Explain...NOW!
“L-Listen, I...Ah...w-we...We can explain...alright...uh…” Doomie pushed Pinkie off to the side and sat up. “We were just...u-uh…”
Pinkie dusted herself off and got on all fours. “W-We were just...talking...to...each other…”
“Y-Yeah, a-and talking on the ground is very...you know...g-good for ponies...r-right, Pinkie?” Doomie smiled as best he could and nudged Pinkie to do the same, but no one in front of them were buying it.
“And the moaning?” Twilight asked, still thinking this was the changeling’s doing.
“Um…” Doomie looked at his other brothers, hoping they could help him out in this, but all they did was stare in surprise, some even snickered. “Moaning is a way...changelings communicate.”
“You seem to be ‘communicating’ with me just fine WITHOUT the moaning!” Twilight stepped forward, making Doomie step back. “Don’t think I don’t know what you did, changeling.”
“Whaddya mean? I-I didn't do anything.” Doomie thought about that statement and coughed. “I-I mean, besides doing...well, ya know…”
“Besides taking advantage of one of my friends for your own sick meal!” Twilight continued making her way to Doomie, making the changeling yelp and take cover behind Pinkie.
Pinkie knew this was getting worse by the second. “Twilight, I-I swear,” Pinkie said. “T-Things just got outa hoof...H-He didn’t try to-”
“Pinkie!” Twilight yelled. “I know you can’t control what you’re saying right now. So move out of the way and we’ll snap you out of it in a minute.”
Pinkie raised a brow. “‘Can’t control?’ Twilight, I’m always in control of myself, except when I’m not, but that’s only when I want to, and right now, I am in full control of what I am...d-does that make sense?”
Twilight was getting closer and closer, making Doomie shake even more. “NO! Stop trying to make her talk for you, changeling!”
“But it’s not me!” Doomie leaned into Pinkie’s ear. “W-What the heck’s wrong with this mare?”
“SEE! You’re telling her what to say right now!” Twilight yelled. “I’m not letting another one of my friends have their brain fried by a monster!”
One changeling in the crowd raised their hoof in the air. “But we didn’t take control of any-”
Twilight turned around and shouted, “I’m talking about your queen!” The changeling slowly put his hoof back down, hoping she wouldn’t come for him next. Twilight looked back at Pinkie and Doomie. “Your queen brainwashed Shining and made him and the rest of my friends think I was a jerk who didn’t know what I was talking about when I said she was evil!”
One changeling in the crowd rolled their eyes. “Some friends.”
“HEY!” Applejack yelled. “How were we suposta know what Cadance acted like? We ain’t even met her.”
A changeling came up behind her. “Yeah, but don’t dat purple mare knowz more about Cadance than you guyz? I mean, you’d think you’d believe her when shez been with dat mare longer den you galz.”
Rainbow Dash flew up to him. “WE thought she was just stressed out with all of this!”
The changeling snickered. “Really? That’s your excuse?”
“It’s NO excuse!” Rarity got back up from the ground and stared directly at the changeling, now enraged with what she had heard. “It’s what we really thought she was like. How could we believe what Twilight was saying when-”
“Oh~ So now you don’t even believe in you friend? That’s pretty cru-”
*HOOF TO THE FACE*
The changeling tumbled right into the arms of his brothers. Another changeling next to him punched Rarity right in the chest, making her fall right into her friends. Both sides glared at one another in complete silence before Rarity yelled, “DESTROY THAT BUG!”
The fight started up again, only this time two ponies and a changeling were the only ones who weren’t taking a part of it, though the three of them didn’t seem to notice. “Changeling,” Twilight said. “I’ve had just about enough of this.” Twilight stared right at him, her horn starting to flare up. “Either you let Pinkie go...or I’ll blast you clear out of Equestria!”
Doomie whimpered and looked up to Pinkie for help. Pinkie bit her bottom lip, trying to come up with something. “Twilight, you need to listen to me, this changeling, maybe even all of them, are just trying to survive, they aren't-”
Twilight stomped the ground. “Pinkie, you need to listen to me. This changeling is brainwashing you and forcing you to love him!”
Pinkie was about to say something, but Doomie got up and said, “But mind controlled love tastes awful.”
“Then how was your queen able to eat my brother's love!?”
Doomie shrugged. “She has a better stomach to handle it? We don’t really know. This whole invasion plan really made more sense on paper...but now...I dunno…”
“Oh...You do know!” Twilight growled. “You and the rest of your kind will pay for what you’ve done!”
“What’d we do?” Doomie then started patting his hooves to simulate counting. “I mean, besides coming in, taking over, ruining a wedding, ponynapping your pink alicorn friend, causing chaos, trying to capture you guys, getting love-”
Pinkie hit him in the shoulder. “Doo-MIE!”
“What?” He rubbed his arm. “I’m just saying that-”
Twilight came in between them and stared down at Doomie. “You’re just saying that you’re all monsters!”
“M-Monsters?” Doomie looked over at Pinkie. “Pinkie...I-I thought you said that-”
“STOP LYING!” Twilight’s horn was getting brighter and brighter. “You’re going to pay for what you did to my friend.”
“B-But I didn't do any-”
“What did I just say!?” Twilight yelled. “I told you to tell the truth!”
Pinkie cringed. “Don’t be so hard on him, Twilight, he-”
“Now you’re making her talk for you again!? That’s it!” Twilight reared back her legs and stomped on the ground, making Doomie fall on his back. He craned his head to the sky to see Twilight, her horn glowing and ready to fire.
Doomie screamed in terror as the light got brighter and brighter. He shielded his face and prepared for the worse. “AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHH!”
“WAIT!” Pinkie ran right between the both of them. Twilight stepped back and dimmed down her horn while Doomie continued screaming in fear. He stopped once Pinkie turned around and literally zipped his mouth shut. “Twilight, he’s telling the truth.”
“Pinkie…” Twilight said. “I know that’s not you talking right now, that’s a changeling controlling your-”
Pinkie grabbed her while Doomie fiddled with the zipper. “He’s not controlling my mind. Don’t you think I’d be talking funny? Or have my eyes change colors? Or have my body turn grey like when Discord controlled us?”
“But Pinkie-”
“No BUTS!” Pinkie shook Twilight and yelled, “I’m not under his control! I’m not brainwashed! and I’m not lying to you when I say this!” She stopped shaking and went nose to nose with her. “I’m in love with that bug!”
“Hmmhmhmhh?” Doomie mumbled through his still zipped mouth.
“In love?” Twilight pushed Pinkie off her. “Pinkie, how could you love something like that?” Twilight pointed at Doomie, who was now using his back legs to get the zipper off. “He’s a changeling whose only purpose is to find a prey and feed off it. Not only that, but how could you fall in love with him this fast?”
Pinkie looked back at him to see that he was now using all his legs to pull on the zipper. “He’s really nice to me. I mean, I don’t think I’ve ever had someone call me cute like that before.”
Twilight sighed. “He called you cute...and that’s why you love him?”
Pinkie nudged Twilight. “It’s more than that, Twilight. He isn’t a bad guy, and I think he really likes...no, loves me too.”
Twilight huffed. “I don’t hear him saying-”
*ZIP*
“AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHH…” Doomie huffed and fell on the ground again. “Okay...now that that’s outta the way…” Doomie stretched again and looked at Twilight. “Purple pony. I don’t know what’s wrong with your brain, but you need to realize that I am not just using that mare for a food source.”
“You’re not?” Both Pinkie and Twilight asked.
Doomie came up to both of them. “I don’t care if I can’t even feed off this pony, she’s the only one I’ve met so far that hasn't run away screaming or has been trying to kill me.” He eyed Twilight while saying that.
Pinkie was astonished. “Doomie?”
“And I AM telling the truth when I say this!” Doomie wrapped his arms around Pinkie and pulled her in for a hug. “I love her…”
Pinkie immediately blushed, feeling her heart beating as fast as his. Twilight could do nothing but stare back in astonishment “C-Changeling...I-I don’t know what to say…”
Doomie let go of Pinkie and crossed his arms. “Well, you can start by apologizing.” He said.
“Apologizing?” Twilight “I shouldn’t be apologizing...I should be BLASTING YOU TO THE GROUND!”
Doomie dropped his jaw. “W-What?”
“You really think I’m gonna believe what you just said!?” Twilight stared daggers into the bug. “If your queen is an evil, lowdown, friendship ruining, hole filled...JERK! Than what makes you think I’d believe ANYTHING you just said!”
“Um...because I’m not her?” Doomie shrugged, not understanding what Twilight was getting at.
Pinkie leaned into Doomie’s ear. “I think she’s mad because of how that bug queen of yours made us think she was acting like a jerk.”
Doomie scratched his chin. “That might explain it…”
Twilight hung her head. “Changeling...I’m giving you one. Last. Chance.” She raised her head, her eyes filled with hate.
Doomie’s brain should have told him to start cowering in fear and beg for his life to be spared, but right now, it was telling him to do something that any brave bug would do right now...run away. “Alright, fine!” He yelled. “You know what! If you want her!”
*FWOOSH*
Twilight gasped as the changeling in front of her turned into an exact copy of Pinkie. “Then come get her…” With that, the impostor Pinkie grabbed real Pinkie’s arm and ran through the fighting crowd.
“D-Doomie!” Pinkie yelled, nearly dodging every kick or punch that were coming there way. “What are you doing, and nice voice by the way.”
Doomie then hoisted her on his back. Her front legs dangling one side while her back legs hung from the other. “I’m not letting some mare like her separate us...and...thanks?”
“But Doomie, maybe there’s some way to reason with-”
*ZAP*
Doomie almost lost his footing as a shot of purple magic came right past him. Pinkie glanced over to see Twilight running right at them, her eyes now glowing white and her horn preparing for another shot. “Uh...Doomie…” Pinkie whispered.
Doomie noticed and gulped. “Y-Yeah…” He said with nothing but fear in his voice.
Pinkie then got in sitting position and wrapped her arms around Doomie’s neck. “Step on it!”
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I don’t know about you guys, but if I thought someone was taking advantage of one of my friends...I’d be pretty angry too.
Not only that, but I think Twilight is kinda upset knowing that her brother was pretty much the first victim of this, and adding another friend to the list might break the mare's mind.
5949680 Wait... This isn't a one-shot? I thought this was a one-shot! o.o
I'll read this new chappie later~ :3
Well that was a pretty circular argument.
Thank you for this. Thank you.
Well, this was fun and funny.
Is it weird I'm now picturing Doomie punching Chrysalis out to prove to Twilight that not all Changelings are like Chrysalis?
YAY! There is going to more of this! Please have someone say something that puts a very 'disturbing' image of Shining and Chrysalis in Twilight's head.
CUE THE MUSIC!
Behold! The funny one has returned!
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I told a team member who was planning to ask out my friend that I'd break his legs if he hurt her, I don't think he ever asked her... Whoops
However glad I am to see this fic receiving the praise and support it should, there are still two things that irk me: A. Twilight's a little bit too OoC in this chapter, and B. I personally think that the story would have ended a lot better as a one-shot, like many comedy-tagged stories do. But still, I don't mind these too much, so keep on doing what you're doing!
Really liked the way everybody start fighting back again when the Changelings tell the rest of the again 6 that they were bad friends to Twilight.
Quick, to the nearest wedding chapel!
You either need to add an "f" or the word "off". Only thing I noticed.(and only time I've ever pointed something out, so feel special)
This was an interesting chapter. And...I can actually see being angry like Twilight. All I got to say other than bring out the next one ASAP.
haha i cannot get enough of this. also twilight stop being a b____
RUN DOOMIE RUN,
5949680 Yeah. I'd be too. I wouldn't try to kill them though. I'd pin them to the ground in a full nelson after getting a few punches in and forcing them to confess without torturing them. At least, I'll try to.
Let's see more Dooime and Pinkie. Wait what would you call a pony changeling? A foal...or a grub?
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Same here.
You could see this going on in the show! Canterlot Wedding the MOVIE!
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5949851 Keep them immobilized and question them thoroughly. That's the ticket!
Will politics be involved? Something like... Ummm, a Changeling rebellion?
5949725 Hahahah! I really love that music! xD
5949698 Yep. And Darkness below do I ever hate the "the ruler is evil so the race is evil" argument.
~My Little Hypocrite: Double Standards are Magic!~
TS: EXPLAIN YOUSELF!
D&P: Well, you see
TS: DIE!!!
5949757 Considering that she was acting like a spoiled brat, had no evidence, and generally barged in and called her EVIL EVIL EVIL...
Which true in hindsight, but none of them had the audience's knowledge except that she's been acting like a jealous sibling the entire episode.
This is both hilarious and moving at the same time. Well done!
Meh. The mindless rage feels a little OOC.
And now, comes the plot twist where they enter Canterlot Throne Room earlier than expected, only to find Celestia, Luna, Cadence, Shining, and Chrysalis sitting at a round table, having a tea party while nobody's in there.
Then, once they see Pinkie and Doomie, they have some explaining to do, also.
"Um... the war's over?" Celestia said to the two unexpected guests.
"Yeeeeah... we just called it a truce." Chrysalis added.
"I had sex with two different mares... but one was for her survival, and the other one is the princess of love and understood, then let it happen with her consent... and maybe she even decided to, um... join in? Eh, I'm not complaining..." Shining Armor to nopony in general.
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Damn, Twi. Why ya gotta be like dat ta poor Doomie?
5950086 mindless rage? You mean 'THIS'
Is ooc?
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This IS Twilight your talking about right?
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It is difficult to say, since Twilight can sometimes approach a situation from an objective, logical point of view, and succumb to stress and become an utter fool. I would have liked her to stick to the former, but I suppose it would be entirely in-character for her to snap like this although it could have been handled better.
5950131 I see your point. Though she undeniably has the tendency to over react in a situation where she has no control over, pinkie's pinkie senses and being tardy for example.
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That would be because she had a firm belief in the science of everything, and thought anything at all could be explained with sufficient investigation, and that she is a perfectionist neat freak with an ambiguous disorder that includes obsessive compulsive tendencies.
MOOOOOORE!!! Please... I will wait...
Do something Pinkie!!!
5950087 Hey! No! Bad Justin! The author is clearly insane (granted, it's a good kind of madness, but still), and you should know better than to give ideas to crazy people! What were you thinking?!
((But seriously, that sounds like a hilarious idea. Hopefully, what the author has in mind is even better.))
MOAR
5950148 its ironic really, that she has so much faith in science despite being a predominantly purple pony unicorn
I always feel more sorry for the changlings whenever Twilight is involved.
Now we await the elaborate chase sequence. Nice moment with the changlings pointing out the Mane Six's faults. Totally in character with Pinkie to do the mouth zipper. A nice call back and good timing with Doomie changing into Pinkie to escape.
5949680 This is getting better and better isn't it?
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Indeed, but magic and science are not quite so different, and in a world like this, they correlate~
RUN boy,RRRRUUUUUUNN!!
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5949716 Mhm, maybe something along the lines of, "I don't care you're the goddamn queen! Because of your boneheaded plan, I found the ONE MARE that won't run at the sight of the changeling and now I CAN'T BE WITH THAT MARE!"
TS: THAT CHANGELING IS RIDING MY FRIEND!
*ZAAAP*
TS: Heheheh... oops?
Or...
TS: YOU MADE ME SHOOT PINKIE! GRAW!
Instant love story!
You know what? It's Pinkie Pie, so let's say that it could happen like that
Chase sequence incoming! Que Benny Hill music.
I envy your expertise, my friend; you're an excellent writer I wish I were a good writer, but I suck. You say that you have had twenty-one stories with the same success rate you're a prodigy.
All I am asking is how do you make such an amazing stories I have watched up to season five of M.L.P.F.M but I can't write any of the casts personalities how do you do it so well. I have two books one which is split down the middle when it comes to liking and disliking, and the other is all dislikes. Mind you I do not have an editor or proofreader but nor do you and you're legendary.
I had one of my stories reviewed, but it wasn't a good review. The main thing he complained about was that I couldn't get the character personalities right I have a broad vocabulary, and I can make my stories flow, but no one likes them. WHAT AM I DOING WRONG?
Could anybrony help me out?
By the way love your book and I can't wait till the next chapter is complete it has an excellent progression flows nicely, and it has action and escalation. I could not compete with you if this were a competition I would have given up in the first chapter you wrote that was awesome. Love your work and do not become disheartened like me.
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excellent