Alpha Bit was an ITpony, a relatively new field in ponykind. He spent his existence fixing computers in Canterborough, never even glancing towards a mare, before he was called to help make sure that all the technology ran smoothly in the Royal Wedding. There, he meets Twilight Sparkle, the mare of his dreams.
Omega bad a bit of a crush on Princess Luna. But, considering that he lived with Alpha on the edge of the kingdom, he had little chance. Spending his days admiring Luna from afar, and programming the computers Alpha fixed, he tagged along to the wedding as Alpha's assistant. There he meets Luna again.
Will the two ponies be able to get the mares of their dreams? Or is this just a fable they thought up one day? More importantly, why is Alpha eating macaroni for breakfast?
Keep going! The narrative structure is well founded, with the whole catch-up backstory, then actual narrative progress, and you seem to be using it well. I think you have a lot of potential in this story. Remember: Never give up! Trust your instincts!
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To be honest, I've actually tried hard on this, so this really makes me happy. Although, I know where I want the story to go, at the moment, I'm not entirely sure how I want to go about doing this
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Just remember, this is your story, and no one can pressure you to have it turn out any way besides the way YOU want it to go. The best authors have an outline, but they allow the story to be organic, and don't try to constrain it to rigid plot lines. Let the story come to life, and just enjoy the experience of bringing it there.
moon to face WHAT
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It'll make sense next chapter