• Member Since 3rd Feb, 2012
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As stated in the 'Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy' "For every universe there is another complete and totally different universe that is willing to kill you and devour your flesh." This story is not about that universe, but another one consisting of colorful talking ponies that just so happen to have a darker side and bake other ponies into cupcakes, this story is not about that either. It's about a universe in which a red and white unicorn named Dent resides.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 6 )

Some grammar errors, but i liked it.

I counted 42 mistakes.

:moustache: what more needs to be said?

Okay... You have the spirit of the comedy right.... But your pacing is terrible. Stretch things out a little bit. Give us time between jokes. This isn't a stand up comedy sketch, you don't need to fire them off like a machine gun. Other than that it was entertaining.

697497 What you did there, I saw it.

the structure is good but dont rush here have a stashe:moustache:

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