Rainbow Dash Born to Blue Sky and Thunder, as she is grown she takes over her father position for be a guardian due from being ill. She is sent away from home, meets some new friends. Will Rainbow Dash get to home or not? Find out soon.
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Taking your story down and then reposting it will not stop "rude" comments.
The "rudest" comments are usually laced with wonderful advice to improve your story. Rude comments are a part of criticism and its best to use those comments to improve your writing. Just keep writing and listening to the comments and improve yourself. Or just take down your story and don't put it back up. It's up to you.
~PinkieLunaShy
My bad on the Dying Husband i go edit and fix it thank you
While the idea is great, your grammar leaves a bit to be desired. While I feel like I could understand this if I tried, there are some obvious things that could be corrected. While I can understand misspelling a few words, or using the wrong case occasionally, "grasses" is definitely not a word. I suggest editing more, or maybe even getting advice from another writer. I STRONGLY agree with PinkieLunaShy, and am of the opinion that so called "rude" comments are most of the time one of the most helpful tools you have to improve your writing. Realize that they're not antagonizing you, they're helping you out.
-MLPFan
I understand and im trying to improve my Grammar and Spelling skills. I am diagnosed with Autism which is a brain Disorder which is also a learning Disability , so I may not be perfect but im proud of my work and trying.
were is chapter 3?
Thank you for your respond i forgot to submit Chap 3, you should see it now. Happy Reading!
Thank you! :)
5607927 :
What he said. Stay in the fight, work on it. Trivia: George Patton was afflicted with undiagnosed dyslexia (go find a large library that has Carlo D'Este's Patton: A Genius for War and check it out). On a personal note, one of the smartest and toughest coppers I ever worked with couldn't write a grammatically-correct sentence at gunpoint (which is why I ended up doing our paperwork at End-Of-Watch), but he could sweet-talk folks out of going off without ever raising a hand to them (and put 'em on the ground and in cuffs without a scratch if they raised a hand to him!).
I don't want to sound mean, but do you have somebody you can trust that you can work with as an editor or a prereader? Somebody who can work with you on the spelling and grammar issues, and help you build this story? You've got something here, and it's got the potential to be a marvelous alternate-universe take on Dash, but right now, it's kind of hidden behind the spelling and grammatical issues, and the set-up needs to be fleshed out. A good editor can help you with that, if the two of you can trust each other.
(Oh - you may want to add the "Alternate Universe" tag, since Rainbow in your story grew up differently from the Rainbow in the show canon...)
But, whatever you decide to do... Keep after it - if you stumble, then at least make sure you stumble forwards, then catch your breath and take another step. You WILL win!
5607745 That is my bad, I'm trying to fix and improve her story.
Right so i do have a editor which is Frostbite moon, She is a great friend of mine :)