The arms and legs are in the side.
The gel is absorbed or cured before it is an issue for her to be in contact with the cushion.
This kind of tube could be seen as a kind of sex toy. This particular enabled Aloe to insert the ball into the rear orifice.(elasticity would sound like the primary purpose)
She inserted the hand as she slipped the ball in, just after she inserted the tube in.
The ball is too large to simply be pushed in, even with the tube in use here.
This gel has negative or reverse friction. It isn't just on the skin but is temporarily absorbed, even when glued onto the inside of the hood and tube.
A mask is the front of a hood.
Thanks for reminding her to take it out before she continued. She removed the tube just after she inserted the ball.
Does this really merit a dark tag? It seems like everything's consensual and enjoyed by everypony...
6622764 Thanks for mentioning, I was starting to wonder why I had so many bad votes on the story.
I my have planned a few darker things for later, but that is several weeks ahead; if I actually did write these section, that is. Maybe it is better to just write a sequel for these occasions instead? I had already planned on one for what is to come later, considering that that occasion is way too far ahead to keep within this story as it is.
With that said, I dropped the dark tag for now.
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I'm not sure it was attracting bad votes, but I certainly was expecting something a bit different due to the presence of the tag.
I've noticed lots of stories lying around with tags that were put on for future content that never came to be, or tags that only apply to one or two chapters. It can be quite frustrating to try to find snuff fics when every single story about something epic has a single line or two that merits the gore tag and a single chapter that mentions sex and some fics that would have snuff never got around to the actual point.
If the dark content is in its own continuous sequence of chapters, and not in the middle of an otherwise not-dark story, I recommend making it its own story so the tagging is more appropriate.
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Poorly or incorrectly tagged stories have more disappointed readers. Isn't that what the down-vote is for?
Oh, I guess this is more wide spread than I had expected.
That can be even more frustrating and annoying, when you realize it is just slapped onto the story with little to no bearing on the over-all plot.
When I have these tags, it is commonly for very obvious reasons and is likely to be up and about fairly early. The problem with this tag is that you are required to put it up, even for a short event or scene. While some are just slapping this scene for that reason.
There is more than enough room for making the Dark sequel on what I have established here.
Just like there is room for other Sequels to follow up on a few other items firmly established within the plot such as I have already written if not published it yet.
If others tag their stories poorly or outright wrong doesn't mean I have to do the same.
My god the un nessesary details in this. Plus idk flow seems choppy. I mean really better way to describe characters then that . And is this room important latwr? Then why describe it so when of not at the time.
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On this count, I would have to ask if you even read the rest of the story when you asked.
If you could point out examples or suggest any improvements, I owuld be very happy and so would the readers. Any improvements you can help comming abbout will be appreciated.
If it isn't the best opening of the story, feel free to suggest improvements and point out explicit flaws that comes to mind.
The home is an integral part of the one living in it. Aside from that, I don't need to describe the bed room again.
Describing the scene on which the play is going to be. Setting the stage should be done as early as possible and conveninet, unless there is a reason behind it.
Hmmm... i find this to be an interesting--if not facinating idea, though i have trouble continuing to read it. I feel that your attention to sentance structure doesn't meet up to the level it takes to describe such a complex process.
There is so much Im not able to quite understand in this story, I could safely say that this is a brilliant idea you've thought of, though I would say this is not a *story*
I could give you a world of critique on this , but the most absolute and all encompassing suggestions I can give you couldn't be said more simply:
First and foremost, use this as your brainstorm
This story is a great idea, but I cant ignore the simple facts that your characters dont have the build and complexity to really be good characters. The input on the process (atleast up to the point I've read--chapter 3) provides little--to no emotional/descriptive input. They don't have any depth on what they do. Its all, yes/no or like/dislike. For that matter, it seems the like.... well..... everything.... even down to their sisters habits or routines. Siblings aren't best friends, even if they love being with eachother. Make them imperfect and get annoyed by a cew thing here and there. Hell, make one a bitchy prefectionist yet somewhat likeable. Their not spitting images of eachother (atleast I hope) and being high class as their made out to be, they sure have some snob somewhere. Atleast one might.
This complex process has been *thought* on pretty hard, buuuut I have my doubts it was put down on paper and really worked out. This has a large amount of steps that require enormous amounts of detail that could easily take up 10-12 thousand words a chapter. So, you make sure your reader understands whats happening. Give a consise paragraph on the theory and the point of the rubber encasement--even if it's after a mysterious lead up in the begining (like after all of the curing gels are applied) and only then do you start into the odd insertions and rubber hoods (of wich you reread and edit until its completely clear to others what is, atleast, visually happening) the spa girl doesn't even need to know what she‘s really doing, but the reader needs to know what the spa girl knows she is doing. You *must* include deep thoughts and even little tangents the spa girl (or whatever other character) goes on to keep your reader in-tune on these long processes. This includes that mentioned step-by-step list mentioned.
Secondly, rewrite the entire story
Like I mentioned, this is a brainstorm. The only way I could see this becoming a beauty that could be shelved along the side of sexual fanfiction leagands like Dirty Litte Secret's Sex Ed: Changling Style is it is completely reanilysed and written with intensive dedication and revision. You have a foot in with an interesting story type that is too far and few between, so making it something that is intensive and enthralling will bag you followers like Martin Luther King Jr. Couldn't hope to imagine on his march to the white house.
You don't see anything on YouTube competing with Lullaby for a Princess? Thats cause time and attention was put into that *so much* there wasn't much to realistically out do.
Sex Ex: Changling Style took a few years to complete. I would say the same should be for this.
Awesome story so far.
Keep up the stimulating work!!
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