Lost in the War

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Twilight's friends are drafted to fight a war. She has been visited by the same stallion four times, and each time with bad news. Will his fifth visit be any more pleasant?

Rated 'Teen' just in case.

TwiDash....sorta.

Also: Thanks to Rawg98 for editing/prereading.

Thanks to WovenWord for the story that had a help in inspiring this.

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Silent Shade #1 · Apr 16th, 2015 · · · Rain ·

I felt the lack of comments on this good story deserved a comment.

I liked the theme that it's necessary to have to go to war in order to protect the ones and country you love. Personally, I don't feel like the shipping was necessary to tell this story but in this case it definitely easier to make Rainbow's potential death more of a threat to Twilight's limited mental and emotional stability in a short amount of time and words. It could have been done without shipping, but the time needed would have taken away from the quick type of read the story is going for. Not that I don't mind the ship, but ironically (considering all her ships, she should be called Admiral Rainbow Dash) I have found Rainbow the most likely to end up single.

When I think about what potential symbolism the story has I can't help but notice that the story is called Lost in the War and the chapter title is called Rain. What is missing or lost from that chapter title? Bow, as in RD. Is this combination a foreshadowing to Rainbow's fate during the War? I believe so, it seems obvious and intentional. I just can't help but feel this connection means something more - RD's response to her disappearance is a rather vague response to somepony she loves that was obviously worried. But RD may simply not want to talk about the war, which makes sense for obvious reasons.

One final bit of analysis from me looks again at the word Lost. I can safely say after looking at the definition of lost on Google Search that all of the Mane Six were 'Lost in the War'.

Lost: adjective

1. unable to find one's way; not knowing one's whereabouts.
unable to be found
(of a person) very confused or insecure or in great difficulties.

2. denoting something that has been taken away or cannot be recovered.
having perished or been destroyed.

Obviously some of the Mane Six cannot be recovered as they have been 'destroyed' or killed in the war. Rainbow Dash was lost in the sense of literally being unable to find her way, for a time, and I feel that she lost something to the war that simply isn't stated - but that in particular is just a hunch. And Twilight, was lost without ever having to leave her library. Each time one of her friends left she became confused and her mind was always gone and lost from her head with worry when they were on the battlefield; and when they had their funerals, Twilight lost a little bit of herself each time. Rainbow did as well from these, but she left before Fluttershy and Rarity; I wouldn't count out that she would have heard the news anyway which probably fueled her awesome wrath during the war.

So in short, Rainbow Dash probably has PTSD and Twilight is depressed but may get better now that Rainbow is back. I say may because RD again probably has PTSD and who knows what Berserk Buttons she has.

This story I could see having an one-shot sequel of equal size.

9.9/10 I liked it a lot.