She is Applejack, the element of honesty. The very manifestation of her element and the go-to pony for mostly anything that needs doing! Dependable, faithful, strong and honest to a fault. And yet....the farmer openly lies in front of both friends and family.
The real kicker here?
Applejack is completely unaware of it!
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This is a very interesting idea. However, the ending felt rather jarring and out-of-place compared to the rest of the story. Perhaps you could expand upon this, instead of leaving it as a one-shot. But that's up to you.
6195217 Yeah.... I wanted to tie it up quickly before I lost the story entirely, so I ended it on that note.
But! I'll probably retouch it sometime when I'm not so encumbered with my current works on muh roster. 
Thank you kindly for the feedback though! Hearin' from others, regardless of the content, does wonders for my morale, helps the creative juices y'know. I greatly appreciate it, friend!
...Wow.
And the princesses have sent her into battle after battle how many times like this? At least that first time against Nightmare Moon was out of Celestia's control, but continuing to doing this while she's an adult is just so wrong its not even funny.
Do agree with 6195217 The story just took a nosedive towards the end, going from a troubling but neccecery task no better alternative had been found for, to the two princesses cracking jokes about it.
Kinda a mood-whiplash there, and not the good type either.
Still, the idea of Applejack being such a strong earth pony that she needs alicorn intervention not to break the entire farm is really interesting. I do hope you give that another go in the future.
Interesting but the ending was weird.
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Edited the ending. Thanks for the feedback guys!!!
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Much better.
The whole situation is still really morally questionable, but now at least the two acknowledge that instead of cracking jokes with Pinkie just popping up out of nowhere.
6197679 Yeah....kept cringing every time I re-read the thing....wasn't proud of that
Then I read the comments and reevaluated where I was originally going with this. Although a one-shot, I think I'll build on this. But a bit more later, I have too many projects going on atm, and I wanted to get this posted before I got anymore into my projects.
You've been a great help too! I appreciate it!
I read your new ending - you made such a huge improvement! I'm honestly impressed at how in-character Celestia and Luna are. You should definitely continue this story.
My only nitpick is that I would replace the word "bobbed" with "nodded". I dunno, when I read "bobbed," I think of somepony like Pinkie Pie doing so enthusiastically, or a chicken. x3
6197732 Thanks a lot! A little extra sleep does wonders for the mind, doesn't it? XD Lol! It is something I'm genuinely considering, though as I said I won't be able to get to the next installment immediately. Don't wanna keep up ppl's hopes but it's definitely added to my roster.
I greatly appreciate you and Dorkness taking the time to give me more in-depth comments! As you can see, they've helped me to produce a better ending for the story.
XD Hah! The chicken thing stuck with you, huh? Darn.
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Anytime!