“Alright, I spy with my fake eyes...something...blue.”
“The sky?”
“Nope.”
“Um...that flag?”
“Nu-uh.”
“That pony.”
The disguised Doomie shrugged. “Well, you’re on the right track.”
Pinkie continued looking around as her, Twilight, and Doomie made their way back to the castle. “How about...hmmm...your eyes?”
Doomie blinked twice, showing his completely blue eyes for a second before switching back to pony eyes. “You’re really close.”
“Uuuuhhh…” Pinkie huffed. “Alright, I give up, what is it?”
Doomie stepped closer to her. “It’s your eyes, Pinkie.”
“Mine?” Pinkie said. “Why’d you pick that? That’s cheating! I can’t see that...well, I see out of it, but that’s still cheating.”
Doomie smiled. “I chose them because they were distracting me this whole time, ya know...with how...beautiful...they are?” Doomie grinned nervously.
Twilight rolled her eyes. “How corny.”
Pinkie laughed. “Oh, come on, Twilight. I think that’s a pretty cute compliment.”
“You do?” Doomie said, he immediately got a nose boop from her, making him blush.
“Of course I did, Doomie.” Pinkie then rubbed noses with him, making Twilight almost gag from the sight.
“Pinkie,” Twilight said. “What do you see in him?”
Pinkie pulled away from Doomie. “What do you mean?”
“You know what I mean.” Twilight said. “What’s so special about him? He looks exactly like all his other siblings. How is he any different?”
Pinkie was about to speak, but Doomie pushed her away and went face to face with Twilight. “What’s that supposed to mean? Do you think we’re all the same?”
Twilight looked away. “Well…”
Doomie grabbed her by the face and looked at her straight in the eyes. “We aren’t just a bunch of mindless drones, sparkler.”
“Sparkle.” Twilight corrected.
Doomie let go of her. “Whatever, just listen to me when I say this. We are not all the same, we may have our...similarities, but we all have something different in us, something great, something beautiful, something-”
“Alright, alright.” Twilight pushed him away. “I get it, you are all diff-er...special...b-but that still doesn’t explain why you love him, Pinkie.”
Doomie opened his mouth to say something, but Pinkie literally zipped it shut. “You wanna know why I love him?” Pinkie said with Doomie sighing through his zipped mouth.
Twilight nodded. “I’d really like to know, Pinkie. It’s just...strange that you would be into something like him, I’d expect you to love...oh...I dunno…”
“Love what?” Pinkie said. “Some donut baker, or some accordion playing stallion, or some random pony off the streets?”
“I-I didn’t-”
“Well, let me tell you, Twilight.” Pinkie pulled Doomie in for a hug, his mouth still zipped. “Our love may be young, but I know, if I listen deep in his heart,” She pressed her ear against his chest and smiled. “It says he loves me...and I know if he listened to mine!” She pulled his head to her chest, burying his muzzle in her fur. “Then it would say that I love him right back. Right Doomie?...Doomie?” Pinkie looked at him, seeing him try to struggle out of her grip.
“Uh...I don’t think he can breathe right now.”
Pinkie blushed and quickly pushed him away from her chest. She then unzipped his mouth, making him gasp for air and fall to the floor. “Oops...heh..s-sorry Doomie…”
“I-It’s...it’s fine...huff…” He got back up on all fours. “A-And like she said, Sperkle.”
“Sparkle…” Twilight corrected again. “Don’t make this a running ga-”
“I would do anything...anything!...” Doomie looked at Pinkie. His disguised hooves traveled down to hers and held them. “Just to be with her…”
Pinkie’s face turned scarlet. “Y-You really mean it?”
Doomie leaned in, his nose touching hers. “I swear to the queen’s queen of queen’s that I do.”
Twilight looked in the sky. “Speaking of queen, do you think that she’ll be back?”
“Who? Chrysalis?” Doomie turned away from Pinkie. “Well, she got flung out by that magic blast pretty far away.”
Twilight fidgeted. “So, do you think she’s...well…”
“Dead?” Doomie finished, making Twilight gasp. “Nah, I’m sure she’ll be alright," Twilight sighed in relief, happy to know she didn't have a hoof in helping kill off an entire race of bugs, even if they didn't invade. "and knowing the queen," Doomie continued. "she’ll probably blame us for not winning, even if it was her plan.” Doomie craned his head to the sky. “I wouldn’t be surprised to see a brother falling right back here.”
Twilight raised an eye. “Really now?”
Doomie nodded. “Yup, it’ll take a lot more than a magic blast to take us out.”
Twilight shook her head. “But that still doesn't explain how you weren’t thrown out too, I know you and Pinkie were in a dumpster doing...things I’d rather not even think about, but how did you survive?”
Doomie cocked his head. “Survive? What do you mean?”
Twilight shrugged. “I just thought that a wave of magic crashing into you while you weren't outside would crush you..”
Doomie shrugged. “Like I said, Twinkle-"
"Twilight, I told you not to-"
"I have no idea." Doomie continued. "Either you ponies have very strong dumpsters, or that love blast didn’t recognize me.”
“I’m pretty sure that spell would’ve recognized you as a changeling since you...well, are one.” Twilight became curious. “Were you a pony when you guys were in the dumpster?”
Doomie shook his head. “Nope, I was one hundred percent changeling, every part of me was bug.” He poked Twilight in the chest. “Every part.”
Twilight backed up. “Oh-kay then...uh...nice to know.”
Pinkie looked around Canterlot. “You think anypony is hearing this?” She asked.
“I doubt it.” Twilight said. “They’re probably too busy cleaning up the green gunk you guys left behind.” She looked at Doomie.
Doomie shrugged. “That stuff is pretty easy to get off...well, for a changeling it is, as for a pony, it’s pretty hard.”
Twilight raised an eye. “How so?”
Doomie stuck out his snakelike tongue for a second before sucking it back in. “For starters, we use our tongue to lick it off. Second, the stuff comes out of our body. We hack it up and stick it to anything...or, anyone in this case.”
“Ugh…” Twilight shivered in disgust. “That...That’s disgusting.”
Doomie shrugged. “Hey, it’s not that bad, it’s just some substance made inside us so we can use it for hanging our beds or help light up the cave.”
“It’s still gross.” Twilight said.
Doomie groaned. “Why is it that anything coming off a body is considered gross to you ponies?”
Pinkie shrugged. “I dunno, it’s just how we act.”
Twilight stepped closer. “It’s also because it’s waste that-”
“Waste?” Doomie said. “What’s that?”
Twilight and Pinkie were surprised to hear that. “Y-You don’t know what waste is?” Twilight said.
Doomie scratched his fake hair. “Uh...is it a type of trash you ponies throw away or something?”
Pinkie and Twilight looked at each other before looking back at him. “Don’t you guys throw away anything?” Twilight tried thinking of a way to word this. “You know, anything taken off your body?”
Doomie rubbed his chin. “Uh...besides our ‘green gunk’, not really, we release the energy from our love we have to other changelings by doing the same thing with the green stuff, but other than that...”
Pinkie held him. “You guys don’t even use a bathroom?”
Doomie cocked his head. “What’s a bathroom?”
Twilight dropped her jaw. “You don’t even know what a bathroom is?”
Doomie tried to think about this. “Is a bathroom where ponies go to converse with one another?”
Pinkie laughed. “No, silly. A bathroom is where you go to take showers, or clean your hooves, or where you-”
Twilight coughed and pointed up. “We’re here!”
Doomie and Pinkie looked ahead to see the doors to Canterlot were right in front of them. Doomie looked behind him to see the stairs. “We even walked up the stairs?”
Twilight put her hoof on the door. “Well, come on, Pinkie. We have a wedding to get to.”
“W-What about Doomie?” Pinkie pointed at her disguised changeling. “Is he coming too?”
Twilight looked away. “I don’t really think bringing a random pony in with us is a good idea.”
“But Twilight!” Pinkie whined while Doomie thought about this situation. “We can’t just leave him.”
Twilight sighed. “Look, Pinkie, I’m sure he can stay somewhere while we finish the wedding.”
“But I can’t start a party without him now! I’d be awful to have him not come with us.”
Doomie tapped Pinkie on the shoulder. “Um...Pinkie, I think it’s just best for me not to come.”
“What!?” Both Twilight and Pinkie said, with Pinkie’s being louder.
Doomie looked away. “I-I mean, I’m sure it’d be a great party and all, but...I-I’d rather not have one that’s...well, ya know...”
“T-that’s what?” Pinkie started to tear up. “T-That’s not good enough...o-or one that isn’ that-”
“No, nononono.” Doomie held his hoof under her chin, making her look up at him. “I just want one between the two us and not about two ponies who just blasted my entire family out of here.” To be fair, Doomie still had a slight grudge against the prince and princess. His family may have been jerks to each other, but they were still his family.
“Oh...right…” Pinkie looked down while Twilight looked away and whistled, knowing she was apart of that.
Doomie sighed, knowing this was gonna be bad. “You understand, right?”
“B-But Doomie, I just can’t throw one without you being there, that’d be like baking a cake without all the ingredients, you need all of them just to eat it.”
“Pinkie, I just can’t...I...I…” Doomie started trailing off one he looked deep into Pinkie’s eyes, seeing them start to water up and be as big as ever. He looked away and sighed, knowing that it was either dealing with being in a party about celebrating a wedding and the defeat of his kind or making his one true love sad.
Doomie looked at her again, knowing what he had to do. “A-Alright, Pinkie...I-I’ll be at that party.”
Pinkie immediately pulled him in for a hug, this time watching how hard she was doing it. “Oh thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou!”
Doomie was surprised by the non-death-grip hug. “J-Just tell me when and where...and I’ll be there.”
Pinkie giggled. “It’ll be in the gardens at around nine. Nice rhymes, by the way.” Pinkie then realized something. “H-How will I recognize you?”
Doomie pulled away from the hug and pointed at his flank. “I’ll probably be the only pony with a cutie mark trailing down his leg.”
Pinkie looked at said cutie mark and sighed. “I still don’t get why you chose a vine for your cutie mark, it so doesn’t match your blue body...or your orange hair.”
Doomie shrugged. “At least it stands out.”
“Hey.” Twilight said. “Can we please get a move on?”
Pinkie scuffed the ground. “You promise you’ll be there.”
Doomie pulled her in for a hug. “I promise.”
“Pinkie promise?”
“Uh...yeah...you promise.”
“Me promise?” Pinkie pushed him away. “What do you mean ‘me promise?’”
“Well, your name’s Pinkie, so...it’s a ‘you promise’...right?” Doomie laughed.
“I guess that makes sense.” Pinkie laughed and hugged him again. “Okay then, so it’s a ‘me promise’.”
Doomie nuzzled the side of her face and smiled. “It’s a you promise, but only if you promise we have one together as well.” He moved his face away and touched Pinkie’s nose with his. “Just the two of us…”
Pinkie smiled and rubbed his nose with her’s. “I promise.”
“Doomie promise?”
Pinkie laughed. “Doomie promise? Really?”
Doomie shrugged. “Well, I want my kind of promise too, can’t I have one?”
Pinkie rolled her eyes. “Alright, it’s a ‘you promise' that I will make a party about us.”
They laughed and continued their embrace until Twilight pushed them away from each other. “Pinkie, can we please get inside, I’m not the only one who’s waiting for you, you know.”
“Alright, alright, I’m going.” She looked at Doomie. “I guess this is goodbye?”
Twilight groaned. “Oh for the love of Celestia.”
“Until I meet you again.” Doomie kissed her before he turned around. “I’ll see you soon, Pinkie!” Without another word, he walked down the stairs and into the crowds of ponies.
“Bye bye, Doomie.” Pinkie waved, only to be grabbed by a magic purple aura.
Twilight opened the doors and dragged her in. “You. Me. Castle. Now.”
Oh god, those two are too adorable together.
This just keeps getting funnier and funnier.
why do I think twilight will get another mental breakdown as a result of this
5991665 I sure we're ALL predicting a mental breakdown for Twilight by the end
I just hope it doesn't hit 'Want It, Need It' levels
5991682 lets just hope its not a want it need it on doomie, we don't want to give the changelings any idea's
huh .... we could have used that to cure nightmare moon... and disable celestia... assuming she wouldn't banish the nobles to the moon.... I cant say I wouldnt
I swear, if these two get ANY freakin cuter, my sugar levels are gonna make my heart explode cotton candy and gum drops XD
5991748 Don't you mean esplode, not explode, as we are talking about cuteness?
I'm loving this sooooooo much!
Saw that response coming a mile away
And, for the record, no, they do not all look the same. The ones shown in the show are full of subtle differences.
I'll remind you of that the next time you're eating anything sweetened with honey, Twi
Really? I think the issue is more of him being a guest at the wedding his 'family' almost ruined
Welp. Cute chapter! And I guess blue and orange isn't that bad a combination. Kinda showy; it's more or less the Spitfire-in-Wonderbolts-uniform colours.
Right... I guess I'll just give this one the full run. So here it is: Nyerguds' Patented "Remarks and Corrections" section:
> “Uh...I don’t think he can breath right now.”
It's "breathe"! Why do people keep making that mistake? They don't even sound the same!
> “I-It’s..bleh...it’s fine...huff…”
Two notes, and they go for the whole story, including the chapter titles:
-Always put a space behind an ellipsis. Always. Otherwise, the words connected by ellipses become one big unsplittable block which won't correctly break at the end of a line.
-An ellipsis is always, without exception, three dots.
> “Y-You really mean it?” She asked.
The "she asked" part of this kind of construction is considered part of the sentence it follows. For that reason, unless it's a name, it should not have a capital letter. You should really look up the basic "s/he said" quoting rules. They can be found in the Fimfic writing guide, which can be accessed from every single page on fimfic by opening the "FAQ" dropdown item.
> Doomie shrugged. “Like I said, Twinkle,
> "Twilight, I told you not to-
Even cut off speech needs closing quotes.
> "I have no idea" Doomie continued. "how I wasn’t flung out like the rest of my family.
That needs a comma at the end of the first quoted part, and behind "continued".
> “Don’t you guys throw away anything”
Never end a quote without a punctuation. You should probably use either an ellipsis or a dash at the end here.
> “W-What about Doomie.” Pinkie pointed at her disguised changeling. “Is he coming too.”
Both of these quoted sentences should end on question marks.
5991778
Yep! But autocorrect changed it XD
Normally, I'd say this isn't true love.
But in this case, it may very well be.
We are talking about a species who DEPENDS on a healthy relationship.
So yeah, if I had a girlfriend, I'd want a species who depends on a healthy relationship as manipulative as that makes me sound.
Doomie is a dork.......a lovely dork, and i like him.
Doomie Promise? I am not sure if he really thinks that it works that way, but it is funny.
It is maybe to soon, but if the story is going to be a long one, then i think i make this story a favourite.
Somehow after this chapter the story feels like the story is just about to start.
I don't think Pinkie and Doomie have a healthy relationship. It seems more like a time bomb that will explode once they find out that they don't share any interests except their attraction to each other. And I don't think that Pinkie, being the extreme extrovert she is, would be socially naive enough to not try to establish any deeper common interests.
Also, it's pretty lazy to not describe what Doomie looks like now, and there's no reason not to go deeper into the infatuation that Pinkie and Doomie are physically sharing. You could have had it as Pinkie just trying to non-sexually feel as much love for the changeling while vicariously enjoying his reaction, since love and sex, while related, aren't always combined.
.....My heart......my poor heart.......
Talk...Time
Okay now I have to do this.
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5992087 I'm not so sure about that. I feel like we do not have very much information on what Doomie's interests are, and I strongly suspect there are a lot of things Pinkie enjoys that he has never tried so there are good odds that they will find some common ground as the story goes on.
I'm quickly wondering if Twilight is becoming the audience. Having no clue what they got themselves into, and now stuck for the ride.
All the while saying "REALLY?"
5992616
Wait, how does him having a lot of things that he's never tried that Pinkie enjoys equal common interests? That's more of a teacher-student relationship if anything.
That's better than nothing, but he'd have to be an insanely fast learner to be able to share anything interesting with her after a few months, and being an insanely fast learner almost always requires knowing something similar to what your learning. Since Pinkie's partying is completely alien to his upbringing of pure hatred, it could take him years to learn. The only way I can think of him having any shared interests would be if he was one of the lesser ranked changelings and did nice things for higher up changelings so he could increase his rank through trust. (Trust is highly sought after in when it's a rare trait in a group, as, because of the prisoner's dilemma, it allows people to do things that are otherwise not possible. ) But even then, it would be a lot of work to translate that to making other ponies happy just for the fun of it.
Doomie being left alone without escorts or anything in Canterlot. I don't see this ending poorly at all.
5992659 Things he never tried can quite easily become interests, and a lot of them are not hard to learn. Baking in particular is something he has probably not tried before, can learn fairly quickly, and can do with Pinkie if he enjoys it. Then you have to throw in the fact that Pinkie seems to enjoy just about anything so long as it makes others happy so it is not hard to see this working out if the author wants it to. Sure it is possible that Doomie could decide he doesn't like most of the things that Pinkie's life centers around, but that seems unlikely given the tags.
5992713
Really? He can quickly learn how to use things like ovens that he's never seen before, recognize the right smell, temperature, and time for when he should take a something out of the oven, recognize what spices and what amount of sugar would be best to put in before letting the dough rise, recognize how long to let the dough rise, how to interact with customers, how to handle getting up at 3 am every day, etc.?
I think you just insulted almost every baker by saying that anyone could do their job. And until Doomie comes up with or tries new recipes, there's not much he could say that Pinkie wouldn't already know. And that's assuming changelings have the same taste as ponies, which is unlikely, given their different food sources
And Pinkie enjoys doing things that make other ponies happy. That's not the same as seeing other ponies happy. You can see how well she handled her friends happiness being unrelated to or even against her in Party on One. Not actively sharing common interests could be worse for her than almost anyone else. (She'd probably be clingy.)
Lastly, the tags on the story don't decide what is realistic.
5992755 Baking is not at all the same thing as being a baker. All baking really requires is equipment, ingredients, and instructions which he has a ready supply of for obvious reasons. He does not need to be inventing dishes and dealing with customers, he could be perfectly happy to start by helping out in the kitchen and slowly build up the other skills required to be a full baker over time. All that matters is that he enjoys the work and the happiness he brings to others by doing it and they will have something to build on.
5992817
It also requires a wealth of knowledge usually referred to add 'common sense' about ovens, what is edible, etc. that requires living in a society with baking/cooking and being a species with similar taste.
Also, Pinkie would still know enough about baking that it would still count as a teacher-student relationship until Doomie was a much better baking than most people.
He would definitely enjoy the work, because it would give him food, but his experience would be alien to Pinkie. He could share how the customers felt, and they'd make a good team that way, but then Doomie would just be a tool until he could give away his own work.
Again, it's a student-teacher relationship, which is hard to use as the basis for something romantic. I'm not saying it's impossible, just that it could end up putting enormous stress on both of them, as they would feel isolated until they had something that they cared about talking about together. The only thing I could think of that would give them enough to talk about would be Doomie constantly betraying everyone else's feelings and reactions to things he or Pinkie did around them, which is a bit immoral, and could also lead to more stress for Pinkie given her actions in Party of one.
FLA... *Phone rings* Yes? No. Yes. Ohhhhh. Alright cya. *Hangs up* I thought it had the colors switched.
5992912
I would think that a species that survives on their ability to mimc others would be geneticly predisposed to learning skills quickly. I mean, a temporary shift in personality would be easier to explain away than a sudden loss or change in your talent ( you already mentioned "party of one").
5993129
1. That's a head canon, and they could overcome that with force or mind control spells, which chrysalis seems to do.
2. They could explain their lack of talent by just acting like they're sick.
5992087 Well, she hasn't hit him in the head with a skillet yet... Twice.
I actually feel sorry for Twilight here
5993241 I dunno, she's still kinda being rude about it.
Nope, just reading it
5993605 yeah, she is a bit. but look at her prospective, one of her best friends falls on love with the same creature that brainwashed her brother, nearly ended her friendships, and tried (or at lest it seemed like) to kill her. I'd say that was a rough day.
And now that her friend fell in love with one, I am willing to bet that isn't helping her whatsoever.
but yeah she can do it with out being rude.
5994076
Racist.
5994196 sorry, I didn't meant to sound racist. that wasn't my intent at all
5994222
What? No. I was pointing out that Twilight was racist. I was trying to make funny smart remarks, but I couldn't find a good emote to indicate that with.
Should've gone with a :p
5994242 OOOoohhh!
okay.
Okay that was interesting. And in the end Doomie had a good logic, why not have his own promise?
5994376 did you miss the fact that Doomie beat Pinkie Pie with her own logic...
Rapture is upon us!!!!!
5994470 It's the end of the world as we know it!
Is that a subtle reference to "Thrown Abroad"? If so, I love this story even more for referencing that other 'Changeling meets ponies' fic.
hahaha
Oh this just gets better and better. I can't wait to see what you have for the final chapter!
"Exactly like all his other siblings"? Geez, racist much Sperkle?
5993206 hmm well I do not think he has been repeatedly shot with confetti based artillery yet either
Oh and great story so far to Dr.Atlas and Georg
5991682 Aw c'mon, that'd be hilarious!
rutting in a dumpster *slow claps* Didn't see that one coming.
6025886
They did the nasty in the nasty.
Awesome chapter well done, well done man! Hahahaha!
This is so corny I love it!
6111603
On top of the nasty
Whew, Chryssie should be alright.
Heheh, a long goodbye.
Cya
Raziel-chan
6772418 I've read the first comic arch. Chrysie and her lot survived.
I still don't get 'DoomiePie' and why it is not DoomPie.
... uh... never mind.