This story describes the life of Aeros starting from his 10th until his 20th.
There are some ship/suggestive themes in this fic, as well as some dark elements in the 3th chapter.
all hail secret pony for supplying awesome drawings for my fic! http://secret-pony.deviantart.com/ for her DA page.
The story is mainly about my OC starting with his youth untill now. the story will be published in different parts (i can't exactly predict how many chapters will follow)
Starting the 3th chapter Twilight plays an important role in the story too. so i added her in the main character list too.
Chapters (4)
nice though there are a few formatting changes you can make to make it better
first start a new paragraph every time someone new speaks EX:
pony 1 " something something something something something something something something"
pony 2 " something something something something something something something something"
also use quotation marks "speech" rather than apostrophes 'speech'
the apostrophes are sometimes difficult to see and tend to hide within paragraphs the quotation marks are a lot easier to see
Will mark for read later
Nice story! Loved it
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I really don't mean to come across as snobbish but to use single quotation marks ( ie ' ' ) is perfectly acceptable in some places (the UK, etc)...
Of course, you're the first person I've come across who's actually given a reason to use double quotation marks, so that's interesting! (other than just "it's regional/personal preference")
I think once the dialogue is spaced properly it will be much easier to see. Though I'm not quite sure the story needs to have the quotation marks around Aeros' thoughts slotted in between the action? From the italics it's fairly obvious what it is.
That being said, not bad!
Good story, but I would definitely recommend getting yourself an editor.
592287 i actually didnt know that,learn something new every day and yes thoughts are fine without them, ive seen many different variations to indicate thoughts
well fuck
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Sup Hikikamori?
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Nothing really just reading you?
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i was more aiming for the motives of your first comment.