Twilight is your average bookworm. Smart, Studious, and a pretty persistent grammar nazi! One day she comes face-to-face with Derpy Hooves, and some... unexpected emotions begin to rise inside her. However soon Rarity begins to show her feelings for Twilight. How will this all end? Who will come out as the couple in this exciting story of the classic love triangle!
/NOTE:/ The first 2 chapters are somewhat rushed, but don't worry it gets really good from chapter 3 and so on! And again don't worry the first 2 chapters will be revised and refurbished after the series is complete! Enjoy reading!
WARNING: Contains attempt at rape, Twilight's bloodied body, and lots of Ballpoint (You'll understand if you read the Fiction)
Chapters (10)
So um, something's wrong with the spacing as you can see
I'm honestly trying to fix it, but if i can't in time, sorry for the inconvenience
I take it you might need a proof reader?
lol, a story about a grammar nazi needs a grammar nazi. Oh, the irony
Well I quite enjoyed that and I look forward to reading the next chapter
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Well played.
this is good and all but it feels like its moving WAAAY to fast, and they said my 1st chapter was fast(even though it was supposed to) but this went way to fast x-x add more detail and don't make twi move so fast and this could be a really great story
Intriguing concept. I'm looking forward to how it turns out.
Why thank you for the feedback, I will try my best!
I like it so far, but it feels kind of rushed. Take some time to go over it and expand a little more. Keep up the good work!
and so the plot thickens...
So Rarity is into Twilight, Twilight into Derpy,and god knows what derpy is into with having a kid(if she has it in this story
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i must agree with a few ponies before me, it feels rushed. i'm sure twilight as seculded as she is wouldn't really jump and something like this, let alone with a pony she barely knew... but i'm interested at where this will go
aha! the plot thickens... and all is far in love and war... who will win, we shall see. moar please!
hmmmm
this is extremely rushed
but interesting
muy interesting
oh god
a love triangle between Twilight, Rarity and Ditzy?
this
is
whack
I wonder how this will end..
Can't wait for the next chapter! I wonder if rarity will make a move on twilight?
Will there be?
Why yes of course! But due to sudden mouse malfunctions, my mac has gone into a state of panic so I can't get another chapter up quite yet, Sorry for the long wait everypony.
Mac has been fixed, and get ready for this next big shocker! But um... if that's ok with you...
...right after homework
Chapter three is up and get ready for some twists!!
I agree with others; give more indication of what's making Twilight attracted to Derpy.
It's perfectly fine if the attraction is purely physical! Derpy gets a lot of exercise, walking everywhere in town!
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Thanks for the feedback, I'll make sure to add that in my next chapter!
and then nothing sexual happened.
the end.
Awesome work! i was sketchy at first but now i think this has some really great potential...
i love your representation of derpy, and her two personalities... Keep it up!
Also FYI there's only 540,000 words in the English language (and it seems that's what ponies speak)
i wonder how rarity's gonna take this...
SPOILER You'll find out in chapter 4 through 5
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And thank you so much, again for the feedback!
Chapter 4 is up and running!
I hope you enjoy this next installment, and I look forward to writing the 5th chapter! Let me know what you think about it!
Moar
35624 great! keeps me very entertained! good job!
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And thank you, it means a lot to me that you're enjoying my story!
A great story so far, I can't wait to see where this goes! I really do enjoy the story of 2 mares and their feelings for each other. I especially like how they both like each other but don't know it yet! Keep up the great work, I can't wait to read more in this series! But if I may ask, what inspired you to write such an odd shipping story?
Overall a great story with much potential!
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Well thanks, I can't wait either how this turns out
But seriously thanks for the feedback! And as for how it came to me? I wanted to make a shipfic of course, But I wanted to make one with the weirdest possible couple. When you look at the title, "Opposites Attract And you look at who's in love with who, It makes since right? Twilight the bookworm in love with Derpy the Dunce.
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And as for YOU!
lol, Neither can I bro... neither can I.
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Interesting, and what gave you the thought of a Multi-Personality Derpy?
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Oh well when I started writing the 3rd chapter, I wanted to show a part of Derpy that nopony else knows about. I was sick of hearing so many bronies disrespecting Derpy, especially being that Derpy Is my favorite pony. So I decided to create a second half of Derpy that was intellectual and smart just like Twilight so the story wouldn't show Twilight as somepony falling in love with a "retard" *and I use the term Lightly*
All in all I wanted a smart Derpy, something that would make readers go, "Oh wow that's a great idea to make Derpy Hooves smart!" I'm not doing it just to show off anything *what's there to show off? lol* I just want to get readers more open minded about the possibilities of opposites... even with characters themselves. Thank you for taking the time to read this, and more importantly my fan fiction, I shall keep this wonderful story up and running for as long as I can muster!
Well... So far I've planned out 9 chapters, Although My goal is 10 at least. We'll see how far I'll go before I decide to quit!
If I may, were there any authors that inspired you? And by author I mean by Fan Fiction wise.
Eheh. Yeah there were a few.
Pat Roison, "AppleShy"
Sparx, "A League of Their Own"
Samsara, "Study Buddies"
Abalidoth, "Causality"
Suddenly...
...WRITER'S BLOCK!!
Sorry it's going to be a while before I get the 5th chapter up.
Fullmetal...you beat me to that response
Well it's been quite a while since my last story update, but I'm back and writing up the 6th chapter outline as we speak!
Chapter 5 is up and ready for y'all readers to... well... read!
Have a great day, and enjoy your story!
RARITY YOU RUINED IT ALL
nice, i like that fic, you did a nice job, and it's nice to hear that you are very active with this story.
RAAARIIIIITYYYYYYY!!! WHYYYYYYY?!
And you scared me for a second there. As soon as Derpy flew off, I immediately thought "who's going to take care of Dinky!?!?!?"
Good chapter overall, I enjoyed reading it
I will lawyer for Ditsy! Rarity will spend the rest of her days in house arrest!
i liked it a lot! keep it up!