My little pony: Celestia's secrect

by Pony paladin

Celastia's secrect

My little pony: Celastia's secrect
In Equestria's capital city canterlot is the magnificent palace where the royal princess sisters Celestia and Luna live and reign with a loving hoof over all who live in Equestria.

But at the moment were Princess Celestia not in canterlot castle but in Celestia's School for Gifted Unicorns and gave a very special lesson in teleportation magic.

On a large blackboard was shown a picture of a filly with a quill sticking out of the back along with a bottle of cider "and therefore my dear students is the reason why you do not drink cider, write a letter and teleport at the same time" said a white alicorn with a multi colored mane and a sun cutie mark.

All the students had a look of disgust on their faces and some even pushed their drink away from them "thank you princes for you very insightful leasson" said a very light brown mare with a black mane and a quill and paper cutie mark as she bowed to princess Celestia.

"I hope it wasn't too much trouble for you" she said and looked up at the ruler "oh not at all" said the princess with a smile "I always find fun to give a lesson" but if anypony just looked a little closer they would notice a hint of sadness in her smile "but if you would excuse me I have some important matters to take care of".

"Oh, of cause you majesty" said the mare and stepped aside and as Celestia walked out she heard the school bell ring telling the students that they could go home "before you all go" said the mare from inside the room "I want you all to write a report on what the princess told you all and it must have at least 1000 words" and when the mare was finished all the students gave a sound of disappointment.

After Celestia had returned to the castle she met up with her sister Princess Luna who was on her way up to the moon and sun tower so that her and celestia could raise the moon lower the moon "good evening sister" she said as she saw Celestia.

"Good evening Luna" responded Celestia but sounded a little sad "is there something wrong sister?" Asked Luna worried since it was unlike her sister to sound like this.

"Are something the matter sister?" Asked the princess of the night "you sound troubled" Celestia turned to her sister with a smile "no Luna there is nothind wrong" she said but Luna didn't believe her.

"Are you sure?" Luna asked once again and raised an eyebrow "yes Luna I am completely sure" said the princess of the sun and walked to the tower to lower the sun for the day.

"Understood sister, but if you ever need to talk I shall be ready to listen" said the princess of the night and followed her sister.

After she had lowered the sun and left equestria to her sister for the night she went to her bedroom that was guarded by two of her most trusted guards "good evening you majesty" said guards pony one "good evening sirs" said the princess of the sun and looked tired.

"I would like to go to bed for the night" she said as she entered her room and the guards nodded but didn't notice a shadow go in together with Celestia.

After she had entered the room she used her magic to take a box from a shelf and used a spell to open it and inside the box was a few pictures "how I would wish I didn't have to send you away" thought Celestia and looked at the picturs with a sad face. But she didn't notice that the shadow was lying on the wall and was looking over her shoulder to see the picturs with her.

And as Celestia came to the last pictur the shadow got to big red eyes as if it became suprised for on the pictur was Celestia in a hospital room with a newborn purple unicorn filly and looked at it like she had made her the happiest mare in the world.

"I would give anything to get you back to me, in the way we was meant to be.... my beloved daughter, Twilight Sparkle" and when Celestia said it the shadow went to the balcony door so fast that the other pictures fell to the floor and the picture of Twilight vanished together with the shadow.

Celestia hurried over to the balcony doo and closed it "I hope it wasn't who I think it was" she said to herself "no it can't be him, he's gone for good" she thought and took one of the pictures that fell to the floor that showed her and a gray unicorn stallion with a black mane and a red curved horn, it was a picture of the shadow king Sombra.

Far away in the mountains along the icy wastelands of the crystalempire the shadow is entering a cave and take the form of King Sombra "he he he, those fools thought they had destroyed me" said Sombra as he walked into the cave with an evil smile.

"They know nothing of the powers of dark magic" he continued "but they will soon enough" then he walked over to a throne made out of black crystals "and Celestia thought she could hold it hidden from me, and I knew there was something special about her" and then he closed his eyes and thought back to when he tried to reclaim the crystalempire.

But then he suddenly open his eyes and have a look of pain in his face "curse that princess, using the power of love, but that will soon mean nothing now that I have finally found her..... my daughter" he said and looked at the picture of Twilight.

Comments

[nioniosbbbb]

Oooh snap. Au tag?

[DarthEquus]

This needs work. Capitalization, punctuation and tense need several corrections to make the story flow better. Come on, you can do it. Polish it. Go one extra step.

[Pony paladin]

5550606 well this was my first attempt on a one-shot so thank you for the comments and this is also kind of a prolog to a future fic of mine

[Pony paladin]

5549264 Huh?

[nioniosbbbb]

5551783 I mean to say where's the Alternate universe tag. I was also surprised at the origins you picked for Twilight.

[Pony paladin]

5551790 Oh well that will be explained in the sequal story I'm planning

[Hopeful Soul]

Sorry this took so long. Good work!

[nioniosbbbb]

5551979 No what I meant is your story should have the Alternate Universe tag. Unless you can explain why Night Light and Twilight Velvet aren't there.

[Pony paladin]

5552255 thanks, I'm glad you like it

[Pony paladin]

5552345 I can and they are also there

[June]

You spelled "Celestia" wrong in the title.

[Pony paladin]

6076087 I did?

[June]

6077000 Yep, and in the chapter title. You said "Celastia" instead of "Celestia".

[Pony paladin]

6077393 Ok, I'll better fix that thanks for telling me

[_____________]

I added this to my 'Very Fanfictiony Fanfictions of fanfiction' library.

[Pony paladin]

6227544 Huh?

[_____________]

6228965 This fanfiction. It's delightfully fanfictiony among other fanfictions.

[Pony paladin]

6229635 Oh, it just confused me a little, so I take it you liked it?

[_____________]

6229655 In all the fanfiction's fanfictiony glory of fanfiction, I dub it to be a very fanfictiony fanfiction among other fanfictions so of course I enjoyed it!

[Pony paladin]

6229780 You lost me there

[Outa-here]

This story has promise if you're willing to put in the work necessary to fix it. First, go here: The Writer's Resource Group. Click Forums then Internet Resources. You'll find a great deal of things there like spell checkers, grammar correction tools, composition, tense and syntax aids. Through these and a little work you'll be able to improve what you create. Good luck to you and keep writing!

[Pony writer]

I feel like I've read this before and liked it then, too

[Pony paladin]

6360783 I'm happy to hear that

[Pony writer]

6361062 Good story, it deserves more love

[Pony paladin]

6361073 Have you read the sequal?

[Pony writer]

6361077 no...

[Pony paladin]

6361398 Well, any question I might have left unanswered will be explained in that one and the first chapter is out

[Pony writer]

6361403 Ok I'll check it out, thank you