Twilight loses something great to her. She feels being alone will fix that, so she decides to do that. But, what happens when she gets lonely?
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I wrote this over three days, it's a oneshot sad fic. My first sad fic, so let me know how good it is.
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Hmmm. It was ok for a first time. The constant jumping around the story irritated me though, but that's just formatting. The one thing that really killed this for me was I didn't really connect with everypony in the story. You can't assume that making everyone cry and Twilight Sparkle loosing it will make me sad. It was very difficult to connect with your version of Twilight. Starting out with the funeral would have at least let me know how she got in that state. Then you would need to let us see inside TS's head and her descent into that madness we saw above.
Overall, not bad, keep working at it
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Thanks for the input.
Like I said, this is my first sadfic, and I don't usually write sadfics. I'm still new at this, so I don't really know how to write with a lot of emotion but I thought I'd give it a shot anyways. I'm going back to my more happy writing, but it was fun to change for a couple days and try something new
Apparently I have a very bad brain. I can't understand anything. This is partially my fault. But what I'm getting is Twilight... something happened to her... everyone on the outside wants her back... smarty pants turns into a missus then a mister, then Shield... then leaves or dies... or something. And then Twilight comes back to the world... but then she leaves again. I'm so so so confused.