Pinkie Pie. A pony who is random beyond belief and even rips apart reality itself. She is truly a master of her fate and lets no pony or anything tell her otherwise. She has all sorts of neat abilities and doesn't flaunt them on purpose.
Yet, one of her abilities she keeps a mystery from every pony else. A ability that would shake the very foundation of the pony world. Of any world for that matter. It's the secret to why all of her concoctions, hers and the cakes, are so good. The mystery behind it is a lot more... disturbing than you would have guessed.
She even gave everypony a hint at the last Halloween event.
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The ending was funny, and pretty well written.
Unfortunately all of the story other than the basement scene between Twilight and Pinkie was pretty pointless, disjointed, and written in several different tenses, as if you didn't know how the story was going to be told.
I guess what to get out of this: you're good at writing a story, bad at explanations within narration.
Everything after that last line break was great, everything before it....not so much.
6144424 Thanks for the input. Yea I'm still kind of trying to get the hang of explanations. I have it in my head, it's just I'm not good at putting it forward.