Does this really merit a dark tag? It seems like everything's consensual and enjoyed by everypony...

6622764 Thanks for mentioning, I was starting to wonder why I had so many bad votes on the story.

I my have planned a few darker things for later, but that is several weeks ahead; if I actually did write these section, that is. Maybe it is better to just write a sequel for these occasions instead? I had already planned on one for what is to come later, considering that that occasion is way too far ahead to keep within this story as it is.

With that said, I dropped the dark tag for now.

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I'm not sure it was attracting bad votes, but I certainly was expecting something a bit different due to the presence of the tag.

I've noticed lots of stories lying around with tags that were put on for future content that never came to be, or tags that only apply to one or two chapters. It can be quite frustrating to try to find snuff fics when every single story about something epic has a single line or two that merits the gore tag and a single chapter that mentions sex and some fics that would have snuff never got around to the actual point.
If the dark content is in its own continuous sequence of chapters, and not in the middle of an otherwise not-dark story, I recommend making it its own story so the tagging is more appropriate.

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I'm not sure it was attracting bad votes, but I certainly was expecting something a bit different due to the presence of the tag.

Poorly or incorrectly tagged stories have more disappointed readers. Isn't that what the down-vote is for?

I've noticed lots of stories lying around with tags that were put on for future content that never came to be

Oh, I guess this is more wide spread than I had expected.

or tags that only apply to one or two chapters.

That can be even more frustrating and annoying, when you realize it is just slapped onto the story with little to no bearing on the over-all plot.

It can be quite frustrating to try to find snuff fics when every single story about something epic has a single line or two that merits the gore tag and a single chapter that mentions sex and some fics that would have snuff never got around to the actual point.

When I have these tags, it is commonly for very obvious reasons and is likely to be up and about fairly early. The problem with this tag is that you are required to put it up, even for a short event or scene. While some are just slapping this scene for that reason.

If the dark content is in its own continuous sequence of chapters, and not in the middle of an otherwise not-dark story, I recommend making it its own story so the tagging is more appropriate.

There is more than enough room for making the Dark sequel on what I have established here.
Just like there is room for other Sequels to follow up on a few other items firmly established within the plot such as I have already written if not published it yet.

If others tag their stories poorly or outright wrong doesn't mean I have to do the same.

Hmmm... i find this to be an interesting--if not facinating idea, though i have trouble continuing to read it. I feel that your attention to sentance structure doesn't meet up to the level it takes to describe such a complex process.

There is so much Im not able to quite understand in this story, I could safely say that this is a brilliant idea you've thought of, though I would say this is not a *story*

I could give you a world of critique on this , but the most absolute and all encompassing suggestions I can give you couldn't be said more simply:

First and foremost, use this as your brainstorm
This story is a great idea, but I cant ignore the simple facts that your characters dont have the build and complexity to really be good characters. The input on the process (atleast up to the point I've read--chapter 3) provides little--to no emotional/descriptive input. They don't have any depth on what they do. Its all, yes/no or like/dislike. For that matter, it seems the like.... well..... everything.... even down to their sisters habits or routines. Siblings aren't best friends, even if they love being with eachother. Make them imperfect and get annoyed by a cew thing here and there. Hell, make one a bitchy prefectionist yet somewhat likeable. Their not spitting images of eachother (atleast I hope) and being high class as their made out to be, they sure have some snob somewhere. Atleast one might.

This complex process has been *thought* on pretty hard, buuuut I have my doubts it was put down on paper and really worked out. This has a large amount of steps that require enormous amounts of detail that could easily take up 10-12 thousand words a chapter. So, you make sure your reader understands whats happening. Give a consise paragraph on the theory and the point of the rubber encasement--even if it's after a mysterious lead up in the begining (like after all of the curing gels are applied) and only then do you start into the odd insertions and rubber hoods (of wich you reread and edit until its completely clear to others what is, atleast, visually happening) the spa girl doesn't even need to know what she‘s really doing, but the reader needs to know what the spa girl knows she is doing. You *must* include deep thoughts and even little tangents the spa girl (or whatever other character) goes on to keep your reader in-tune on these long processes. This includes that mentioned step-by-step list mentioned.

Secondly, rewrite the entire story

Like I mentioned, this is a brainstorm. The only way I could see this becoming a beauty that could be shelved along the side of sexual fanfiction leagands like Dirty Litte Secret's Sex Ed: Changling Style is it is completely reanilysed and written with intensive dedication and revision. You have a foot in with an interesting story type that is too far and few between, so making it something that is intensive and enthralling will bag you followers like Martin Luther King Jr. Couldn't hope to imagine on his march to the white house.

You don't see anything on YouTube competing with Lullaby for a Princess? Thats cause time and attention was put into that *so much* there wasn't much to realistically out do.

Sex Ex: Changling Style took a few years to complete. I would say the same should be for this.