• Published 30th May 2012
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Memories of Friendship - Fluttrick



In Twlight's final hours, with her friends at her bedside, recalling their time as friends.

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Memories of Friendship

Memories of Friendship

Listen To This

A dull silence filled the room of the tree house as 5 mares gathered around Twilight's bedside. All their eyes filled with deep remorse and sadness as they stared at the withered dying scholar, and their best friend in all of Equestria.

"Well girls, I guess this is how it ends huh?" Twilight said in a hollow voice.

None of them responded, too lost in their emotions to think of a reply. Just as tears began forming Apple Jack cried out.

"No Twi, this isn't the end. Ya'll are gonna get better an' we'll all leave here happy and together forever. Ah promise ya'll, ah really do-"

"Stop that right now Apple Jack!" Twilight said in an assertive voice, tears welled in her eyes as well. "Please Apple Jack, don't, don't lie to me before I die. Don't lie for my sake, because I know you can't keep that promise, and there's no point in saying otherwise."

Another period of silence followed.

Again interrupted as Twilight gave a light cough then began in a withered voice.

"Remember the first time I met each of you?"

They all nodded glumly.

It was as if a dark cloud had overtaken them, taken away their features. What made them individual, what made them the elements of harmony, what made them her friends. And Twilight wasn't going to stand it.

"All of you! Please stop this, I don't want you all to be like this, especially before I die!" She shouted.

The 5 mares looked to one another for support before Pinkie began.

"Sorry Twilight, and I know that I'm the element of laughter, but..." Her lips began to tremble as a stream of tears flowed freely from her eyes. "BUT HOW AM I SUPPOSED TO LAUGH AT A TIME LIKE THIS! You're, going to die, and I'll never see you EVER AGAIN! FOREVER!" Pinkie wailed and pulled Twilight into an embracing hug.

The other ponies around looked at the two, deep in thought, and on the brink of losing it.

"Oh Twilight dear, I'm so sorry!" Rarity exclaimed. "All this time, ever since I met you, all I'd been doing was talk talk talk all about fashion and fame, not what truly mattered. But, you Twilight, you showed me what it meant to be a real friend. Thank you Twilight." And then Rarity joined Twilight and Pinkie.

The sound of sobs and cries now filled the tree house as Twilight's time grew ever so shorter. Her breath began to quicken and her heart began to race.

"Girls," Twilight began as the two backed off from the long embrace. "All this time, I, I just wanted to say. Thank you. Thank you all for being the best friends a pony could ask for. For being there for me when times were tough," She looked to Rainbow Dash, who replied with a short hug. "When I was feeling down or lonely," Twilight looked to Fluttershy, her frail conscious and weak emotions were getting the best of her, but she ran to Twilight for another hug. "And you too," Twilight used her horn, which glowed with a purple aura, lifting a now teen dragon onto her lap. "You too Spike!" Twilight said as she embraced in a hug with the dragon.

As the two released, Twilight looked to the 5 mares and Spike, who'd joined them, into one big crowd in front of her. She then looked to her side table. One item sat there, A frame, with one picture, her most precious treasure.

Then looked to her friends in present time. Two things, she wasn't there beside them, the other, they all wore sad faces. Feeling death's grip on her quickening, the purple unicorn made her final request.

"All of you," She grabbed their attention. "Can you all do one last thing for me, please?" They all nodded without hesitation. "Smile." Her voice faded. All her best friends, together. That was the last thing she saw before her heart stopped beating and her breathing ceased.

(The Day After)

Showers of rain poured down upon Equestria the day of the funeral. Rows and rows of ponies, from all around Equestria came together that day, all broken and saddened at the scholar's death. Black clothing, silence, dark clouds, and rain. It was as if all of Equestria were burdened by the loss of death.

5 ponies stood in the front seats, heads hung low, and tears, mixed with rain, dripped down across their faces. Pinkie's hair was flat, Rainbow's colors seemed faded, Rarity was without an umbrella causing her once fashionable mane to be soaked and hanging. Fluttershy, with her weak heart and even weaker ego made quiet whimpers of despair every now and then, clinging to Angel for support then sobbing into his snow-white pelt. Apple Jack held her stetson in her hoof as she silently let tears fall freely and shook her head with the occasional muttering of the word 'no' then followed by more tears.

Throughout the funeral, where many tears were shed and many words from Ponyville citizens and even ponies from all over Equestria, from Canterlot to Hoofington, they stepped up one by one to the stand to speak words of the deceased unicorn, the way she affected their lives, the way she helped them overcome problems, until it finally came to the last 5 ponies.

Rarity was the first to step up to the stand, looking less lively than before and not a care in all of Equestria about how she looked in front of the crowds and crowds of ponies around.

"Fashion, fortune, fame. All meaningless," Rarity closed her eyes for a moment, letting a tear fall freely to the ground. "without, without her. Twilight, my dearest friend. Ever since she came hear, ever since I'd first glimpsed upon her, I always pestered her about beauty and high classes of ponies. But, no matter how long or how annoying I was, she would always listen and remain patient, without one complaint. And I believe that is what made her the most generous friend I'd ever met. That is all." She said plainly as she looked to Rainbow Dash who stepped up in her place.

"Twilight, oh Twilight," Rainbow Dash cried toward the unicorn's coffin. Her limp, still body remained, the expression on her face peaceful with a small smile. "I'm so sorry, all those times I called you an egghead and a braniac! I'm so sorry." The pegasus mare cried into her hooves, but shortly after began again. "You were always there for me, even though I made fun of you for who you really were, a friend. And most certainly the most loyal friend and pony in all of Equestria I've ever met. I just wanted to tell you that, and to say this. Thank you Twilight. For giving me this," Rainbow looked to her friends. "And helping me realize that I was never really aiming for a place with the Wonderbolts because it was my dream, but because I wanted attention, friends. Thank you Twilight."

Wiping away a tear, Rainbow hovered to her friends and her place was soon taken by Fluttershy, who was barely holding back tears as her lips trembled with anxiety and sadness.

"T-Twilight Sparkle was a g- great friend and I just wanted to s- say that, that," Then she lost it as her sobs erupted across the crowds of ponies. Hyperventilating she said. "I- I- can't do this." She muttered as she cried into her hooves and retreated to her small crowd of friends who patted her on the back in support.

Just then, Apple Jack stood up, her face straight and her eyes stripped of any tears as she trotted up to the stand and began speaking. "Ah know many of ya'll here probably didn't know Twilight as much as we did, or spend as much time with her, but ah want all of ye t' know that she was true always true to her every word and most of all true to her friends. She always came clear to me with everythin' you could imagine, and ah knew ah could trust her every single time. Thank you Twilight for always being true to us. That's all everypony." And with that she stepped down and joined her friends.

Nopony else decided to speak, as the ceremonies took place and Twilight's coffin was lifted by 4 ponies dressed in gray clothing and black hoods. As the coffin was buried and the tombstone was placed everypony dropped a rose and left silently. Then there were the, as they were now called, mane 5 who stood by the grave the longest. There was nothing much left to do, but wait and mourn, that is until finally, Pinkie Pie spoke up.

"You know, I never thought about one of us dying, especially not when we're all young fillies. I mean, who'd have thought this would happen? Though, I feel kind of....." Her voice trailed off leaving the other 4 anxious for an answer.

"Feel kind of what?" Rainbow Dash finally blurted out.

"Kind of...happy." Slowly, Pinkie's hair began to lighten up, but not exactly inflate.

"You know what girls, I admit, I have that feeling too. How strange?" Rarity said.

"Yah, me too." Fluttershy said quietly.

"It's like, like-" Rainbow began but was interrupted by Apple Jack who exclaimed.

"That part of me, that I thought I lost was never really, jus', jus'-" Now Pinkie interrupted.

"Playing hide and seek, cause who doesn't love hide and seek!" Her mane now back to normal.(Well, in Pinkie's standards of normal.)

"And that there's more than just grieving and mourning ahead. Actually dears, I think that-" Surprisingly Fluttershy cut her off.

"It would be betraying Twilight, who brought us together and formed our friendship." The group all nodded in agreement, more cheerful and less gloomy.

"Hey, how about we have a big Big BIG party over at the library. It could be all book themed just for Twilight! How about it!" Pinkie exclaimed aloud.

"Wouldn't have it any other way Pinkie Pie." Apple Jack replied as they all headed off to the library,

As if by magic, a sparkle rained upon them as they left, but they didn't seem to notice. A reminder of their dearest friend, who helped them achieve friendship at its best, who was none other than Twilight Sparkle, the element of magic. The one pony who truly represented to magic of friendship.

Comments ( 54 )

:raritycry: :fluttercry: :applecry:

oh my god! i shed manly tears all over again....*sniffle*....great story....absolutely wonderful, and extremely sad...loved it :fluttercry:
one thing that made this even worse to hold back tears was the "Listen to This"....that made me cry even more!

That was beautiful :applecry::fluttercry:

Although Applejacks name doesn't have a space in between. Just saying, but very good work. The music was a nice touch.

670983 Sorry about that, it's just a habit of mine. This is my first one-shot fiction and I specialize in sad.

Nice touch using My most precious treasure to symbolize Twilight's friendship with the other members of the Mane 6.

:raritycry::raritydespair::fluttershbad::applecry: This was soooo touching. It made me really cry.

The music was a nice touch. I didn't cry, but it was touching. Brilliantly done.

I'm just going to say this...
I can never cry again. :fluttercry:

> Reads comments saying everyone cried
> Decides to read story

> Starts commenting about how ridiculous this story is without flinching

Either we got some sissies over here or I'm seriously missing something because this is not sad at all. It's basically Twilight's dying, says some things, dies, then a funeral is held. That's it. Nothing fancy, sad, unique about it. Sure, the details are very lacking, but even if those were added in, I still wouldn't have flinched nor do I believe this could have been salvaged. Bottom line, this is not sad and I fail to see why others think so. I'd love for someone to explain that to me.

However, I will say your grammar and structure was done very nicely unlike some other fan fictions I've read. Characters were all in line too from what I've read.

Personally, I think you could've done a much better job. This was rather disappointing to read. Sorry.

This was ehhhh. Okay. I don't feel that that's how each of them would react, seemed a little off. And there's no explanation for how she died. Age wasn't indicated, nor injury, nor sickness. Has a lack of explanation. Also seemed a bit rushed.

loltwilightdied>sadtime>partytime
With little transition.
2.5/5

Good story, just needs more info.

Hey guys, I'm making a prequel to this for those of you who want an explanation for Twilight's untimely death and other stuff like that.

Great, now I need to buy a new laptop because you made me cry all over mine. thanks for that.
:fluttershysad::pinkiesad2::raritycry::raritydespair::applecry::ajsleepy:

Whilst the idea is promising, although not original, this story was painful to read. I mean that in the sense of the quality being poor:
- Some grammar mistakes, e.g. Applejack being Apple Jack
- Ponies acting out of character
- Lack of detail
- Horrible cliches
- Abruptness of events
I did see it was a mere 1,747 words so my expectations weren't high. However, I must say I did not like this and was disappointed.

671308 Don't worry, explanations and such are on the way with the prequel, so before anyone complains again about the lack of explanation let me finish typing the prequel.

I'd be very interested in a prequel.

A short, sweet and sad story. :fluttercry: Thou it was quite enjoyable!

671531 Yay! :yay: Thanks for the encouragement. I was waiting for somepony to reply to that guy, cause I thought if I replied it would make me not accepting of reader's opinions and what author would that make me.:unsuresweetie:

Ohgod.
First time through I didn't cry.
I didn't think it was all that sad. It was more like touching I guess.
Then I scrolled up and saw the "listen to THIS" I clicked it. My reaction?
Me: OH. HELL. NO.
I have seen Angel Beats-- I love it. But it is helluva sad.
And that song. Well, it just made the story 10x sadder. :fluttershysad:

~Rosalynn~ :yay:

In my opinion I thought it was pretty well written :twilightblush: Although I didn't cry, I did enjoy reading it.

671640 :rainbowlaugh: LOL xD :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:



edit: also group sad has 2 more people than group dark

Okay, almost done with the prequel, almost there for all the haters, or critiques.

:rainbowhuh: Oh shit, better finish the prequel before a fight ensues!

671550

It's kind of ironic because it's usually not replying that shows you don't care about the reader's opinions. I'm not trying to be a nob here, just trying to show where your flaws were and what you need to work on. Yes, I admit I feel I can cause intimidation, but don't mind it. Always feel free to reply to a constructive comment when you can! :twilightsmile:

671726 Okay then, I feel your opinion was very true and that it was clumsy of me to think that readers would just pass of the important details as a side thing and that it isn't my best work/:twilightsheepish:

671722

I do apologize. I just find this other user here being very... obnoxious to put it lightly. :unsuresweetie: I'll be sure to read your prequel, but try not to rush it.

And I'll try not to... be so blunt this time. :twilightsheepish:

671741

Ah, but details are EVERYTHING about a story. Well, 99% of the time anyways! Always try to expand and explain the situation in a way so that the reader can understand and think about the situation. Once you do that, you're on your way to becoming a better writer. :twilightsmile:

671746 Not to be on one side or another side between both users I just want to have an agreement between the both of you so we don't have a fight.671647

671754

That should be more directed at DerpyFan as he tried to call me a soulless being for finding this one fan fiction not sad. :unsuresweetie:

sorry guys, gotta go, my mom's making me leave. Bye for now!

This was kind of sad, a tad bit rushed, and I thought I saw Shinning Armor appear in the character tags when he dosen't even appear in the story. :applejackunsure:

I can't wait for the prequel though.

671738 well i am not 11 but i agree that was uncalled for but i am half asleep and am not thinking straight and hating haters makes you worse than the haters so have scootaloo :scootangel:

671789 Yah about shining armor, he's in prequel, just not major major part

671813

When I'm half asleep, I don't go around making rude and unnecessary insults towards people who have a different opinion about one fan fiction. :unsuresweetie:

671830 Uh o.k., I still don't know why he appears in the tags for this fic though, unless the prequel will be another chapter as opposed to another fic. :unsuresweetie:

671889 Actually, it will be another chapter. Sorry for disappointment if any,:twilightblush:

671865 yeah its just the way things seem to work for me i dont know why but well ill delete those comments earlier and please accept my apology

this usually happens for me and when i get up in the morning and read what i had been saying i just :facehoof: and remove the comments

671902>>671865 Yay! Resolution! Oh sh** still gotta do spanish homework! be right back
:rainbowhuh:

Once the funeral starts, play the song "The Sound of Silence" ....It add's to the effect and makes it even more saddening :fluttercry:

Something very popular and well written using my art for it's cover? Well, don't I feel special. :pinkiehappy:

672651

> Popular
> Only 191 views
> Not very popular

:rainbowwild:

I was thinking more in comments and ratings. Gotta stay positive!

672651 Sorry, I'll make sure you get credit you deserve.

this is very well written it got me thinking and i was tearing a bit:fluttercry:

Oh...
That wasn't really what I meant, but okay! Thanks! :twilightsmile:

Important Announcement!
Well, turns out I'm making the prequel another fiction, not another chapter, so in the case you didn't already know that, this is for you.

I may not have actually cried but I did tear up even if just a bit, but for the hell of it have Doctor who and Rarity
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676413 Thanks man, thanks :scootangel:

676422 No problem!

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