Writer of Fallout Equestria stuff, and occassionally other stuff. Just a friendly Zony, who loves a good story.
During a harsh snow storm, Applejack finds a filly. Half frozen to death, she brings her home. After a night of warmth and love, she awakens to find the filly is gone.
What happens that morning brings both happiness and sadness to two ponies lives.
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So very sad.
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It is. My first real sadfic. How'd I do?
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I'd say you did an excellent job.
Very well done.
Im looking forward to more from you. Keep up the good work.
The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments
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Thank you for your kind words ^^
This was a very sad and a good story you did an excellent job on the story😥😭👏🏼👍🏼
What a lovely read. Very sweet and wistful atmosphere.
In the first half of the story I was 100% convinced Aurora was going to be a snow spirit and all the efforts to keep her warm would melt her and AJ would find only a puddle of water, but cool as that would have been i was very pleasantly surprised with the direction you took. Nice to see Luna get a role too
And my day is ruined now... Poor filly...
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Sorry
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Originally I wanted to make her a baby windigo. But changed it cause it didn’t make much sense XD
Wait, is Applejack dead as well? Or is Aurora the only one who died?
Welp, she's dead.
Time to read another fic! :D
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AJ is not dead. Just peaceful
Amazing. Very cute, and I do like the idea of the dreamscape pulling two ponies together. I haven't seen that before. The only thing that took me out of it was that I did feel like Aurora calling Applejack 'Mama' was a bit quick. But still, I really liked it.
Very sad and sweet.
Ah, shoot. That one tugged at the heartstrings a bit. Great story, man
Well, that was depressing.
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Blank! Finally one of my friends likes my writing
10402943
It really was well-written. I didn't look at the tags before clicking it and thought it was going to be a nice heart-warming fic. I wasn't ready for the sucker punch halfway through. I'm gonna have to start looking at some of your other stuff now 
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I'm afraid we might have corrupted him into delivering said sucker-punches...
All in all, a nice(?) little ball of adora-sad.
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Omg one of you actually read my shit. Lol XD
By the emperor....
thanks... no seriously.....
Holy crap. Has this been featured? Somebody give this a damn award.
This is genius with its execution and with its general premise. Perfectly crafted emotions delivered in the form of liquid, ice-cold flowing words that manage to warm the heart and still bring both tears to my eyes and a smile to my face.
You are a Magician.
-Noobblue
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I have never gotten this much praise for my writing. I thank you for your kind words.
10407579
Well, words don't cost anything, but they have so much value all the same.
This is a touching and emotional piece. However, there are some shortcomings, namely that the plot is a bit rushed. While I don't doubt Applejack would care for her greatly, she's pretty nice in general. The kind of bond you're implying takes a bit more time to develop. This story isn't long enough for that sort of bond to form. If she had succumbed to her injuries more slowly, over the course of a few days/chapters, perhaps it would be more believable.
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I agree with what you’re saying. This story could have benefited from a longer length. And the relationship may seem rushed.
In this story, AJ wanted to be a mother.
Aurora never really had one because of her abuse.
They connected because both wanted it.
But yes. If it wasn’t a one-shot, I could have flushed it out more
Found this from tom117z's post about it.
Good short story.
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Thanks. Tom is a good friend of mine
That was great writing.
I didn't look at the tags before reading, though I was directed by tom117z, so I was expecting a sucker-punch to the feels. Despite my guard being up, I still felt sucker-punched. The writing was fantastic! This whole story was very well written.
However, my critical opinion is, it felt rushed. Something I'm sure you are aware of given the story writing skill displayed everywhere else. I felt I wasn't given enough time to acknowledge and connect with applejack and her feelings for Aurora, like I was left on the sidelines of the mother and daughter relationship portrayed in this story. I may just be too used to longer chapters/stories and this is certainly the only chink I could find in this very well-written story.
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You’re not the first one to say it feels rushed. I agree that I could have expanded the story more to give better connection between AJ and Aurora.
But I wanted this as a one shot. I had no idea it would have this much success to be honest XD
Thank you for your kind words, though I feel like you’re giving me too much credit. I’m still a novice in the writing department. The rest of my work speaks for itself
Brilliance story! So sad, but otherwise brilliance!
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Glad you enjoyed it
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Another heart broken XD
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Why most you be so cruel
A sensitive topic, especially in terms of tragedy, sadness and death. I wanted to see more pages, but my heart could not stand reading the sad story of the child.
...If you could convey emotions, but these stories are enough in the library fimfiction. And so, catch the like.
To me this was ruined right from the start when the blizzard over Ponyville was sudden. Come on, this is Equestria with manual weather! You either forgot about it or deliberately ignored to add more drama for no reason. I mean, what would change if this was a predictable manual blizzard? And Luna's ability also feels given out of the blue to make Applejack suffer.
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I’m sorry you didn’t enjoy it
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Why? You don't owe me anything to be sorry for. And I dare to guess than since this genre's goal is to overrun people with emotions, writers tent to get overrun by their ideas too and overlook stuff which can make the plot unbelievable to those with colder hearts.
I love this story, it's sad, it has Applejack, and it's well made.
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Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it. AJ needs more love.
So the filly is a ghost, then?