Times have been good at Canterlot castle for you and your dear princess friend. As you sit you wonder, "how could things get any better?" But Luna being the devious princess that she is always has something up her sleeve.
“I...I don’t know about this Princess. May..maybe we shouldn’t do this…” Twilight stammered back nervously. “If you really believe that Twilight then I will not force this on you”, replied Princess Celestia. With a soft smile, the large white alicorn nuzzled up against her faithful student, a muzzle gently rubbing up against the matted purple fur behind a perked ear. “But I won’t let you get away without at least a little taste of it”, she cood warmly into Twilight’s ear.
Hard to tell who is doing what or who is saying what because it's all together. Separate what Twilight is doing and saying from what Celestia is doing and saying. ^_^
Also, leaving space between paragraphs helps a ton. You kinda stopped doing that after a while.
inb4
This is very hard to read due to your paragraphs not being separated out.
6469026 Wow, okay! Is it specifically with the dialogue or do I just need to space out each paragraph one more time?
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Hard to tell who is doing what or who is saying what because it's all together. Separate what Twilight is doing and saying from what Celestia is doing and saying. ^_^
Also, leaving space between paragraphs helps a ton. You kinda stopped doing that after a while.
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...WTF!?
I'm scared and confused.
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Seriously, it's like an acid trip but without the acid. Just a whole lot of tripping.
After watching that I feel like I need to share this now out of principle.
6469114
Well, whaddaya expect from Imatoonlink? Here's another of his/her creations:
6469133 WTF did I just watch?
6468289 Literally the first thing i thought of when I saw the title too XD
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6469114 You too haven't even seen the SFM Version